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Published: 2013-04-02 04:13:48 +0000 UTC; Views: 7342; Favourites: 659; Downloads: 0
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drew this while listening to the thunder outside~last piece of my ap art concentration
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wow, thank you so much for writing this critique...
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So I guess I'll let it out. All of it. Isn't that what a critique is for?
To begin, I'll discuss your originality score. To tell you the truth, people crying in the rain has been done before, and rain is always associated with this type of cathartic experience. The character is very normal looking, and so is the background.
I guess the "normalness" of the work should be discussed via technique. While the rain and reflection are your strongest points, your anatomy and figure, which is the heart of the work, is your weakest. Two things bother me about the figure: A: The breasts are exaggerated and don't flow smoothly to the chest (in other words, its sorta a big bulge instead of flowing... you know). The head also seems a little small in relation to the body. This is probably do to the fact that you moved the forehead down and (for what reason I'm not sure) eliminated the eyes and nose. If you want to be knit picky, the hair would flow downward in the rain, not bounce back up.
Because of the small mistakes in the work, the impact is greatly handicapped. It's hard to get over the details when the big picture seems to good to be true.
As for your vision, the part of the work I can't see, it was OK. This vision isn't your own, but that of many people. This isn't necessarily bad, but what is bad is that you limited yourself. You could have set this girl in a city street, with people walking past her, or made the entire thing cartoony to balance the anatomy mistakes. A small tilt of direction could have changed the entire work.
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wow, that has got to be the most harsh but fair critique i've ever gotten! 
i completely agree with you that my piece lacks originality in every way, i'll make sure to come up with refreshing in the future. additionally, i think the chest was the part i had the most trouble with... i couldn't find a reference for this pose so i just had to improvise. when i get the chance, i'll try my best to edit it
i definitely restricted myself with this piece, and i do think it could've been better. thank you again for writing this because it's motivated me to work even harder
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No problem! I'm glad to hear I was encouraging. Keep developing your style- it's great. I guess I need to keep up with my cartooning style too..
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AMAZING!!!! You have a gift this is beautiful you are amazing at connecting emotions to your art
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Your art is Perfection. Β THey are all so powerful, and emotional Β Ive never seen someone so talented at letting their art cause emotions
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Breathtakingly beautiful... 
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Oh man I really like this piece here. So much can be told from a scene like this. Very inspiring.Β
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Rain. Falling upwards. Absolutely offputting! Direction of the strokes matters a whooooole lot!
Otherwise this is amazing and I adore it.
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I love the amount of emotion you portrayed in the piece~! <3
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Sense of freedom!! Beautiful and purely refreshing.Β
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This is a very nice piece, more effective for being simple. Adding anything else would draw attention away from the central figure.
Your work with the water, especially the ground water is superb.
As has already been said, the breasts look slightly wrong and draw attention away from the whole scene, but I can't really say much, I make the same mistake myself
I disagree with the comment on the hair needing to look flat. To me the hair gives a sense of movement, as if she has just thrown her head back to scream her frustrations at the very stars themselves.
Altogether this is a nice piece and but for a couple of minor points, could have been great.
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This deserves a fav simple for being exactly how i feel right now
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wow, this is such an honor!! thank you so much
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YouΒ΄re more then welcome!
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This is amazing !
It gives really strong feelings by looking at it. I mean, it's like some of our own feelings deep inside us are realeased just by looking at it... Huh... If what I'm saking makes sense. X')
The way you did the water is impressive, it just add to this deep feeling in the picture I was talking about.
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haha wow, thank you so much!!
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OH MY GOD THE LIGHTING AND COLOURING AND THAT REFLECTION ASDKLJSDLK EVERYTHING IS PERFECT AICHAN, MY GAWD YOU'RE TALENTED PFFFFT
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Amazing work and I just love the reflection as it really jumps out at you.
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wow this is full of emotions. I really like it. good job.
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Love the deep blues, very relaxing vibe i get from this picture...
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A picture tells a thousand words. This is exactly how I feel at this moment.
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wow, thank you so much...i'm extremely sorry... i'll be praying for your father, so please stay strong and don't be down
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Thank you again. I really appreciate your kind words of encouragement.
Also thank you for the cake and llama badges. If you like, I can type up a short story for one of your works.
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no problem! don't think you need to give me anything in return
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Thanks. Just offering my hand in return. By the way, I love your avatar.
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This is really good! I love the execution of the water textures and the lighting on her skin! I also must say that I'm glad you didn't add any blood or a dismembered arm. I think that would have taken away from the feeling of the composition. Nicely done!
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thank you!!
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neat you are inspired to make a cool art like this from listening to thunder outside
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