Comments: 8
perpetualdistraction [2015-04-21 17:14:57 +0000 UTC]
it's spellbinding.
it took some time in building up the momentum but when it gets to that line "crush me back to sleep" it gains this newly born force and it makes me want to just inhale all of your words
your spacing, enjambment, and lack of punctuation here work very very well with this material
but damn considering this poem within the context of those deep-sea creatures is a really powerful thing.
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SycamoreSea In reply to perpetualdistraction [2015-04-22 03:01:50 +0000 UTC]
People should describe things as spellbinding more often.
Thank you m'dear, it's all because of you.
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Tirramirr [2015-04-01 14:43:24 +0000 UTC]
Oh, this was one awesome piece of poetry!
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DragonBlessed [2015-03-31 01:32:54 +0000 UTC]
THIS IS SO COOL
I really like this a lot, I love the sort of frantic flow it has because of the no punctuation, and then I read the thing about the pressure monsters (yes) and NOW IT IS EVEN MORE COOL
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SycamoreSea In reply to DragonBlessed [2015-03-31 12:57:37 +0000 UTC]
THANKS! I'm glad you like it, but I'm EVEN MORE GLAD I know about those pressure monsters. : D
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