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SycamoreSea — crush me back to sleep
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Published: 2015-03-31 01:07:01 +0000 UTC; Views: 531; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 0
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Description i am a frayed


remnant brought up from the deep
i am

                                                  i am i am i am
                                                  not sure i am

anything without the pressure
lullaby as dark as
the fragments of a cold dream

that kind of cold that eats
into your bones and you can't
forget it forget being
asleep wishing

it would last
as long as winter and winter lasts
forever in the deep

where i am


here whispers sun
falling fraying
my edges torn apart i can't
hold together in the light let me

come apart you don't have to watch


i'll rip myself into flowers and false
green hearts they aren't
right like i am

not right

i am awake     crush me back to sleep
blind me bind me sinking
is easier than swimming up


if i greet the sun
it devours me i am
helpless i deserve to be

a vagrant in winter pieces
held together by the dark
insides not quite right all aglow
and foundering and

held together
in the sun i am

something new, afraid
of threads coming loose, raveling
back into hearts and something
green

awake

with eyes
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Comments: 8

perpetualdistraction [2015-04-21 17:14:57 +0000 UTC]

it's spellbinding.

it took some time in building up the momentum but when it gets to that line "crush me back to sleep" it gains this newly born force and it makes me want to just inhale all of your words

your spacing, enjambment, and lack of punctuation here work very very well with this material

but damn considering this poem within the context of those deep-sea creatures is a really powerful thing.

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SycamoreSea In reply to perpetualdistraction [2015-04-22 03:01:50 +0000 UTC]

People should describe things as spellbinding more often.

Thank you m'dear, it's all because of you.

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perpetualdistraction In reply to perpetualdistraction [2015-04-21 17:16:42 +0000 UTC]

ah the more times i read this the more i like it

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Tirramirr [2015-04-01 14:43:24 +0000 UTC]

Oh, this was one awesome piece of poetry!

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SycamoreSea In reply to Tirramirr [2015-04-01 15:26:32 +0000 UTC]

Why thank you!

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Tirramirr In reply to SycamoreSea [2015-04-03 12:58:59 +0000 UTC]

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DragonBlessed [2015-03-31 01:32:54 +0000 UTC]

THIS IS SO COOL
I really like this a lot, I love the sort of frantic flow it has because of the no punctuation, and then I read the thing about the pressure monsters (yes) and NOW IT IS EVEN MORE COOL

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SycamoreSea In reply to DragonBlessed [2015-03-31 12:57:37 +0000 UTC]

THANKS! I'm glad you like it, but I'm EVEN MORE GLAD I know about those pressure monsters. : D

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