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UntamedUnwanted — Judgement by-nc-nd
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Description "You need to stop doing this."

"Stop doing what?"

"Writing me into your stories."

"...why?"

"Because…it scares me. I'm not this guy that you write about. I'm not some kind of Prince Charming and I'm certainly not a sea God or whatever you like to say about my eyes every now and then."

"Oh really?"

"Yeah. You really need to work on your judgement of people, because this is all wrong. It's like you don't know me at all!"

"So why don't you correct me and I'll fix my idea of you accordingly."

"Well…firstly, I'm a really nervous person."

"Yeah. Your hands are either fiddling with your hair or your sleeve, or you're biting your nails."

"And I don't like going out. I'm a hermit."

"Except to your best friends' houses, or to the animal shelter, or to me."

"And I'm dead inside."

"Says the boy who hides his tears at the sight of an injured puppy."

"I do not."

"Yes, you do."

"Anyway, I'm not always nice to you. In fact, I really don't do enough."

"You're right. Except…you're the one I call when I'm upset, you're the only person who tells me you love me every night, you drive half way across the city to see me-"

"-it's still not enough. I barely give you the kind of attention you need."

"And yet, I can sleep in absolute peace next to you."

"Still, I'm nowhere near this guy you write about."

"What, and you think that Prince Charming has absolutely no flaws?"

"I highly doubt he does."

"You know what I think?"

"What?"

"I think your judgement of Prince Charming is all wrong."

"Sorry?"

"He's Prince Charming, my love. Not Prince Perfect."
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Comments: 508

SurrealNacre [2014-08-28 21:06:13 +0000 UTC]

that last line, nice! never actually thought about it like that. everyone assumes prince charming is perfect, but he's just charming is all~ You are a gifted writer!

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shep4life [2014-08-13 02:48:07 +0000 UTC]

This is really cool

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Fira-Jones [2014-08-11 01:39:53 +0000 UTC]

This work...
YES YES YES YES YES.  So true.

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hopeburnsblue [2014-08-08 18:09:05 +0000 UTC]

I love this!

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Ninja615 [2013-08-06 03:37:30 +0000 UTC]

eahhh! so cute

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Fogfire [2013-06-12 17:58:39 +0000 UTC]

that's cool

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HardcoreDeadPrincess [2013-06-10 22:14:31 +0000 UTC]

That is so sweet Great Job!! XD

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myraaaa [2013-05-22 02:07:35 +0000 UTC]

D'awww!

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isabeau-92 [2013-05-14 02:30:53 +0000 UTC]

This is adorable. So sweet

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angelireland [2013-05-12 05:23:15 +0000 UTC]

Aw I love this! <3

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slowlyfallingpart [2013-05-02 18:05:52 +0000 UTC]

wow... i really liked this, it kind of reminded me about a conversation i had with my best friend today
Its really good

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143Am [2013-03-09 19:28:55 +0000 UTC]

I love it, it's so relatable.

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UltimateDesktops [2013-02-28 11:02:12 +0000 UTC]

Superb!

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Axilery [2013-01-19 21:26:34 +0000 UTC]

...

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Kon78 [2013-01-15 05:50:59 +0000 UTC]

This is so perfect :3

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Marmodre [2013-01-14 12:33:35 +0000 UTC]

Now, If only I had someone to adore me. Alas, I'll continue being me, mostly alone, scared of social stuff, dark humour, quite dead inside at times, and all that. Charming? Alas, no.

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scimini In reply to Marmodre [2013-01-23 12:31:30 +0000 UTC]

Welcome to my world!

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Thoma5-theWriter [2013-01-12 20:41:54 +0000 UTC]

this is probably one of the cutest things i've read great job!

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Lost-in-Underland [2013-01-10 22:06:04 +0000 UTC]

That's an amazing piece. The last line absolutely sums up everything

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123roo123 [2012-12-25 13:20:35 +0000 UTC]

I just love this.

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SLant22 [2012-11-16 09:32:51 +0000 UTC]

I really like the last line: "He's Prince Charming, my love. Not Prince Perfect."
How sweet!

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Shatyoki [2012-11-02 17:09:44 +0000 UTC]

Loved it.

