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Published: 2015-11-04 20:40:08 +0000 UTC; Views: 17278; Favourites: 396; Downloads: 0
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Description i.
your words drip with crimson
as you bite your lip;
you always liked to pretend
you held the strength of metal,
and now all that’s left is the aftertaste of copper
trickling down your throat-
what happened to the child throwing pennies in the fountain?

ii.
hidden under the threaded sleeves of your sweater,
I can picture your hands shaking like earthquakes
and your fists held clenched;
I worry your fingernails cut dashed lines
into the palms of your hands,
like the ones painted on back roads and highways-
I’m worried where you plan on going

iii.
viewing your puffy eyes and hearing woebegone-winded words
tangle on your trainwrecked-tongue,
I can’t help but wonder how many puddles of salt
sodden your pillowcase from sleepless nights;
I know you’ve always liked to swim,
but this time darling- can you leave the water in the ocean?

iv.
I bet there’s charcoal clouds
gathering on your bed sheets-
an aftermath of the fire burning
in the caliginous canyon within you;
I guess sometimes
your eyes turn to chimneys at 3 am
because it’s the only time no one else will see

v.
I think happiness for you
has become nothing more
than halcyon hallucinations
collected in a mason jar,
and you’re letting the light suffocate-
you didn’t care enough to poke holes,
not one.

vi.
Oh please dear,
don’t let those fireflies die

Oh please dear,
don't let yourself go

(I care about you more than you will ever know).
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Comments: 102

Larathain [2016-07-12 17:34:49 +0000 UTC]

They won't die when they fly upon the wind of love ^-^

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Tangled-Tales In reply to Larathain [2016-08-01 19:48:20 +0000 UTC]

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sophieb2 [2016-04-10 00:53:56 +0000 UTC]

How are you please contact me back with
my ID sophielarry2@hotmail.com

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BWSMILE [2015-12-05 14:40:42 +0000 UTC]

This made me smile thank you

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Tangled-Tales In reply to BWSMILE [2015-12-05 16:21:24 +0000 UTC]

Awe yay! So happy to hear!!

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SurrealNacre [2015-12-04 20:37:10 +0000 UTC]

Congrats on the DD!!

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Tangled-Tales In reply to SurrealNacre [2015-12-04 23:30:56 +0000 UTC]

Ahh thank you thank you so much !!!!

Omgah your icon is so cute ! <3

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SurrealNacre In reply to Tangled-Tales [2015-12-07 00:37:20 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!!! and thanks! <3

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LindArtz [2015-12-04 20:00:40 +0000 UTC]

 
 Bravo!  Congratulations on your much deserved DD!

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Tangled-Tales In reply to LindArtz [2015-12-04 20:02:35 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so very much!

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Zorbonaut [2015-12-03 09:01:46 +0000 UTC]

Gorgeous language! You do have a way with alliterations!

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Tangled-Tales In reply to Zorbonaut [2015-12-03 20:09:51 +0000 UTC]

THANK YOU SO MUCH! I have recently found an adoration for alliterations!

I think they sound lovely!

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empellina [2015-12-03 04:05:17 +0000 UTC]

Wow. Brings tears to my eyes. Congratulations...on being you. And the DD, of course.

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Tangled-Tales In reply to empellina [2015-12-03 20:09:26 +0000 UTC]

Awe don't cry, don't cry!

Thank you so very much! Have a wonderful day!

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BerkleyDown [2015-12-01 23:30:58 +0000 UTC]

This is beautiful. I want to say something that no one else has, because by now if people haven't covered "beautiful" and "amazing" and "emotive" and what not, then I don't know what people actually can appreciate, if not this. But I don't know what I should add. This surpasses words. Very well done.

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Tangled-Tales In reply to BerkleyDown [2015-12-02 15:53:36 +0000 UTC]

Awe, you are so kind!

Thanks for taking the time to read and comment!

THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU!

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cholie [2015-12-01 23:07:17 +0000 UTC]

whoa...
so evocative, emotive, raw, honest, transparent, thought-provoking...
your poem sent shivers down my spine,
caused my eyes to well up,
resonated deeply with my soul.

this is so breathtakingly beautiful.
please don't ever stop being creative!
thank you so much for writing this and sharing it with us!

congratulations on the Daily Deviation, it is well-deserved!

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Tangled-Tales In reply to cholie [2015-12-02 15:53:08 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much for the copious amount of kind words! They make me so very happy!

So blissful on the fact that my poetry can have a positive impact on readers such as yourself! <333


Have the lovely day that you deserve!

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cholie In reply to Tangled-Tales [2015-12-03 23:15:00 +0000 UTC]

I am glad my words made you happy!

Aw, of course! I really appreciate your writing, you have a lot of talent!! I hope you never stop writing!! <333

Thank you so much!!! I wish the same to you! May your days be filled with joy and warmth!

