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Published: 2013-02-17 05:37:08 +0000 UTC; Views: 27753; Favourites: 951; Downloads: 0
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WARNING: OLD ART!! The art and comments in this Deviation may no longer represent the artist's current views or interests.
Homework for LASALLE College of the Arts: After weeks of brainstorming with the voice actors I am finally satisfied with the script. Here is the final storyboard for my animation major ... which will NEVER be finished because trying to animate 10 minutes by hand at 12 fps by one person will take it right out of you.
--Sak
All characters and artwork Β© Shamine Athena King
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It's really difficult to say as the storyboard went through several different iterations, and some of the panels are recycled from earlier versions. Days. Days and days, for sure. I wish I could be more specific but this was years ago when I drew this; nowadays I have a turnout of a day or two max, but I haven't had to do something this long or exhaustive yet.
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i've watched the animation/VA version of this and i freaking love it! Way to go, SAK!
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TYPO!!!
LOLZ...Sorry I'm have OCD when it comes to grammar.
But anyway this story board is very entertaining to read and since I've listened to the voice cast I feel that this short is going to be epic!
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Saw the video! It was amazing, and the voices for Santiago, James, and Louis were perfect!!!
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"Oh, are those your new uniforms?"
Best lines EVER. surrendering to the village idiot and all that. I love Louis's wit, and your voice actor does an awesome job with all his sass. ALL your voice actors are awesome, and it's so cool to watch your project develop and see the story boards and the concepts~
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I love that I keep this on my DeviantWatch. For some reason, your story line, your characters, your everything, about Honour Amongst Thieves, brings me a smile on a rotten day. Thanks!
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I'm absolutely happy to hear that. 
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INCROIYABLEMENT FANTASTIQUE MOVIE! 0__0
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again another comment:
by comparing this video:
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to your new one
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the old one had much more action inside, there was a really fight while the fight between Louis + James + Santiago in the new storyboard was more just mocking. it is still its funny, but it looses a bit of its seriousness.
of course I have no idea how it would influence the sense and the ending/continuing of the story, but I would just say that there should be a bigger conflict, fight scene...just saying, but still GREAT work
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Everyone goes to an animation school to "animate fight sequences and explosions and high-speed car chases". In other words, mainstream media cries out for it and its the sort of things that make prospective companies roll their eyes. Anyone can animate a fight sequence. I'd like to think that the message I'm trying to get across is a lot clearer now in the second and final version, which is the most important point to me.
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aww, you have to upload the final animation! awesome *__*
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AAAHHH c'est super !!! I love your story, your characters, it's all very awesome !! even the voice are good choice ;D
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I forgot to mention this! I really really appreciate the change to the James-with-spyglass thingy. The toss was funnier I'll admit, but this way it just speaks volumes of how discipline-minded he is.
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Wow, this has seen a lot of drastic changes! If memory serves, way more than the last two. I like a lot of stuff, anyway here are some comments.
As for the three churchmen generally: the addition is a good direction: it explains Santiago's little pause better, also why he's opening the chest: he's working for the church and gets his orders from them. ALSO why he's taking it to the catedral. It was easy to miss the ealier hooded peeps, visually at least (methinks you had prayers scripted in though but even then the clarity is better this way). Some gripes however:
* the inquisition guy's look might be a bit too, I dunno, executionerish? Shouldn't he have some sort of religious insignia/props? This makes his grabby hands at the gold potentially confusable: instead of three factions of the church vying for the gold it could look like a light-fingered hireling.
* "Take the gold" etc. A very minor thing: could he say "Take this" or "Take it" instead to be more natural? It's all very obvious he's talking about the gold.
That's LOUIS?!? It took me a few seconds to get why he was there, but when I did I loved the change. Great job. This rids you from one consequenseless minor character in the beginning as well as sets Louis' introduction apart from James', and sets mood for his character. Wonderful. With his snide little comments it should be clear to new viewers what he was doing.
Louis has changed from a carefree but proper-enough Catholic to a more reluctant one, with the wipe gesture. No strong opinions here, but this does differentiate him more from Santiago, so on principle this is an improvement.
