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chicinlicin — Drowning in Sound
Published: 2011-01-04 03:50:03 +0000 UTC; Views: 838; Favourites: 39; Downloads: 0
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first proper submission of the year, it's mah old OC silence
drowning in a sea of musical pillows~ although they are soft and fluffy, she hates anything that makes a sound or has colour~i'm very happy with this, kind of an awkward position for me to draw, and the pillows were a bit annoying, other than that this was really fun to make
it was nice to do an unsaturated character for once, kind of make up for that with the bright background though 
EDIT:removed sparkly light bits on pillows and fixed some shadows
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First thing, I would like to bring to light that your piece of artwork is deceptively spectacular. The method you have gone with is truly marvelous. It is understandable to me that you gave it an honest go with your undiluted collection of abilities. The fore-shortening of this piece is decisevely correct for the metaphor that I see you are striving to encapsulate, but now that I think about it this comment is probably unnecessary. Although I must say, I feel that your use of line could of been improved upon as I see that it can't equal the capability observable in the whole of the art piece. Finally I would like to illuminate that it has been a treat to pen this judgement for you and I think it will enable you to re-awesomeize your artwork.
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Yes, the contrast between the black and white and the colors is lovely, and it's a great image that you have here, but there are a lot of little things that are kind of killing it.
Mind you, I really had to LOOK at this piece to find those little things. I kept coming back to this piece over and over, trying to figure out what seemed "off" about it. Most people may not see these problems until I mention them, maybe not even then, but you and I will know what I mean.
HIGHLIGHTS: You have these highlights applied as double specks EVERYWHERE. It'd be one thing if there were rhyme or reason to it, but some of the highlights are inconsistent with the implied light source (above the girl, probably centered over the top blue shape?). Not only that, but each of of the double shapes is relatively uniform in size and position in relation to it's second dot. Many of the highlights in this scene would probably just be long stretches of lighter tone across a shape, with the highlights in the hair probably looking more like solid strands.
"But that's just the style!" the naysayers will say! Well, remove all the speckles on the piece. No, wait, I did it for you: [link]
Comparing the two, you may notice that the highlights serve more as a distraction from the piece as a part of the whole. They look more like specks of dust applied to piece, and they act as elements of contrast that don't assist the entire piece. Varying the applications of highlights will go a long way to making this piece seem richer and brighter.
As far as other things go, the folds on the pillow need work, the legs seem off, and the lighting seems inconsistent, all of which can be solved with some simple photo references - take some in your own home, it's fun!
I'd also argue that the pillows could go without the outlines around them, but that's more of a stylistic suggestion than anything.
Otherwise, it's a nice piece. Again, great concept to it.
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thank you for the critique, sorry if i sound a bit jerky in my comments after this 
i do agree with you on the highlights, yes it is my style, but i agree that it distracts away from things. i like having the highlights on the girl, but they are pretty useless on the shapes behind her. you didn't really need to make a comparison image, when i'm given suggestions and critiques like that i go and apply them myself.
as for shading, yes i do need to improve, this is the first picture i've done in quite a while that doesn't have the light source coming from above the character. at the time i was using an actual pillow for reference, but that was mainly for where her hands are on them. and with the legs, yes they are off, i think they might've been better if her feet were right since while working on this i noticed that they seemed to make them look distorted. but again this is another thing i have to work on, as most drawings of mine have characters in blank standing positions, so working on things like anatomy and proportion is something i have to do.
thank you again for your critique, i've applied some of your comments and altered the image a bit by removing all the light specks and fixing some pillow shadows, though i've kept the specks on the girl. just as a little note, not trying to sound like a jerk, but you really didn't need to provide the comparison image, if you describe your views well enough you don't need one, the only time i'd say you'd need something like that is when a person says that they can't see the areas you're talking about. anyway, thank you again again, i appreciate this
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I don't always explain myself all that well, so the comparison images tends to save a lot of back and forth comments. Plus, they're fun to do, don't take long, and make it seem like I put a LOT more time into my critique than I did.
And don't worry, you don't sound like a jerk at all 
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Cool concept. It is a nice contrast between her and the pillows, and even though she is just lying on the pillows, her desperate look and her clinging on the pillows on her side actually gives me the impression that the pillows are exploding outwards behind her with her trying to hold them back.
I like how you did the eyebrows.
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Oh!! She's great. Have you posted pictures of her before?
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thanks
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I really do like her though. She seems to have a little of that anti-social brat chic like Darue and Panva, but it seems like color and sound causes her pain or anxiety, so it's justified. You pathos good!
Plus, I'm ridiculously addicted to stripes and black and white.
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I remember her~
I always love staring at things with the black/white and bright colors thing going on~
I also have an OC that hates color....He doesn't have a problem with sound though xD
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i love high contrast sorta things
really? i must see them!
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I only have like 3 drawings of him on my computer @.@
Here's a shitty reference I made:
[link]
Need to write down his backstory somewhere, it's actually one of my personal favorites of all of my creations xD
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It is a nice contrast of character and background. It also might be a good one for your portfolio for the nice contrast yet soothing blend. Especially soft pastels mixed with harsh, cruel b/w character
I especially like the detail of the beret slightly off the head as it naturally would be when you lay down flat on a pillow.
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thank you 
heh, i almost didn't add in her beret
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Well, you've got a good eye on when something looks right and doesn't Otherwise you wouldn't be as popular of an artist as you are now
Ah...seems like you got the beret to work perfectly. The ribbons actually seem a little off for her mellow, solitary tone and the beret seems to fit her tone even better IMO. So it could be one of those coincidental changes that ends up fitting much better and all by accident
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I still find silence to be a pretty creepy charatcter... who haunts my dreams.....my nightmares..... lol jk but she is creepy and THIS PIC IS STILL EPIC..... i'm gonna try my best not to bring up the posistion. Oops...
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she is meant to be somewhat creepy
thank you
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I really love this. The colors are quite different and the fact that she is in greyscale and that the BG is bright and colorful really make her stand out. Great work!
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thank you
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I really can't look at positions like that and not feel dirty.
I like the Gothic Lolita look going on though.
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yeeaaaahhh....i really wanted to change her legs...that would've made it better 
thanks, i wish i drew more lolita things, i used to love drawing that kind of stuff.
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