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Ciapura [2015-08-06 08:09:44 +0000 UTC]

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This looks really great, I love Madoka in this form and you managed to capture her in such a great way.
My favourite part of this artwork is how you drew the legs. The shape of them is enhanced by the coloring and they just look really perfect. The way you color is also very nice, it has a very coherent feeling and it fits well with the background. (I love the starry skies behind her).

There are only a few things that take away from the overall picture.
First of the face. It is nicely shaded and I like how you did the eyes but the proportions of the face are unbalanced. Right now her forhead seems to be sticking out to the left and her right eye (left in the picture) seems to be further back in her skull than the other one which gives a bit of a wonky impression. I know it's hard to draw faces in this angle (I've struggled a lot with it) but it becomes easier with practice so just keep drawing!

Secondly, the arm that's holding the bow seems to be a bit stiff. This is just a minor thing though but if you had left a little bend at the elbow, the arm would look more natural together with the rest of her body.

And third, the coloring of the bow seems to be slightly different and not as detailed as the rest of the picture. It may be because it has such a different texture but I think it could use some more work. But again, that's just a minor detail if I nitpick a bit

Another thing that I love about this picture is the slight blur you added to the bottom, especially around the foot. It really brings the picture together and it looks just great! The picture has nice action and I like how you did such an advanced pose. Overall, great work!

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fireytika [2015-08-09 03:34:43 +0000 UTC]

Hello~ such pretty work you have here! Madoka is lovely~ and i like your coloring! But, i think you can improve in some parts:
Anatomy. Her hands pose seems too stiff. Her expression, too. Well, if i could suggest, it would be nice if her head is follow the arrow dirrection. While her eyes looking at us, or looking to arrow direction. Made her more serious expression,  or maybe a smirk? Because this one looks ambiguous.  You can study some photo preferences to help you improve ^^
It's nice to have experiments with face expression,  too! I'm still learning with this one, too ^^
Shading. I really like what you did on her stocking.  Her dress is lovely, too. But, you have to add more shading and some folds, so it does represent fabric material.
   
Overall,  great job! Hope these help, and happy improving! ^^

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PrincessKougyoku [2015-08-07 10:11:33 +0000 UTC]

So cute art ^^

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Tundrea28 [2015-08-06 22:21:34 +0000 UTC]

Hiya!! Snazzy admin here to help you improve ^A^/
Madoka looks super pretty and the shading you've used is so beautiful!!
If this look like a lot of text, I tend to ramble so don't worry >..>;
Anyway time to start!!
First up - general anatomy.
For the most part, its pretty good. 
 However her legs are a little too far from her torso. I'd suggest moving them towards the left, so that her left knee (on our right) slightly overlaps with her right boob (on our left).
 As for her head, the top left part of her head is a little too big. I'd recommend deforming that inwards, since that part of her head is smaller as its further away from the viewer.
 Her chin is also too close to her neck for the angle she's portrayed in. My advice is to select the entire bottom jaw and deform it so that it's vertically aligned with her nose. 
 Her fingers on the hand holding the bow are also a little too small. The bow isn't a thick item like a sword, so you'd be able to see more of her fingers.
 Her arm holding the bow is also a tad random. Especially as she isn't looking in the direction of where she's aiming. You can either bend it to make it aim upwards to the direction her eyes are, or you can move her pupils to look downwards.
 Also with her dress, there's too much of one side only. By this, I mean that there isn't a proper fold to depict the dress resting in between her legs. To fix this, you can add an additional layer of frills and join it with the pre-existing one, just changing it so that it coincides with the inner material of her god dress.
 Another issue with her dress is that the side that's behind her legs isn't the same as the side covering her legs. By this I mean that the side covering her legs features loads of frills and doesn't cover the entire leg, just a little of the thigh. The side that's behind her legs doesn't have this, instead its pretty flat and there's no sign of frills anywhere. I'd suggest cutting down the size of her galaxy and only limit it to frills that fall off her legs and straight down.

Next up - face anatomy.
 Her face is pretty lopsided and there is a lot of spare space you could be utilizing. Move her facial features down so that the a bit of room between the mouth and chin, but not too much.
 Once that is done, you see that her right eye (on our left) is slightly bigger that the other. Make it smaller so that the bottom eyelashes align. Flipping the image back and forth can be super helpful with this.
 Now that that's done, her head is actually too tall. From the top of her eyebrows, select the entire top of the head and flatten it to the half way mark. After doing this you'll have to make it more circular again, but that's no issue for a digital artist!! 

Lastly, shading. 
There aren't many issues here at all. The only issue I see is how her face is shaded. In relation to the rest of her shading, her face is a little too dark. Think about your light source and where its coming from. The area on her boobs is almost pure white, but in relation to her face (which is pretty much the same angle) it's got a lot more shading. So I'd suggest to tone it down (my puns never get old) and only use a little bit of shading in that area.

Hopefully that was able to help in some way!!
If you have any other queries or works that need critiquing, then feel free to drop by our group again ^A^/
Keep on improving and I hope you have a marvellous day!!!! 

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KuroNegii16 [2015-08-06 19:44:13 +0000 UTC]

Nice~

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