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JakesException [2013-04-17 16:43:17 +0000 UTC]
(Think you still owe me for this.)
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Demosthenes-H [2013-02-26 07:40:57 +0000 UTC]
Everytime I read this, the more times I want to come back and read it.
I hate on dA as soon as something is reminiscent of something not freshly posted, people ignore it!
<3 <3 so much love for this poem.
It rightly belongs in my one of a kind folder.
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goose-fat In reply to Demosthenes-H [2013-02-27 11:24:24 +0000 UTC]
Thanks, and let me just say that I'm flattered to be in that folder xD
It's not totally invisible yet, thankfully. People still stop by every once in a while.
How could we get around that failing of dA? :>
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Karinta [2013-02-25 23:01:19 +0000 UTC]
I don't know what it's about, but I like it.
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Darjavine [2013-01-25 16:18:10 +0000 UTC]
This is downright brilliant. Congratulations on the DD!!!
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goose-fat In reply to Darjavine [2013-01-25 16:53:43 +0000 UTC]
Thank you so much!
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arganthone [2013-01-25 01:59:59 +0000 UTC]
what
what girl
runs on gasoline?
-dude, that is pure beauty. i love it.aldkfjkdlfjaklafjkldfjkfjalkfj -hugs and runs away-
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goose-fat In reply to arganthone [2013-01-25 16:53:10 +0000 UTC]
lol
but if you run away, I can't thank you. :]
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Carolyn7727 [2013-01-25 01:41:51 +0000 UTC]
I LOVE IT. Great imagery.
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LightningIdle [2013-01-24 22:14:56 +0000 UTC]
Beautifully fractured up. You definitely earned the DD. C:
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archelyxs [2013-01-24 19:48:36 +0000 UTC]
Congrats on the DD! This is lovely work! (:
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goose-fat In reply to Zee-Who [2013-01-24 20:36:09 +0000 UTC]
Thank you (:
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goose-fat In reply to spoems [2013-01-24 20:36:19 +0000 UTC]
I'm so glad to hear it!
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goose-fat In reply to Lintu47 [2013-01-24 20:33:22 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! And thank you again for featuring me earlier!
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JakesException [2012-11-01 20:07:10 +0000 UTC]
To me, it sounds like a homage to lost love, or the trying to move on phase when a relationship ends.
Sexual imagery?:
"singing faster than we did before"
"(you peel the bark back on the logs,
darling,
but you're not sure what you see)"
I also felt that this poem was kind of mocking just how unfair life is, and how brutal love can be.
"either nail jello to a tree,"
I mean, excusing the slightly poor wording, that is visually brilliant and leaves a horrible sexual picture burnt into the reader's mind.
I love it.
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goose-fat In reply to JakesException [2012-11-02 21:56:39 +0000 UTC]
you hit the nail on the head there
I'm glad you love it, and I'm especially glad that you found the 'logs' metaphor - I hadn't actually meant it to be sexual, but I think your interpretation of it goes well with the spirit of the poem.
I was trying to express the tension between reality and fantasy as the difference between them grows, so, yes, it's about lost love, and about a couple of other things, too.
That it 'leaves a horrible sexual picture burnt into the reader's mind' might be the best compliment I've gotten in a while, so thanks!
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JakesException [2012-11-01 18:50:00 +0000 UTC]
This is brilliant. The vagueness and the double entendres work really well, and the balancing is near-perfect. You've got talent, girl - keep at it.
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goose-fat In reply to JakesException [2012-11-01 18:57:40 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! I'm glad that you liked it.
What did you get most out of it?
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