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lupus-astra β A lesson in realism:
Published: 2014-02-25 16:46:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 6411; Favourites: 409; Downloads: 0
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you areonly human.
There is no such
thing as stardust
floating in your veins or
gloomy poetry stitched
right into your heart.
Your blood is made of
iron - unbreakable,
unbending and unmatched
by any other stronghold,
for you are a fortress
that they will never invade.
Stand up,
darling;
wipe those tears away
and know that
you are the only one
who can reinforce these walls.
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This poem is still as powerful as the first time I read it and it knocked the wind out of me.
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"Your blood is made of
iron - unbreakable,
unbending and unmatched
by any other stronghold,
for you are a fortress
that they will never invade."
Love that.
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I love that even as you say "don't be silly, you're just a person, get a dose of reality" you're still using very striking imagery and a bit of idealism through your blood of iron metaphor. It really makes a great contrast and I feel like it suggests that idealism isn't always a bad thing as it holds so much hope and encouragement, but that we should reign it in every once in a while and be sure we aren't kidding ourselves.
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I love the your blood is made of iron line. Brilliant!
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Only the iron in your blood comes from the heart of a star that died to bring it into creation.
So, you are indeed, made of star-stuff as Sagan put it.
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I'm gonna have to print this out if this is okay with you
I just need to read this every time I suddenly feel stressed or upset during class.
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It was absolutely beautiful until and even still during really the last stanza. Really liked it, but a piece of constructive criticism if you'd like it:
Your last stanza has a message but two thirds of the lines in it feel like fluff.Β If you could expand that message of strengthening one's self while cutting out the filler-y lines, that would work, or if you could weave the message of self-reliance into the other two stanzas and do away with the third altogether, that would also work. Vague suggestions, I know, but when it comes to critiquing poetry specificity is rarely a good thing.
In any case, I wouldn't bother critiquing of I didn't think it was worth it, so I obviously quite liked it!
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I needed this.Β
Well, I hope your days are better now otherwise good luck to you and to me ^^"
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Thank you 
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This is a very lovely poem. <3 Very nice, I love it. ^^
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You're very welcome. <3
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Woah, here I thought this was going to saying how fragile humans are, but this certainly is different from what I expected for it's full of a truthful spark of hope in every word.
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I feel like I've exhausted all the dark topics so might as well start focusing on the good ones.
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Trust me when I say this, there is more in bad then there is in good but the ones within good are quite well numbered. Heh heh.
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Thank you for these moving words, I'm inspired by them.
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I'm glad to hear that <3
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I'm glad to hear that!
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Love is just a chemical. We choose to give it meaning.
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This isn't about love. It's more about self-acceptance.
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bad days are poo.
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That's great! There is no such thing as stardust!
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Well, there really is, but there's no such thing as sparkly blood. Aha.Β
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About the stardust line... it's not quite accurate. See, hydrogen, helium, and trace amounts of lithium were created in the Big Bang, whereas other elements were so heavy that only the explosion of a star could fuse them together, and some even heavier elements could only be created once a supernova occurred and forced atoms to fuse. So technically we all are made of stars, or the remaining atoms of them that were shoved together at least.
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pst I was going for it in a more romantic sense because science is hard to write into poetry for me
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Good point. I just happen to be a bit of an amateur astronomer(I chart stars and whatnot every night) and so things like that are prevalent among my thoughts.
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*coughing mist* yeour to talk!
Awesome prose! my heart is glass though!
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This is fantastic. I needed this. Let me hug you please.
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I like hugs. Hugs are nice. Hugs.
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I feel you there 
Good work on this though; I like it
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Yep, that's literally me. But I keep trying. You keep on trying, too.
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-insert cheesy monkey picture here-
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Replies with "TOTALLYΒ UN-AMUSEDΒ NIGERIANΒ AARDVARK" SANDWICH.
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DAMN this shit is good. Another hit please!Β
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Haha, maybe when my muse returns!
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Haha that's how I am, I have my muses too. xD
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This is really cool. AND rad. It's just the right amount of romanticization to be inspiring, but not overbearing or cheesy. Good job.
Also it reminds me of that thing from Bioshock, "No Gods or Kings. Only Man." I don't think that's what you were going for, but still. :3
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I FUCKIN LOVE BIOSHOCK
well, Infinite. Elizabeth is my bby.
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KATHRYN WHY IT'S NOT WORTHY
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