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Published: 2015-05-21 03:07:38 +0000 UTC; Views: 13372; Favourites: 213; Downloads: 71
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SILVER'S SANITY SLOWLY CRUMBLES!THE READER'S PATIENCE RAPIDLY DWINDLES!!
WHEN WILL SOMETHING ACTUALLY HAPPEN!!!!! (in like six pages)
I'm sorry, I'm used to writing in book style, I don't even read comics, I didn't quite realize how SLOW the pace would seem as a comic released one page at a time lol
BUT THEN AGAIN... a plot that oozes along slower than a sleeping snail is fully appropriate for a comic about Silver. :^)
(the ensuing bombardment of complaints from the audience would seem to indicate otherwise)
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His art style reminds me a lot of freedomfightersonic
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Um.... no. freedomfightersonic's art should remind you of knockabiller's art, not the other way around.
freedomfightersonic has copied knockabiller's art many times before and still does to this day. This is a fact. I'm the one who noticed how freedomfightersonic copies different people and I have quite a nice little collection of comparison images that show what she secretly copied from knockabiller's pictures to make her own pictures.
I'll gladly share these comparisons at some point, as long as knockabiller is fine with it.
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Well... I'm pretty sure that's because she basically copies parts of my pics (and other people's pics) all the time but then like rotates/flips it so its harder to notice immediately... and then copies the coloring or whatever, etc 9___9 all. the. time. probably like every pic is copied from some other person's pic. it's stupid
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"a plot that oozes slower than a sleeping snail is fully appropriate for a comic about SILVER" you cheeky bastard i saw what you did
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Can I draw Silver and Asbestos? Lol I just find Asbestos so funny. I don't know why.
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Panel 8: If you were able, would you go change the past? And mend a FAUX PAS with one last chance?
^.^
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100% not a coincidence at all
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just........ how long has silver been alone 0-0
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Well the last time he had a constant group of people around him was about a month or so ago. I'll explain that a bit later I think. It might take a while to get around to it lol
Since then he's gotten involved in a few brief adventures including
1. where he got the timestone
2. Sonic Rivals 1
3. Sonic Rivals 2
4. Sonic Colors DS
But all of those adventures were very fast-paced, each occurring over a day at the very most. In between, nothing but silence.
He's currently not THAT far from civilization, but... well when he came here to the crashed little planet in order to place the decoy time stone, he flew in over the uninhabited side of the lake because it was faster, now he's stuck. So he's spent a few days of travel without seeing anybody because he thought the time stone was more important than socializing lol
On the other side of the mountain, there's Onyx Island and Green Gate II, a city of Seedrians, and on the shore of the lake is Onyx city, which is probably going to be similar to how it is in the comics, but it has 24 districts each frozen in a different hour of the day and some other time-related stuff.
I didn't have a name for it but I guess Onyx City is as good as any, lol
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city of seedrians.
YOU MEAN PLANT DINOSAURS???????
REALLY
AAGHHHHHH
YOU REMEMBER GREEN GATE
i love this
I'm looking forward to this.
good as any other name of cities in the sonic universe.
like robotropolis. what even.
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Yeah lol
Petal lizards and thorn dragons!
I'm having Seedrians be the natives of the Little Planet because of the LP's miraculous plant life and that mysterious angel statue which resembles Illumina whose component entities Lumina and Void resemble Cosmo. Green Gate has an alliterative name just like all the LP zones, how could I not remember it!
robotropolis is just eggman being punny, the original name of mobotropolis is worse, way worse
that's like us having a city named "humanopolis" like wtf could you not spring for anything slightly more clever like acornucopia or something
anything
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acornucopia??? lol that's even worse XD but clever, i suppose XD
at least the name knothole was charming..... *whispered newsfeed* what's that... writers burned knothole to the ground?