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Tangled-Tales In reply to cholie [2015-12-04 02:03:27 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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cholie In reply to Tangled-Tales [2015-12-06 00:03:01 +0000 UTC]

My pleasure!!!

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harliequin [2015-12-01 16:26:22 +0000 UTC]

Oh...my god...this is GORGEOUS. So well written, so relateable. So sorrowful and yet somehow hopeful. How can someone who has someone to care so deeply for them be hopeless?

Absolutely wonderful!

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Tangled-Tales In reply to harliequin [2015-12-02 15:52:11 +0000 UTC]

Ah thank you for the kind words!

You have a great wonderful awesome day!

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CalleighBlack [2015-12-01 15:04:59 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations on the DD!!!

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Tangled-Tales In reply to CalleighBlack [2015-12-02 15:51:33 +0000 UTC]

THANK YOU SO VERY MUCH AH!

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Bluefiregrl [2015-12-01 13:37:42 +0000 UTC]

Congrats on the DD!

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Tangled-Tales In reply to Bluefiregrl [2015-12-02 15:51:51 +0000 UTC]

THANK YOU!!!

Have a great day!

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Bluefiregrl In reply to Tangled-Tales [2015-12-02 19:57:47 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

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Lintu47 [2015-12-01 09:23:07 +0000 UTC]

Congrats on the DD!
Have a nice day!

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Tangled-Tales In reply to Lintu47 [2015-12-02 15:51:21 +0000 UTC]

Ahhh thank you so very much!

You as well!

Ps love your cat

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Lintu47 In reply to Tangled-Tales [2015-12-05 11:19:14 +0000 UTC]


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AngelofLight03 [2015-11-08 13:59:22 +0000 UTC]

This is beautiful. I love it.

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Tangled-Tales In reply to AngelofLight03 [2015-11-08 16:50:59 +0000 UTC]

It loves you back !!!!!

Thanks for the kind words!

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AngelofLight03 In reply to Tangled-Tales [2015-11-08 18:37:54 +0000 UTC]

You are welcome.

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Hastur66 [2015-11-08 02:00:55 +0000 UTC]

Wow... this was a really beautiful poem!

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Tangled-Tales In reply to Hastur66 [2015-11-08 02:47:15 +0000 UTC]

Aw thank you so much! You're too kind!!

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MysticDeviant [2015-11-07 02:51:08 +0000 UTC]

 This is beyond what words could be expressed on how much this is beautiful. This shook my heart and painted a million pictures in my mind. Bravo, friend. 

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Tangled-Tales In reply to MysticDeviant [2015-11-07 22:42:21 +0000 UTC]

Aw you are so very kind!

I am so glad to hear you enjoyed my poem!

Stay fab!

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MysticDeviant In reply to Tangled-Tales [2015-11-08 18:42:43 +0000 UTC]

Aw, well thank you for the compliment ^_^
And no problem AT all, I truly loved it. It's a poem I would hang on my wall, for certain.

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Tangled-Tales In reply to MysticDeviant [2015-11-08 20:56:24 +0000 UTC]

Aew! I hope someday to spread my work enough for people to want to do that ! Awe awe awe. <333

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MysticDeviant In reply to Tangled-Tales [2015-11-09 01:48:01 +0000 UTC]

With the way you're going, I'm sure it will definitely!!  

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Tangled-Tales In reply to MysticDeviant [2015-11-09 20:15:44 +0000 UTC]

Awe! Thank you!

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MysticDeviant In reply to Tangled-Tales [2015-11-09 23:39:22 +0000 UTC]

No problem at all!

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Tangled-Tales In reply to MysticDeviant [2015-11-09 23:52:40 +0000 UTC]

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RosieBees [2015-11-06 17:58:46 +0000 UTC]

This is beyond words. You are incredible. Thank you so much.

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Tangled-Tales In reply to RosieBees [2015-11-06 18:38:25 +0000 UTC]

Aw no no, too kind! YOU are incredible! )

thanks for the kind words, and taking the time to read my piece!

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RosieBees In reply to Tangled-Tales [2015-11-07 15:19:47 +0000 UTC]

It's always a pleasure X3

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nightshade-keyblade [2015-11-05 22:47:17 +0000 UTC]

The first stanza did it for me. The strength of metal to the copper taste of crimson (blood) on your teeth. It was done with finesse.

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Tangled-Tales In reply to nightshade-keyblade [2015-11-06 17:07:54 +0000 UTC]

Aw yay, was worried about people understanding the connection! Did the part about throwing pennies in the fountain correlate for you as well?

Thanks for the kind words!

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nightshade-keyblade In reply to Tangled-Tales [2015-11-08 02:38:22 +0000 UTC]

To an extent, it did. Pennies are made of copper so there is a connexion there. Reading it again, I interpret it as an expression for someone whose hopes have been dashed.

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