HOME | DD

SRSmith β€” Pete, Re-Pete by-nc-nd

Published: 2008-04-21 04:04:02 +0000 UTC; Views: 3996; Favourites: 84; Downloads: 53
Redirect to original
Description Two hours ago, Pete had been pulled gasping from a tank of jelly. Now he sat in an immaculate office, wearing borrowed clothes with his employer staring him down from the far side of a granite slab desk top.

"Welcome back, Pete." Terrence Carter, syndicate heavyweight and the man Pete ran data packets for. "I must say, you look better than you did the last time I saw you."

Pete sat straight in his chair, tentatively rolling and flexing muscle that remembered thirty eight years of abusive mileage, but didn't feel a days wear and tear. "What happened Terry, what's going on?"

"You were running a very special package for me Pete, one we couldn't copy, one we had to risk transporting as original data." Terry paused, pulling at each of his white shirt cuffs in turn, evening their length against the dark fabric of his suit. "You had an incident Pete, for some reason you seem to have hidden my package from me. I don't know exactly what went wrong in your head, Pete, but when we finally... recovered you, what remained of you no longer had my package installed. We want it back, Pete, I want it back."

"What are you talking about? I don't remember that, I'm not on an assignment yet." Pete shook his head, his face a puzzled frown. Sometimes he had episodes if he stored data too long, there could be cross talk, and data fragments without context drifting in his head caused all sorts of unpredictable things, some unpleasant, but he couldn't remember anything about this.

"Of course you don't remember, you're not the Pete that carried. We just finished growing you from the backup sample we took before we briefed the original you." Terry pushed himself back from his desk, steepling his fingers. "We keep insurance in case things like this happen, in case we lose a good carrier, especially one with a package installed.

"So I'm a snapshot of myself, from before I left?"

"You're a cleaned up version of the old you, rechipped and hot-wired to carry. You were the best we had Pete, so I was a little disappointed when you betrayed me."

Pete ran a hand across the fresh stubble on his head. "What do you want from me now?"

Terry's eyes narrowed to slits. "I want you to figure out where you put my package Pete, I want it delivered."

"Wait a minute, if I'm a snapshot from before the briefing, I don't have any memory of what happened later. That knowledge died with the original Pete," he shuddered involuntarily, "I mean the original me."

"True. You don't know exactly what you did, but you can figure it out. Situational familiarity, behavioral predispositions, pattern predicability. Faced with the same objective, and in the same circumstances, you'll know what you would have done, where you would have gone. Quite frankly, you're the only one who can figure out what the hell you've done with my package, and I suggest you put some effort into doing just that if you want to get another day older."

Pete regarded his employer as he weighed his options. He couldn't help but wonder what bled out of the package he'd been carrying to make him want to risk crossing the syndicate. He also wondered whether he'd been dead when they'd found him, or if death had come later.

One thing was certain, he was being given a second chance, and a short leash. He'd better be very careful not to slip up again, one way or the other.
Related content
Comments: 90

Maang In reply to ??? [2008-06-21 02:47:09 +0000 UTC]

Very cool

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

Jshei In reply to ??? [2008-06-20 16:59:03 +0000 UTC]

Fantastic job! This would make an excellent longer short story

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

SRSmith In reply to Jshei [2008-06-21 02:45:33 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I'm gradually wrapping my head around plot lines for a longer story, so we'll see what happens.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

Jshei In reply to SRSmith [2008-06-21 03:57:39 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

LadySphinx In reply to ??? [2008-06-20 16:45:00 +0000 UTC]

...more? D:

This is incredible stuff (congrats on the DD, by the way!). I'm hooked. @w@ Are you going to continue this?

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

SRSmith In reply to LadySphinx [2008-06-21 02:46:24 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the comment and the congrats! I'm working out plot lines for a longer story that Pete may have a part in - we'll see whether he makes the final cut.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

LadySphinx In reply to SRSmith [2008-06-21 02:58:33 +0000 UTC]

Ooh, I hope so. I love the concept of it, and your execution is grand!

Do you have any books out, as possibly indicated by the bit in your signature?

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

SRSmith In reply to LadySphinx [2008-06-21 03:01:56 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I don't have anything out, though I certainly plan to (and I've got a tremendous amount of respect for those that do).