WELP
It's like Eggman knows how horrible the name is and conquers it just to rename it something humorous at least XD
RANDOM: i imagine Remix and Silver's relationship like this when RMX is drunk www.youtube.com/watch?v=D-Umfq…
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I-- OKAY YEAH IT'S A CRAPPY PUN BUT AT LEAST IT ISN'T "HUMANOPOLIS"
I agree about the name Knothole, it's like the quintessential "charming animal village" name
Eggman's the real hero, lol
WHY I DO DECLARE THIS TO BE A SPOT-ON REPRESENTATION
THAT'S A GOOD WISDOM
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Now it is necessary to draw drunk RMX and Silver's awkward interaction with said intoxicated dad
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This is the most funny sonic style comic I've ever seen 
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Plants: Almost had 'em!
That will teach people to smell the daisies. In Russia daisies smell you. D:<
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In soviet russia, plants eat you!
here in missouri, we eat dandelions deep fried and in salads and stuff like that, i for one think they're nasty lol
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IT'S NO USE, you lil' flowers! GET A LOAD OF THIS!
Ok, I've got no real comment about this...
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Your pacing is nice, and its perfect for going into greater detail. It reminds me of Evan Stanley's work, except a lot more psychedelic with the color schemes. You said in one of the comments that you had a script document for this comic. I don't want to have any spoilers, but is there any possible way I could see how you script each of your comics? I'm trying to make a series of my own, but since I haven't attempted something like this before, it's really challenging to make something that adds structure to the final product.
Any advice?
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First of all: THANK YOU!
Ok, now for scripting advice:
For writing in general... well, if I don't have a plan in mind when I start, I typically end up lost and unwilling to finish because I run out of ideas. SO to prevent this, I start with writing a very simple plot that is basically the goals I need the narrative to hit. I start out with the plot of the whole thing and then expand on the elements until I can divide them up into chapters, and then I do it again for each chapter, if that makes sense. So, like for the story so far:
-put a bit of background info about the situation but not too much
-go help the brat (this is an upcoming event)
Then I use this skeleton as a base and write a simplified plot out thats a bit more detailed and contains all the important things to remember, the hows and the whys and all that
Silver wakes up, writes the dream down, expositions while wandering around the wreckage of stardust speedway good future, flashback to sweet mountain revealing he doesn’t remember Blaze from 06, also revealing that he’s a time traveler/why he’s even on little planet (he went there to put the decoy time stone in tidal tempest), then he goes establishing parts of his personality that he tries to hide in public (so that we don’t miss them later, and then “oh hay didn’t you know silver is also self-doubting or whatever even though I literally never indicated such lolelol”), as well as revealing his environment and situation- anyway he demonstrates his self-doubt and optimism, he’s gone a bit wacko from lonely, he doesn’t remember blaze but is compelled to help her for some sappy reason [and I would include a spoilery explanation of why he has the dreams etc]
Suddenly he hears a cry for help and flies off, establishing his heroism and rousing the reader from their stupor!!
And just continue like that, typing up the overall plot. Like no dialog just events that happen, the reasons why things happen, extra side/background information to keep in mind like “silver’s a good cook” and “99% of all technology runs off chaos energy so the lights are still on” and any plot twists or whatever. There’s no nuance at this stage since this is basically just notes for me to remember, so I will explain any secret plan or deception immediately in full as I come to its first appearance. I put down the character's true feelings whenever it's necessary to keep them in mind (like if they're being dishonest about how they feel) and other emotional cues like "that last comment pisses silver off." I also write down things I DON’T want to have come across, like “blaze should not come off as a complete asshole” or whatever. This way I won’t write myself into a corner later (hopefully lol), and also I know what I want to get across to the reader, so I can be careful about it when writing. I also write down the visuals to help with the drawing part. Let's call this kind of elaboration Expansion 1.
Then I take that “expanded” script and expand it again by adding the actual dialog and events as they will be seen in the story itself. So this is Expansion 2.
Sometimes I have to do multiple expansion 1's before I get to the point that I can do an expansion 2, if that makes any sense... just keep layering up detail and refining it until the scene sort of solidifies in my head and I know what I want to do.