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Caller-of-the-night [2012-10-18 17:00:53 +0000 UTC]

Judging seem so easy..but it actually is a difficult thing to do.
Thanks for sharing!

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KamrunChaos [2012-09-17 21:29:03 +0000 UTC]

fan-tucking-fastic <3

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oqe [2012-09-01 15:47:03 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful (:

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JaceyMaeRachele [2012-08-14 00:24:25 +0000 UTC]

Okay, I absolutely love, love, love this!

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tiraluv [2012-08-03 20:15:54 +0000 UTC]

Aww I love this. It's so sweet. This is adorable. I love it.

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ShesaMystery [2012-07-14 00:32:59 +0000 UTC]

This is simply precious <3 May I please use this in a comic? Because it just inspired one.

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Belladonna170 [2012-07-07 18:36:01 +0000 UTC]

beautiful. Now I sort of want to shank the douchebag who is trying to steal your work.

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oviedomedina [2012-03-25 18:21:19 +0000 UTC]

The last line is wonderful.
Loved this story!

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AnnieBarbaro [2012-01-05 19:57:15 +0000 UTC]

Hahahha..awesome!!! And the last line just killed me hehe

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CodaBear48 [2011-11-20 20:47:05 +0000 UTC]

Awesome short

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Sana-girl [2011-11-20 03:12:18 +0000 UTC]

Awww so cute I love her perception of him and how in such a small section of time you can convey their relationship so well.

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sammyella1127 [2011-11-12 16:36:45 +0000 UTC]

this is really good

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UntamedUnwanted In reply to sammyella1127 [2011-11-14 00:52:22 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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sammyella1127 In reply to UntamedUnwanted [2011-11-14 01:04:25 +0000 UTC]

no prob

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weirdlittlemoose [2011-11-06 05:34:11 +0000 UTC]

*Like*! hehe

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UntamedUnwanted In reply to weirdlittlemoose [2011-11-14 00:52:28 +0000 UTC]

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cookiejarnobody [2011-10-20 11:53:37 +0000 UTC]

"He's Prince Charming, my love. Not Prince Perfect."

that line nailed it!

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UntamedUnwanted In reply to cookiejarnobody [2011-11-14 00:52:37 +0000 UTC]

Awww...thank you!

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cookiejarnobody In reply to UntamedUnwanted [2011-11-15 16:10:45 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome ^^

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BlindxMinds [2011-10-12 17:43:45 +0000 UTC]

this is a very interesting idea and it's nicely done..I really liked how you could get to know so much about the relationship between the two characters by reading between the lines...the first line got me thinking this was going to be all kitschy, prejudices i guess...I'm happy I read on thoguh, since you developed a very enetertaining conversation with a witty end...
the last sentence is brilliant, a simple truth we barely think about...funny and yet not superficial...
I found the comparision with the sea god a bit too much though, it's pretty cliche and not really meaningful.
what I also liked is that you managed to make it feel like a real conversation, e.g. due to one of the persons interrupting each other..

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UntamedUnwanted In reply to BlindxMinds [2011-11-14 00:54:05 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for taking the time to write me such a wonderful critique. I really do need to stop with the sea god eyes (in the piece, the character himself is criticising the overuse as well !)

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BlindxMinds In reply to UntamedUnwanted [2011-11-15 15:12:03 +0000 UTC]

you're very welcome
jep, you need to stop that, but look at it this way: if that's the only thing to crtique, then your piece is probably pretty awesome

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Ariipa [2011-10-06 07:51:42 +0000 UTC]

this is the nicest thing i've read in long time!! Fantastic! I'm gonna go read more now !

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UntamedUnwanted In reply to Ariipa [2011-11-14 00:55:14 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much for saying that!

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Ariipa In reply to UntamedUnwanted [2011-11-15 20:39:25 +0000 UTC]

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Undead-Octopus [2011-10-06 00:39:32 +0000 UTC]

this is amazing.

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UntamedUnwanted In reply to Undead-Octopus [2011-11-14 00:54:15 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!

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Sabbatticus [2011-10-01 15:41:49 +0000 UTC]

Well done. It is concise and insightful. I like this.

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