wdnest [2013-01-11 00:19:29 +0000 UTC]
Hi there - this is good chapter. I like the suspense build up. I got lost on Trent and the character there and it if related to the other person ie is Trent the same as the anonymous person or is he a different person - perhaps it was in previous chapters. Interesting concept of waking up though. Hope that helps.
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TobiFanBoy In reply to wdnest [2013-01-15 06:04:40 +0000 UTC]
Thanks for the feedback! Honestly, I believe I posted this not having yet decided whether or not one of the male characters was going to be named Trent or Ian, and I would to go back and fix this in the actual story (As this is a preview and there are no "previous chapters" haha), however, I ran out of fuel for this story and never ended up getting past the first 2000 words... So, sadly, it never saw the light of day |:
I also don't use this account for nearly anything anymore... Perhaps I'll change that one day soon.
Again, thank you!
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