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TheShanarRainlight
Published: 2018-01-05 00:15:11 +0000 UTC; Views: 1557; Favourites: 49; Downloads: 0
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    Rain crackled as it hit the ground, scattering sparks in every direction. It was a nostalgic kind of rain, with a warm electric glow and steam that curled upwards as the falling water smashed into the pavement.

    It was a beautiful sight, but a dangerous one.

    A familiar voice startled him from behind. “You actually came.”

    Cathias turned from the window to see the soft glow of Matiah’s eyes blinking from the doorway. Blue eyes, the color of a sparkmoth in flight. “Of course.” 

     “Come then. We need you to see this.”

     “The worms.” Cathias said, keeping pace with her. “You said it was urgent.”

    She sighed as the door slid open.

    Cathias winced as he stepped into a room. Research lights were painfully bright, reflecting off the angular metal walls, and revealing far too much about the world. Like how tired Matiah actually was. 

    She pushed him towards a wall of cases stacked up to the ceiling. “This. This is wrong. Fix it Cathias, I know you can.”

    Each worm was about as long as his forearm, organs still wriggling and pulsing beneath translucent skin. But they were shot through with dark purple veins that marbled through the worm like the lightning that never left the sky.

    And they were still hooked up to those blasted generators.

    “Well?” Matiah had far too much hope in her voice. 

    “They’re not dead yet.”

     “If that’s all we needed to know, we wouldn’t have called in an entomologist. You’re the expert, how do we fix it?”

    Cathias eyed the metal hands that barbed into the worm and threaded through the wall, powering the brilliant lights above them. And the trains, and the heat in their homes.  

    He put a hand on one of the worms, feeling for the pores that should have pockmarked the surface.  But the skin was as smooth as a smokefly wing. “You clip-bred them all, didn’t you?”

    Matiah didn’t reply. 

    Cathias closed his eyes. “I warned you.”

    “Yes, you did.” Matiah had bitterness in her voice. “And I was so proud of myself for ignoring you. I harvested energy faster than ever before, and I was wrong. But I’m repenting. Fix it, Cathias. I know you can.”

    “I’m sorry.” Cathias stepped away from the worms, reading the shock on his former friend’s face. “I’d hook myself up to the generator if I could.”

    Matiah smiled grimly, displaying a row of pointed teeth. “I’m lighting the city on dying worms, Cathias. I’d like that more than anything.”

    She led him out of the raw light, back to where he could see the coursing rain, scattering dim light across the tile.

    There was so much energy all around them, sparking in the rain and flashing in the sky, but unharnessed, untamable as wind.

    The glow in Matiah’s eyes dimmed as she watched the water fall. “What do I tell my researchers? Blast it, what do I tell the Premier?”

    "Tell her to prepare. To tell everyone to prepare.” 

    The world was going to become very dark.

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Comments: 15

petdan64 [2018-06-01 08:45:40 +0000 UTC]

A fine story - some of the other stuff in your gallery (library? ) is superb too. Keep it up!

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heartdialect [2018-02-15 15:27:16 +0000 UTC]

this is such a feat. impressive, gripping worldbuilding is hard in and of itself, much less in so few words. your little story was thrumming with electricity (i think the 'sparks', flashes and lights in it all contributed to that) and such a sensory experience with all that natural imagery. your description of the rain was gorgeous — 'It was a nostalgic kind of rain, with a warm electric glow and steam that curled upwards as the falling water smashed into the pavement.' — and it drew me right in. and i adore how you set the scene and introduced the character in one fell stroke here — 'Research lights were painfully bright, reflecting off the angular metal walls, and revealing far too much about the world. Like how tired Matiah actually was.' 

congratulations on the DD! i'm delighted that this was featured. 

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MisfitsTamara [2018-02-15 02:53:24 +0000 UTC]

An excellent way to spark (ha!) interest. Good world building and good luck with expanding it! I know how challenging that can be sometimes but you can do it!

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FaolSidhe [2018-02-10 09:44:55 +0000 UTC]

The universe seems interesting. Is there more ?

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Catgirldstr11 [2018-02-04 20:55:37 +0000 UTC]

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JessaMar [2018-02-04 19:34:50 +0000 UTC]

I like your focus on sensory experiences - the brightness of the lights, the feel of the worms, and so on.

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GameUniverso [2018-02-04 17:15:22 +0000 UTC]

Scientific and alluring!

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HelevornArt [2018-01-19 23:20:26 +0000 UTC]

I love the subtle worldbuilding, how you introduce the setting without describing it separately but weaving it between the lines. I also like this kind of fiction where the reader doesn't know much about the characters but can guess just enough from their interaction to get an idea about their relationship, personality and background to understand the story. The idea of the energy harvesting and the electric rain is striking and the images are also beautiful, the rain and the lighting, the worms (you even described how they feel to the touch!).

I have to read your other story set in the same world! ^^

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TheShanar In reply to HelevornArt [2018-01-20 00:47:14 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for the thoughtful reply.  

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Sleyf [2018-01-19 08:52:15 +0000 UTC]


Thanks for sharing your wonderful writing with us, it's always a pleasure to read - be sure to check out the work of your fellow featured writers too in our Monthly Round-Up!
Keep up the great work!

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MissAddledMiss [2018-01-07 01:15:14 +0000 UTC]

This was a fascinating story. The world you set up in this short story is intriguing and I would love to learn more about it, particularly this society's reliance on such an unconventional power source. The imagery of the rainlight and the dark purple veins of the worms was also really well done!

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TheShanar In reply to MissAddledMiss [2018-01-09 06:04:43 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for reading! It went through a number of drafts, so I'm glad you liked it.

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Sleyf [2018-01-06 19:35:25 +0000 UTC]

I enjoyed this a lot, it's short yet it's a very interesting glimpse into a world which has a lot of promise. I loved the description of the purple veins in the worms, 'like the lightening that never left the sky' - again, you don't give much away, but that single line expands the world a bit further without having to feed the setting to us.

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TheShanar In reply to Sleyf [2018-01-09 06:05:50 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the thoughtful comment. My goal was to introduce the world without a massive info dump, so I'm glad it worked out.

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Sleyf In reply to TheShanar [2018-01-09 07:01:10 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome! You succeeded I think

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