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Published: 2007-08-06 23:00:14 +0000 UTC; Views: 2156; Favourites: 17; Downloads: 15
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This is a splash page from my "work in progress" comic Shrike - references to humanity (no, you cannot read it anywhere). It is a rather tragic sci-fi story. The heroine (named Amial) is here talking to the disembodied voice of the starship she is piloting (known as The Shrike). The captions should give you an idea of what's going on without me needing to reveal anything.
I did this mainly as a concept study for the virtual cockpit the heroine is using to pilot. Yes, it's supposed to be her real body down there. Took longer than I expected, around 14 hours -- I got stuck on fiddling with all the small details ... ^_^;
All done from scratch in GIMP 2.3.18. All characters and concepts are Β©me.
Comments and critique are, as usual, most welcome.
EDIT: Did some major changes to her arms, the light as well as tweaked the dialogue a bit.
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Griatch
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Glad you like it! And as long as you link to the original, go ahead (drop me a line too, so I don't miss it, I'd love to see it!)
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Griatch (Thanks for the fave too!)
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my avatar says most of what i wanted to.
Its miles better than i could ever do as my skills are fairly low. however the neck is a little too long in my opinion but i do like the computer thingy
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You could have a point in the neck being a bit long, haven't thought about that. I'll have to ponder that for a bit, to see if it should be changed. Thanks for the feedback, always appreciated!
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Griatch
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This is very creative. I haven't seen anything like this before. Good job.
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Nice one. Very funny too - "Shut it" made me laugh.
I'd love to read the full story once it's finished. I hope you decide to post it up.
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Thanks. It's a work in progress thing and I have not decided where it will be published if it will at all. But I appreciate the encouragement!
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Griatch
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I'm sorry, can't offer anything in terms of advanced critique.
But I wanted to say this is jaw-droppingly good.
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Thanks, much appreciated hearing that!
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Griatch
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so beautiful !! I love how you used spirals and all that stuff 
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Glad you liked it!
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Griatch
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This is awesome! I dunno what else to say... I like every bit of it
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Wow, Griatch, amazing! What a complex scene this is, and it took only 14 hours! How many layers is this? There's so much to look at, yet the focus stays with her, lol, awesome. I love the holograpic cockpit, made me think I'd love to fly a ship like that! Then I read that the figure below was her real body...and I took a look at the cables and such...and decided I'm just fine staying on earth after all
It may be a tragic story, but this scene makes it look like it offers eyecandy, action and humor as well. "I will remind you later then." made me laugh, lol. Also reminded me of you...did you base the ship's personality on your own?
It's a great pic, I can't see anything wrong with it. I know I would have done some things differently, but my style's just different. Even her hair is good
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Thanks Gaeva!
14 hours felt long for me ... but at least all those tiny details I spent time on wasn't a total waste if you found lots to look at.
This one is ... hmm ... 14 visible layers I think, it turned out to be pretty complex an image to compose in the end. The physical body in its cocoon and all background colour is on one layer, The star field on one, and I think I did her body and her clothes on separate layers as well. The virtual cockpit controls around her has its on layer too. All the other layers are just shadows and bright highlights applied in various ways.
Lol, yes, that nifty virtual cockpit sure comes at a cost, doesn't it. Her body couldn't survive the G-forces if it was not completely restrained (it's actually supposed to be imerged in a shock-absorbing fluid too, but then it would have been difficult to show in the image). Nevertheless, the virtual controls are shiny, and she can pick whatever outfit she likes for her avatar.
Hehe, I haven't thought of modelling the ship's personality after anyone, least of all me. I really sound like that?
And finally thanks for the comment on her face, glad you found her (and her hair!) pretty 
I would be most interested in hearing how you would have done things differently, had you made this in your style. Always interesting to hear different views and strategies on going about things!
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Griatch
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Looks really good Griatch.
One question and once comment, is her right arm extended all the way, or is it just the angle that kinda makes it look like it is? and on her left arm, her forearm and upper arm appear to be out of proportion (like the elbow is located too far down the arm), unless she has really long arms and the angle of the forearm obfucates that fact.
'Course, being a 'virtual cockpit' you could nullify all my comments by simply claiming the virtual nature allows for some stretching/contorting of the body... >.>
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Thanks for the comment, Sith! I have made some changes to this image now, influenced by your suggestions.
I did tweak her right arm a bit, to make it clear it's slightly bent. Also, upon you mentioning it, I realized her left arm were indeed majorly out of proportion. It's strange how one can turn blind to one's work when working on it long enough! Hopefully I have corrected it now, thanks a lot for pointing it out.
I also made some changes to the text, since I wasn't really happy with the "tone" of it...
Thanks again for the critique. Most useful to me.
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Griatch
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Anytime.
I really had to make an effort to look for things that were off on this one Griatch, good work.
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