About the Spanish guard... I saw your line-up of the new characters including the churchmen, I must say that the guard looks a whole deal like Santiago! The differences in their outfits and especially their body languages do help a lot but it's still concerning to me that they have pretty much the same face and the same hairstyle. This could be old biblethumper's son... What a frightening thought 8D
As for the cathedral interior... could the Bible scenes be ironic to the churchmen and Santiago's treasure hoarding please :3 I'm thinking of these as suggestions: the camel-and-needle thing, the widow who gave her only coins for charity, Jesus turning up money exhanger's tables at the temple...
Action begins. I'm sorry to say this but much of the energy and flow seems to have been lost here. The overall impression is heavier on speech. Louis seems to lack a plan (which might well be true), however he also seems to act deliberately... It's hard to put this into words, I hope you can understand the idea here. It's like Louis was prepared to dance his way around the heavily armoured Santiago, but has no idea where he's going, then again he seems to be heading steadily towards--an entirely wrong direction. Is he lost?
Anyways I very much like what you did with the altar and cross thing. It's like Louis is knowingly making stabs at Santiago's personality... which, knowing the sneaky lil' minx, he probably is doing. Was this his plan all along?
As for Jesus, he flies way a bit too long, even considering a bit of humorous exaggeration (it's a solid object after all, and the bits between Louis flicking it and Santiago catching it do have quite a bit of dialogue during which Jesus would still be flying). Cutting the catch into an earlier instance would be good. Santiago can't be getting after the others just yet, but that delicious bit of fussing over Jesus standing comfortably could well be stretched... Louis did muss up the altar quite a bit after all. Santiago could set everything nicely, growling and scowling worse by the moment, only to be very nearly roaring with (righteous) rage (of holy wrath) when he finally gets to go after the two blasphemous blabbermouths--oh, wait, not until a nice sign of the cross--RRRAAAAAH. All of this could be cut into alternating shots with the now extended exchange at the painting gallery. Heh, got carried away there. You get the idea.
As for the changed ending... well, first, why is Louis' fancy lil' footie sooo far away from James' face? X3 A minor concern: double usage of a darkening close-up of the general chest area of an approaching character.
All in all... interesting changes. I'll be keen to see where you're steering this ship :3 It's looking more complete, again.
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WOW SAK!
This has certainly come a long way from suggestions of outfit color combinations and tweaking character designs~! It's been so long since I've been able to sit down and look at things, I'm quite amazed with all of the wonderful, beautiful, amazing progress this has come into. Going through the posted storyboards, I must say I favor the uncut version, but this as the final is absolutely stunning. The flow of the panels is magnificent, and everything is clean, crisp, and just pure gold. Since I've last seen things, I must say I love James (<3) and Louis's final looks, they're very sharp, appealing, and true to character. Santiago is a wonderful addition as well, and I must say he's very true to his Spanish roots. You're characters have developed vastly, and through this animation, once can truly understand each individuals view points, attitudes, and standards. There mannerisms and actions define them indefinitely, and each expression given throughout the this series of frames only gives further definition of character. These characters of yours are so truly wonderful, it is easy to find yourself emotionally attached to them, wanting to know more and more of them and their pasts. (Though I must say, James still has my heart. 
I can't wait to see this is further progress though. I have to catch up on all of the new things you've included, like the voice actors still, but I'm sure each voice is just how I've always pictured your characters.
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Thank you so much! There have been some slight changes to this since uploading it, but it's more or less the same. So glad you're approving the direction it's taking so far, it and welcome back to the light of DAy! 
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You're welcome~! Well, slight changes are always present in the world of an artist, we're always going for perfection after all, and I find myself tweaking things obsessively in both artwork and writing , though writing is more of a forte for me. It's so wonderful to see this come SO far though, and see all of the developments, changes, twists and turns. This project is really more than a 'project' now, and I had great faith it would be, especially with all of the care, love, and detail that was poured into it from the start. It's so powerful, directed, and has so much going. I can't peel myself from it in complete honestly, and even now I'm writing 'in-between' class just to get back to you. It's nice to be back in the light of DAy, and thank you so much for welcoming me back. I'll be catching up further on my breaks and such, and commenting more often. I love the involvement, and if you were to need anything in the future, I'd love to offer help in what ways I can. This, in all of its entirety is just phenomenal~ Oh don't worry, I find myself in the same situation. I'm practically chained to my drafting desk for writing, sneaking in other things while typing on blistered fingers. Your recent DA profile card with yourself zombied-out and chained to your tablet, I feel the same, except with a keyboard. x____X
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Yikes, chained to a keyboard ... with carpel tunnel syndrome, the both of us.
