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bikemerc [2016-02-04 01:02:40 +0000 UTC]

Love it ! The art is excellent! The lancer must be magical to walk around in armor all day. It must allow him to hide his weapons as well. So what is in the vagabond sack ? 

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Charneco [2015-02-14 10:02:47 +0000 UTC]

I almost forgot to put this link :

18 Tips for Comic Book Artists by Jean- Moebius- Giraud.

Enjoy the master. 

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Charneco [2015-02-14 09:54:34 +0000 UTC]

At last I have some time to talk about this page and knowledge enough to say something interesting. You know I love your work, Wes, but there are some problems on this page that are a nuisance to fully enjoy a comic. 

First of all, I think you've tried to explain too much in only one page (what it's too little space), which causes the important things to remain spread around without importance. I think that arrival to the castle would be much interesting being a long vignette that goes almost a third part of a page. 

(Examples from Long John Silver, -Xavier Dorison, Mathieu Laufray, Blueberry - J.M Charlier , Jean Giraud; Asgard - Xavier Dorison, Ralph Meyer )

Long John Silver Example 01
Long John Silver Example 02

Blueberry Example 01

Asgard Example 01




Also, your color it's evenly distributed, and it's all realistic. Do not think in comic as a succession of perfect and fully rendered artwork. Most of the vignettes can benefit if you remove the background and put different and non-realistic color to make an impact on the reader. 

(Examples from Asgard - Xavier Dorison, Ralph Meyer ; Lune Lenvers, -Blutch ; Portugal - Cyril Pedrosa; Unastoria - GIPI )

Asgard Example 01

Lune L'envers Example 01

Example Portugal 01

Unastoria Example 01
Unastoria Example 02
Unastoria Example 03
Unastoria Example 04


Finally, you've not played with points of view. Think in comic as a movie, were you have low-angle shot, high-angle, Bird's eye, Close-up...try always to have an establishing shot or long shot, a medium and close-up to have diverse points of view and to get a non boring page. 

(Examples from Asgard - Xavier Dorison, Ralph Meyer ; 

Asgard Example 01
Asgard Example 02

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Gold-Ringed-Eyes [2015-01-28 02:35:15 +0000 UTC]

Interesting to see you doing a comic page, I look forward to more

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999inthedark [2014-12-21 20:47:02 +0000 UTC]

Pretty good for a first page I'd say! If this were a story, it's often best to start with a little bit of an introduction in one way or another before you begin revealing the overarching plot. So with that in mind, I say this is an excellent first page! Definitely looking forward to more when you get to them~

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Kronosaurus82 [2014-11-25 09:02:42 +0000 UTC]

Being this your first shot at a comic, I think you did a great job! My first ever comic page (about a billion years ago... nobody saw it but my parents ) wasn't already this good.
Since this is your first page, may I give you a small suggestion?
When you design a page (in terms of panels) I would suggest you to do it over a "9 cells cage"... in other words, divide your canvas/page in 9 equal parts (It's not mandatory to do it with a ruler, your eye is usually enough): with such a base structure will be much easier to get an optimal panel diviion per page.
It's commonly accepted that 9 panels is about the maximum you should have per page, because the more panels there are, the more these panels are going to be small, making your page more difficult to read (and more difficult to draw for you).  
Of course that's not an unbreakable rule, sometimes 10 or even 12 panels could be ok, but I would suggest you to apply this "9 or less panels per page" thing.

I hope my comment won't offend you, I'm not trying to be naggy or to nitpick, I really like your works.

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putridCheese [2014-11-23 00:17:43 +0000 UTC]

Izzit a web comic?

I think there are a bit too many panels on the page and it appears to make the page overly abundant with text bubbles and narration blocks.

Art is nice though, can't deny that.

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Tetsu-neko [2014-11-22 20:17:27 +0000 UTC]

I love the artwork. Clean, crisp, and colorful without too much clutter.

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Wolf-Fang4 [2014-11-22 16:17:50 +0000 UTC]

Love your comic.

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Jenny2-point-0 [2014-11-22 12:55:57 +0000 UTC]

Awwh so the orc didn't turn into a kawaii orc lady? now I'm sad XD haha. Was it an orc btw? I can't remember what you said XD But ya know what I mean haha. I like the fact that you've done your own play of a knight's journey story. I can sense some plot twists coming. Speaking of which, how brilliant would it be if the green lacer took off their helmet and revealed what they looked like, and in doing so revealed themselves as a woman haha. Very cool style in this as well btw. You did a lot with lines here and it worked out really well [=

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KadenDragon [2014-11-22 10:21:40 +0000 UTC]

Saw this first one tumblr and freaked out
super excited!!


I like the style you chose to do this in
and already loving the main character x>

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Shiryuban [2014-11-22 10:16:22 +0000 UTC]

That's cool! I wasn't expecting comic pages from you, that's a suprise And in a very different style than the usual landscape or character ^^ Nice!

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Porecomesis [2014-11-22 10:15:56 +0000 UTC]

You've definitely caught my focus with the Bistro, and that simplistic yet characteristically unique armour the Lancer wears. I think the writing's a bit thin, though. It's a bit straining to read.

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MystShadow20xx [2014-11-22 10:13:53 +0000 UTC]

I dunno, for a one shot this seems like an interesting premise. I love tales of chivalry and knightly travels, myself, and this seems like just the comic to get my fill of that. I hope you continue this.

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