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Published: 2012-03-31 20:18:53 +0000 UTC; Views: 6269; Favourites: 328; Downloads: 555
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Your phone bills are smaller now,with no long distance calls to make,
and your car insurance reduced to reflect lower mileage
and all those journeys not made, those roads not taken,
those lanes that you know like the back of your hand -
Left, right, straight ahead, right, right -
are no longer driven. You did not see the bluebells wake
and spring burst forth in the countryside,
did not see the snow on the fields, cold horses in their
quilted coats pawing, nibbling, pawing.
Christmas stamps still tucked in your wallet,
unused,
and fountain pens dried up next to watermarked
John Lewis writing paper
with no letters left to write.
Weekends stretch out, lunchbreak is a blank and you have more time
but you have less.
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Here you are: [link] If you approve, please put the link in your Artist Comments and submit it to #Elocutionists under the folder with the name =SilverInkblot . Thank you for letting me read aloud!
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This was very beautiful and I'm sorry you lost someone so close.
It must have hurt writing this...
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Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link]
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Awesome. It perfectly reflects how I feel sometimes.
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.... Simply amazing. I love it, and hate it at the same time. Losing someone that close to you is so painful....
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It hurt my heart so much, and in minutes I was in tears, and now I cannot stop realizing how beautiful the poem is the second, third, fourth... tenth time through. Only true love could make something so beautiful, and thank you.
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Awww that's sad. Even before the reading about who it was for. I thought this was for like a bad breakup or something. But no, that's really, really sad... 
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Thank you for such a detailed comment <3 your support means a lot to me.
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You're welcome.And yeah... I at least try.
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*Standing ovation!* It's so touching and beautiful... Congratulations on the DD!
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OMG I feel like I suggested this forever and a HALF ago and finally!
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This has that stunning quietness I've seen in some of your other poems about grief, but more distilled. It's so subtle about it, too–not in-your-face screaming grief but the kind that clings to your ribs and sneaks up on you. You made me sad, and I think I love you for it.
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Ah man, awesome comment! I feel bad that I made you feel sad, but I'm also delighted to have been able to move someone.
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There are no words to describe the ones you wrote.
Just.. well done. Truly well deserved DD
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This is so elegantly written, so achingly beautiful. The letter in the description is a wonderful touch too, and just as poignant as the poem itself. Wonderful, wonderful work; you should be proud.
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You're quite welcome. <3
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Came for the poem, stayed for the description.
Oh my God.
The two should be together; together they create a whole perspective. I'm no office cubicle slave but this still makes me wonder, What am I even doing with my life?.
Most powerful thing I'm likely to read in a while. Thank you.
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I'm an office cubicle slave and all I'm doing with my life is picking up germs on the commute. C'est la vie.
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The very strong and concrete imagery of this is wonderful. It really conveys the loneliness in the poem so well. I also appreciate how the person addressed in the poem (the 'you') is emphasized to have more of everything now, but then the impact of the last line drives home how having more and being freer can actually mean very little.
My only critique is the italics on 'less.' I know you wanted to bring out that word, but I think just the fact that it is the last word of the poem, and moreover the end of a short line, makes it stand out perfectly well. As it is with the italics, if I read it out loud, I want to throw my voice into that word, which to me sort of disrupts the flow and natural rhythm. Of course it's your choice, but I just thought I'd mention my reaction. On the whole, though, the poem is beautiful.
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I really liked the back story to this piece. The poem was well laid out and flowed nicely. Great job and congrats on the DD.
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This is absolutely beautiful <3 congrats on the DD, it is well deserved!! The back-story makes me love the piece even more; it's so touching, I nearly cried. Well done!
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Congrats on the DD. This is a very powerful and moving piece
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wow, that was amazing. I think seeing where you pulled inspiration from, the man's letter to his wife, really made it for me. It left me crying
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It's times like these that I really love the support and insight DeviantArtists, and writers alone, can give me. My mother passed away in February of this year, and my dad has gone through the transition of having his soulmate pass away. He wants to move on, and he knows that no one could ever replace my mother in any way, he feels alone. They were together for 30 years, but it really makes no difference in terms of 30 or 2, because when you have someone like that in your life and they pass on it feels like an entire lifetime has been snatched away.
Reading through your point of view, which is different but on a similar track of mind, really put into perspective what my father has gone through. There were times that he would attempt to call the house to tell my mom when he found something cool that she would like, only to realize that she already knew about these things because she was watching over him and not at home. I'm trying hard not to cry thinking about all of this, because it has touched me again.
Long story short, thank you very much for writing this, it's touching and beyond words in terms of a gift to read and experience.
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Thank you for such a lovely comment! (and sorry for the slow reply as well!) Comments like these make me remember why I write poems, and yeah what an amazing community dA is - with all of these incredible opportunities to meet people going through everything you're going through and totally getting it. <3
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This poem is amazing. You can really sense the pain felt in every word. Congrats on the DD. You deserved it.
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I am quite literally sitting at my desk, in my lunch break, crying. I have no words for how tragically beautiful this is - and thank you for posting the letter beneath - truly moving.
Astonishing and painful work.
Congratulations on the DD - well deserved.
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Oh my gosh, this is so beautiful, and yet, so sad!
Congrats on the daily deviation!
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Wow, very powerful. This brought a tear to my eye, it's so emotionally poignant without being overstated. Well done.
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