So for the actual script:
I don’t bother with proper script format since I’m not sending this off to someone else to draw so it would be a bit of a waste of time, although I guess it’s a good skill to have
I make up easy to type character tags (s = silver, b = blaze) and do it like this
One day Silver walks in to a gruesome spectacle. Blaze is sitting on the ground partially submerged in taco wrappers.S- Holy moses how many tacos did you eat!
B- All of them (bleeds taco sauce)
S- {I have to escape this relationship}
The curly bracket denotes thinking, the parentheses denote actions (since the program I was using when I started scripting turns asterisked phrases bolded lol), but that's just how I do it, you could do it any way you want.
On the first pass it's okay to be a little on-the-nose or trite, as long as you get the general idea across. Afterwards I continuously go back and refine the script trying to eliminate stilted dialog and stupid stuff, generally aiming for parsimony where possible.
I used to just do it like that with the entire script in one document so that I didn't lose the overall plot, but that’s kind of unwieldy (tons of scrolling with a teeny hair thin scroll bar), so as of a few weeks ago I’m using Scrivener, which is a slightly different kind of writing program that basically lets you split a document into “subdocuments” so you don’t have to scroll so much (but you can still edit or read the whole thing as a single document if you want to)
It simplifies the process of reordering scenes and lets you keep all your crap in one box basically, it's MUCH easier to organize the thoughts (well... for me at least, lol)
There are other writing programs like this as well with different features. I guess it's unnecessary, and it might be hard if you're starting with a blank slate, so I'd suggest writing up the plot first before trying scrivener, so you have a starting point.
Anyway, that's how I've been doing it, I hope that helps somehow. Also, good luck with your story!
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Ok first off. WOW!!! Thanks for taking the time to write out all this info and explain things in detail. I will definitely take some of your techniques and at least use them as bases for how I conceptualize my work. I especially like how each idea reverse-funnels into something bigger until the scenes become more clear.
I can't possible put across how grateful I am except to say A THOUSAND TIMES THANK YOU for the advice and detailed suggestions. Your efforts will not go to waste
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Silver's sanity is almost gone. Asbestos, do something.
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It's funny that Silver, in his crazed mental state state, was in fact right about the Man -er Hedgie-Eating Plants (Ol' Sticks would be proud!). Oh Silver, I thought we learned that the only thing Asbestos's kind are good for is chucking them at evil fire gods and the occasional blue hedgehog.
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OK im not looking at this comic any more ....U MAID SILVER CUSS, SO NO MORE OF THIS
u are a very talented artis so PLEASE do NOT litter on ur art (and by that i mean cuss words)
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The way you make the faces are great. His over exaggeration brings out a lot of humor.
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THANKS!
It can be really tricky sometimes to get the proper crazy expression what with the mini mobian mouths, I'm glad you like what I come up with
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Fax Pas.
You actually got the lyrics right and didn't think "Fur Ball" Like everyone else. Yes!
Good job. ^^
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suprisingly... i dont think Silver's is too far from actually being sane...... GODDAMN MAGICAL FLOWERS! XD
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I see not all of those evil plants from Sonic Unleashed were destroyed, eh?
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They're stardust speedway flowers actually lol
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Eh, potato potahto
They're still alive
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ASEBESTOS YOU STUPID FOOL
Okay, but, imagine all of Sonic '06, but instead of Blaze, there was Asbestos instead...
Can you imagine the cutscenes...
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Congratulations you just hypothetically made Sonic 06 the best game of all time
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Do not worry! Comics with a slow pace are the best i think :b because you can show more detail and the story becomes more fluent and interesting!
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I don't mind the slow pace. Really.
Please never stop, I adore this comic. ^^
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ohoh.... those flowers are evil!!!! Silver, be careful!!! D:
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Wait wasn't there something about silver fighting evil plants Mentioned in archie comics before the penders crisis?
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