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Published: 2008-01-07 02:02:34 +0000 UTC; Views: 2578; Favourites: 20; Downloads: 185
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This is a collaboration I am working on withThe concept involves rifts providing a portal into the future. Not even close to finished so please critique.
EDIT: Made MAJOR revisions to the concept. Just tossed the whole old one and started over. I am actually really satified with the outcome. Instead of rifts, this lake or sea is reflecting the future of this system of planets. It turned out much better than I thought it would. Still not done. Please critique.
Lotay, please download and check it out. I'll send you the PSD soon so you can tweak with it all you want.
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This is awesome. 
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Really? I gotta check it out. This one isn't quite finished. I just haven't had time to work on it. My collab partner is probably annoyed of me right now.
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Hahhaa!! Silly bum.
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here's my space thing, it's not very good though. ^_^; But I was just playing aroundf with things. I thought of an awesome idea for a half spcae half land idea.
Kindof a dream I had, where I was on this slab of floating rock in space, with like.. trees and stuff growing on it, and there was a gap in the atmostphere, where I could constantly see space and earth, day or night.
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First off, i'll say this is a wonderful concept. And definately a nice view.
As for critique; and yes i know this is not done, but here's what i'm thinking:
1) The mountains on the planet itself (that the view is "shot" from) look a little flat, (2D i guess you could say?) and could use a little more definition. They remind me more of hills than actual mountains. There is nothing rigid about them. Also, I think they need to be darker. Quite light to look realistic, and with all this light coming from space, the "dark side" of any surface would definately be deeper in hue. And the reflections of the mountains, could use some work. I forget what exactly you need to do, because I haven't worked with terragen in a long time, but there needs to be more of a ripple effect on the water. Theres way too much definition to the reflections.
2) I think the blues and dark shades from the spacescape really overpower the colors on the planet itself.
3) Some work on the "shoreline" is needed. Unless it's a pool of mercury or something, it definately wouldn't end so abruptly. And the water itself could use more definition. It looks too much like a flat mirror, reflecting space.
4) I think the smaller planet could use a change in color? To make it stand out a little more from the larger planet.
5)The ground looks a bit bland. It could be more lush and vibrant.
I'm sorry if I sound mean, and I'm tearing this apart bit by bit. I don't intend to whatsoever. But I definately love where your headed with this piece, and I hope any thoughts I had could help make this that much better.
I'm anxious to see it's progress.
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hmm, I logged onto this account to show you of an example of reflections i thought would give you an idea of what i meant. and ended up posting my entire comment under this DA account. This is my old account, so hopefully you'll get ahold of me on my new DA account and let me know how this is going.
DA username: Respice-Finem
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Thank you! I truly appreciate this critique! I'm glad you caught some elements that I probably wouldn't have noticed until too late. As I said this is a work in progress so what I did so far was based off a quick sketch. I haven't been able to put too much effort into it for a while. I'm in college, and I cannot prioritize this over anything. Nevertheless, the critique will be very helpful in the final product!
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Breath taking Chris! Words cannot describe this sight of yours. You are so talented.
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Thank you so much. You know it's people like you that keep me encouraged about my abilities. Thank you for that.
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Never stop believing in yourself Chris. I have been so lucky, I have had some big names teach me a thing or 2 about this stuff and they let me know they are there if I need them. So Pass on what you learn. Learn all you can and pass it on to the next generation. I love your stuff. You are very talented
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love it as is hope the chages don't change it to much
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I like I like I like!!! Man this is gonna be so awesome to work on!!!.......once I find time
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I'm sorry that I can't indeed provide advanced critique. :/ I simply wanted to comment to say that your space pictures are really cool.
The surreality of this picture is great, and I love how the rings are whispy things instead of mechanical constructs. I am unsure of how the "X" is generated in the one on the right (and it seems to be beginning on the foremost one too.) It's such a linear feature of an otherwise very rounded picture, and I don't think it adds anything to the asthetic value of the piece unless that's essential to the science of the things and is revealed the backstory of the collaboration. The foreground looks a bit, well, computer-generated.
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The "X"s supernovae and indicate the time lapse between what is in the rift and outside. The whole point is that these rifts ("rings" as you call them) give a glance into the future. The modified version of this probably won't contain rifts.
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Sorry for taking so long to Critique this. I hope its constructive.
I love the concept, and the ribbon-like nebula around the planet look great! The color of the landscape suggests a heavy atmosphere, but the abrupt transition of ground to space suggests no atmosphere. The planet is beautiful but the dark side could use some AA. The view through the big portal is almost perfect, just some AA needed on the edge of the ground near the planet. The design of the portals themselves needs some major revisions, they look too rough, and I'm not sure I like the motion blur on the smaller ones, though that view may change if their design is altered. The star field looks good as far as even distribution of the stars, you might consider adding a few larger stars, but only if they would not be distracting.
Overall it's coming along nicely, definitely a work in progress, but it has huge potential, and I really love the concept.
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Just noticed this in the small view, I don't think it would hurt the composition if you eliminated the 2 smaller portals all together. Though they might look better if they where designed differently.
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Hey! How do you like the new concept?
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Wow! I like it! The composition is excellent, and I really like the colors.
The AA looks good. Yay!
On the horizon there are is a dark line that stands out , it's just a small thing, but it messes with the flow between the planet and reflection.
I like how the sky is reflected in the water, I think that was handled realistically.
The shoreline at the bottom looks rough, the realism of the texture isn't at the same level as the rest of the piece, and the border between water and land is to abrupt.
The little cloud in front of the small planet is a nice touch, a few more around the horizon would look good IMHO.
I can't wait to see the finished piece!
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Wow an amazing concept, I feel like an idiot not having come up with something like that.
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Lol that comment was before I read your note.
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I like it great concept cant wait to see what you will make out of it
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