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Girlfoxgirl [2015-07-13 23:40:29 +0000 UTC]
Lol, by how you referred to it as the "lame horror story," should I take it that you aren't happy with it? I thought it was cute. ^^ You got more subtlety into the beginning, which I liked. I mean, the change comes quickly, but what can you do with that length? (Ok, though the brother's name just made me chortle.)
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NinjaScribe In reply to Girlfoxgirl [2015-07-14 02:34:52 +0000 UTC]
true, it was dueMonday.. meaning TODAY... so i kinda had to shorten the plot to get it finished in time.
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NinjaScribe In reply to Girlfoxgirl [2015-07-14 02:42:10 +0000 UTC]
yeh, maybe it will be fun to expand this some day as writing practice, but it's ok for what it is now too.
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Girlfoxgirl In reply to NinjaScribe [2015-07-14 02:51:54 +0000 UTC]
Indeed. Do you know when you'll hear back?
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NinjaScribe In reply to Girlfoxgirl [2015-07-14 02:55:50 +0000 UTC]
no. it's just a writing challenge, so idk if the tell us which ones they liked or not.
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Girlfoxgirl In reply to NinjaScribe [2015-07-14 03:00:52 +0000 UTC]
Oh, I see. It would be cool if they did give some kind of comment on it, anyway. ^^
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NinjaScribe In reply to Girlfoxgirl [2015-07-14 02:31:29 +0000 UTC]
what's wrong with the name Henry? It's a perfectly respectable name!! and "cute" isn't what i really desire from a horror story.
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Girlfoxgirl In reply to NinjaScribe [2015-07-14 02:34:57 +0000 UTC]
Gosh, sorry, the pun with the title and the cheery "to the left a little... perfect!" at the end made me think of a creepy cute. Like something straight out of Tales from the Crypt with the Crypt Keeper saying your puns! Ever seen those? Totally like it now that I think about it! (And lol, I Thinkle it may be something other than the first name!)
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NinjaScribe In reply to Girlfoxgirl [2015-07-14 02:41:12 +0000 UTC]
ooohh .. you know it's Shelly's last name too (the main character/ interier designer)
Β so it threw me that you specifically thought the brother's name was t funny.
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Girlfoxgirl In reply to NinjaScribe [2015-07-14 02:51:31 +0000 UTC]
True, true. ^^ I just thought his alliteration in particular emphasized it for me.
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NinjaScribe In reply to Girlfoxgirl [2015-07-14 02:57:05 +0000 UTC]
ah not really on purpose. the name just sounded right for Shelly Hinkle and Henry happened to be what i chose for the brother's name.
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