And thank you. I never would have thought in my wildest dreams that Louis and Co. would garner the following they have, but it's definitely what keeps me going through all this. If I can be honest, I'm working on the animation to get my degree and graduate from LASALLE, but I'm finishing it because I want to, now, to have something to show for HAT and so that I don't disappoint all these people who have helped me with feedback and who have really supported me so far throughout the last few months. I'll make a graphic novel happen one day!
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I love the improvements you did 
I'm really excited to see the scene of the paintings I just adore how James loses it
Just one comment, when Santiago is going at Louis, you use the expression "TΓΊ maricΓ³n", being an spanish speaker I would recomend omiting the "TΓΊ" given the fact that when angry one tends to use less words, if you use "tΓΊ maricΓ³n" you cut the air coming out your lungs, but if you use only "MaricΓ³n" the insult comes out in one blow from inside your gut (you feel it in the stomach and then spurt it out), and unlike english in spanish we rarely use articles when we are insulting someone, like "Hijo de puta" not "TΓΊ hijo de puta" or the way you used "Malparido".
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Thanks for the tip, I think I'll do that then. Maybe if he's really screaming it in a rage more people will forgive his foreign accent.
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Lots of people fuss over the Spanish, but for a student film he's good enough.
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I think he is great 
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Thanks very much for the encouragement. ^^
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It just ocurred to me that you could also use "Maldito maricΓ³n" (which litteraly means "damn faggot" or more commonly "fucking faggot") it's a more strong way of cursing, but given that Santiago is really angry and frustrated I think he could say it, though there is the fact that he is in the church, and taking in account how religious he is, he shouldn't be saying that kind of things, then again, the word "maldito" on its own means "cursed", so, I don't know 
Amaizing job with the new storyboard
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The noises of pure joy I made were nearly inhuman.
I am still so pumped for this! Wonderful work! I--and many, I'm sure--can't wait!
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This is amazing!!! And I gotta say--I love the perspective in the establishing shot of the interior of the church; it feels so real, like you're actually standing in it!
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OMG!!!!! THIS IS AN AMAZING SEQUENCE!!!!!!
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I cannot WAIT to see your finished product! You've put so much work into it, and it's awesome seeing all of steps in your animation being posted!
These characters are great, and I just love how different they all are, even general shape-wise! Gah, I need to try putting as much thought int my works as you!(Or even half!)
... I'll stop fangirling now.
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really really interesting.
That is not a conventional pirate.
Mmmm.
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Oh my raaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!! i want see the animation
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This story has changed a lot, but each time it gets better.
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I absolutely adore this. So much better. Keep going!
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If you meant to represent corruption within the Church, you did well. Being a Catholic myself I find it disgusting that Santiago would treat a beggar like that, especially since one of the Seven Heavenly Virtues is charity. Also, Louis hit the nail on the head when he said Santiago was using God to justify his own sins. It seems like he is doing the exact opposite of what Christianity teaches.
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I am very grateful you're not biting my head off for portraying the Church so negatively, but as someone who used to be religious myself I found myself quitting it, because I noticed far too much hypocrisy within that organisation. The decision to cast Santiago as a conquistador and one of the priests as an Inquisitor was to exaggerate the corruption, of course. Two of Christianity's darkest points in history, I think, but sadly after doing research for my thesis last year there are still similar ongoing incidents today, and all in the name of God.
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And hopefully it will end.
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Every change has been for the better~β₯ Can't do nothing but fangirl at this point.
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So different! It changes every time, but I've decided that I like this version. Good luck, and hope that it's the final cut!
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I'd just like to add that the expression drawn on the panel where Louis says, "...but I'm the cutest of his little lambs." (or something like that, it took my Mac forever to get down here and I refuse to go all the way back up.) is perfection. I'd recommend that face get's put into the final product.
Anyway, I'm off to see the video. Very good story, can't wait to see the final product.
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I absolutely love it! The scripting is entertaining, the drawings appealing to the eye, and the whole idea is fantastic. Great job! I love the audio so far as well. Keep up the great work!
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Oh man, the whole animatic got me so excited for the final film. I congratulate you and wish you the absolute best success!
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