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NominalFees [2012-07-08 14:33:36 +0000 UTC]

Hi! ~NominalFees here again, critiquing your piece for #FeedbackFrenzy feedback week!

The first thing I noticed about this shot was your subject's makeup, which I think is absolutely splendid. It really effectively draws the gaze to her eyes, while also adding a good amount of color to her face. Nice work there!

I like how the contrast in her hair works with this photo. It nicely outlines "inside" and "outside" sections of this shot, which makes the subject's face stand out. That's also good work, as well as quite lucky

The DoF for this shot is also mostly good, as it once again isolates the subject from the background, excepting one outlier; the branch on the right. It distracts the viewers attention from the subject; I think it would be best to blur it a bit, if you have some post-processing tool that can do so (photoshop, other editing programs, whatever).

The problem with the overall composition arises here: I think you had good intentions in using the branches on the top, bottom and right of the shot, as they would have worked nicely to frame the shot around the subject. The problem was that the branch on top cuts off part of the subject's head, which is not too wonderful, and also has a little twig sticking out that not only gets in the way of the subject, but happens to be in focus. The branch unfortunately proves to be more of a distraction than a helper.

The next problem is with your model's expression; it's very bland. The face convey's nothing in particular; it's just kind of... emotionless. The main reason I think it appears this way is because she is looking AT the camera. If her gaze was in any other direction, it might look contemplative, but here it just looks blank. Her slightly open lips don't help; they just make it look more awkward. I'd recommend making more of an effort to direct your model in the future, so they get a look you're aiming for.

One last thing; looking at this, as well as your other two photos submitted to this contest, I get the feeling that you've gotten way too used to the lightening, vintage-y post-processing effect you seem to be using. In the last photo I critiqued, it was nice, but it's not always a helper. It actually washes out some of the lighter colors significantly, including, in this shot, the subject's skin tones hair, and even outline. There's nothing wrong with natural tones; you should consider using a photo as is sometimes.

With some adjustment on-site, this shot could have been better. Improve your eye, and you should be able to pick out most of these things and remove them in advance. This shot does prove that you have some skill though! Keep it up, and happy shooting!

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Myst-Moon [2012-07-04 05:03:16 +0000 UTC]

Critique for FF ^^

I really like her makeup. It kind of looks like a butterfly. In this, the henna doesn't fight for the spotlight, and it acts as an interesting element. I also like the natural framing by the tree, and how it's like she ripping through it on the bottom with the placement of her hand. However, a consistency I've noticed is the model looking bored to me. Her eyes are a beautiful blue that really draws attention, but the look so bored. Other than that, this is very well executed. Keep up the good work!

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serel [2012-07-03 17:48:45 +0000 UTC]

Hello Luciie,
This critique is part of ~Feedback-Frenzy and I hope it will be helpful to you.

I very much like the natural framing here and the way the model interacts with the tree. Combined with her expression and the makeup it makes me think of a fairy or other mystical being living in the woods.

Lighting and use of colours add to this calm and “otherworldly” mood. Everything fits very well together and I like the yellow tinge of the photo. However, I would prefer the tones a bit darker or stronger coloured. Perhaps not as much as you did with Wandering Beauty II (although that's a very nice shot, too) but something between those two. This light version has some appeal, but I find it hard to focus on details.

The makeup on face and hands is nicely done. The colours in the face are melting into each other and the pattern on the hands look very detailed and tidy. Nevertheless, I think it’s a bit too much. In my opinion it would have been better, if there were only one kind of makeup – either the colours, or the tattoos. Those, of course, could be on both, face and hands.

In conclusion I would say that you put a lot of work into this, including preparation, which is a very good thing if you ask me. The overall outcome is very good and makes me want to look at other works done by you.

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ffenix-nova [2012-07-03 04:23:13 +0000 UTC]

Hello! Last pic, I bet you are sick of my alredy XD #FeedbackFrenzy
Another Wandering Beauty, for sure, This photo surely takes advantage of the model herself and the place where she is. The seems mystique with the makeup and editing that makes her like someone you one to see on the forest, like an Angel or Mistical creature.
The eyes are showing curiosty but they are a bit is seductive too.
I have to say that is too shiny on the left next to that the light makes better the composition.
And I like the pink touches, it makes it all return to her face and over all her beutiful and deep blue eyes.
Nice job!

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GiuliaDepoliART [2012-07-02 15:26:33 +0000 UTC]

Hello! First of all, I let you know that this comment will enter the #FeedbackFrenzy 's comment contest
I like this picture, it's very nice. The location is perfect, the trees suit perfectly with the model and the concept, in my opinion. She reminds me a creature from ancient greek mythology; besides, portraits in nature are always very pleasant to see. Her face expression is perfectly captured, also her pose is nice, and she's definitely earned the title of "beauty"! Colour are so soft and vivid at the same time, the whole make-up is just awesome and original, congrats to the make-up artist! And the bokeh in the background is great, I like it very much.
However, there are a few things that could be improved. There's a bit too much light that comes from the left. I noticed that big, white spot in her hair near the eyes, it looks too shiny and quite confused... , Next time you can try with a lower exposure. Also, the shadows just look a bit too red and pink to me, in particular in the hair and the branches; a more natural tone could suit the picture better. Last thing that looks a bit strange is the composition... If you put her face in the middle, it will stand out more and the whole picture will have a greater impact
But don't be discouraged by this critique, I just wanted to give you some ideas to make your photographs look better, even if this one is already beautiful! I immediately fell in love with it, the atmosphere is almost magical, as if it was taken in the middle of a fairytale And your model, Natasha, looks beautiful and delicate... It's a very good portrait indeed, and I'm sure you'll get better and better!

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RadiantRarity [2012-06-22 20:48:15 +0000 UTC]

Oh wow beautiful

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