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

LadySphinx In reply to SRSmith [2008-06-21 03:19:30 +0000 UTC]

Aw, okay. :< Well, whenever you do get something out I'll do my best to purchase it. I may be a primarily graphic artist, but I have much higher respect for those who can use words to paint pictures, and I try to support them as best I can.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

SRSmith In reply to LadySphinx [2008-06-21 03:53:00 +0000 UTC]

I appreciate that.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

AWdeV [2008-06-20 16:34:30 +0000 UTC]

Very interesting story. Nice wordplay in its title too!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

SRSmith In reply to AWdeV [2008-06-21 02:46:44 +0000 UTC]

Thank you - sometimes the titles are as much fun for me to write as the stories are.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

AWdeV In reply to SRSmith [2008-06-21 10:59:35 +0000 UTC]

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

hackthefoible In reply to ??? [2008-06-20 14:05:36 +0000 UTC]

haha- Amazing. I loved it. Very easy to read and very intriguing. Good stuff!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

SRSmith In reply to hackthefoible [2008-06-21 02:46:55 +0000 UTC]

Thanks - glad you liked it!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

zenathena In reply to ??? [2008-06-20 11:45:57 +0000 UTC]

Eee, I like how you start reading with no idea what's going on and then the picture subsequently, slowly unfolds itself. Very cool idea(s), as well. The "re-grown" Pete thing gave me shivers. o.O

I would love to read the rest of this story.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

SRSmith In reply to zenathena [2008-06-21 02:48:51 +0000 UTC]

Thank you - it's hard sometimes to fabricate a plot that builds when you know you've got to be tied up neatly in 600 words, so I'm always glad when people think it works.

This story won't go on from here, but the characters and concepts will likely surface in something longer.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

rainwisher2 In reply to ??? [2008-06-20 07:24:57 +0000 UTC]

Excellent job, especially considering the word limit.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

SRSmith In reply to rainwisher2 [2008-06-21 02:49:00 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

windwater [2008-05-09 19:47:10 +0000 UTC]

I love it! It opens up so many possibilities.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

SRSmith In reply to windwater [2008-05-10 02:55:09 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad you do, thank you! There are a number of elements from the short stories I've written that are gelling into a larger world, and a larger story. Some are concepts, some are characters and some are simply ambient technology. I'm always happy to find a story that people see as the start of something, as hopefully on some level it is just that.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

naiadgirl1012 In reply to ??? [2008-04-22 03:16:15 +0000 UTC]

I dare you to write something longer. A short story with very little action.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

SRSmith In reply to naiadgirl1012 [2008-04-22 15:05:35 +0000 UTC]

A Dare? Well, how can I resist such a thing?

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

naiadgirl1012 In reply to SRSmith [2008-04-22 19:02:46 +0000 UTC]

Good. You'd better not resist it. ;D

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

SRSmith In reply to naiadgirl1012 [2008-04-23 12:44:02 +0000 UTC]

How could I possibly resist a dare?
It's impossible.
Entirely not possible.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

CrystalSeeker In reply to ??? [2008-04-21 08:30:43 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, it really does remind me of Johnny Mnemonic... A little too much...

Don't get me wrong, it's written OK, but it doesn't quite match your former works. As if you weren't inspired. :/

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 2

DannyBlue In reply to CrystalSeeker [2008-06-26 08:28:57 +0000 UTC]

I loved Cats Cradle, and while I know what YouTube is I cant stand 99% of whats on it!

Thanks for the info on hot ice I think I have something like it from a camping store!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

SRSmith In reply to CrystalSeeker [2008-04-21 15:49:04 +0000 UTC]

The idea of people couriering data internally I don't think is unique anymore, so if I'm borrowing an idea there it's not one that hasn't been borrowed a thousand times before. I think what was visionary of Gibson is entirely too mainstream today.

The idea of focus here is that of taking a biological sample as a backup, so you can re-grow a copy of someone if something happens to the original. It's not data backup, as the data was introduced after the backup was made, but rather medium or transport backup.

Also, the idea that two identical people without knowledge of each others actions, placed in the same situation and faced with the same obstacles and stimuli are likely to behave in a similar if not identical manner.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

DannyBlue In reply to SRSmith [2008-04-22 07:43:52 +0000 UTC]

William Gibsons concepts, as Isaac Ascimovs, have not only become universal in their genre of fiction, but have also tended to be realised in modern technology. There is a great line in Dangerous Liaisons where the Marquise de Merteuil talks about how she educated herself in court; stating that she read philosophy to know how to think, and fiction to know what is possible.

If we discounted using Gibsons High Concept we would have to stop writing about the internet, as his writing is its precursor.

Again as I often have said to you; this could be a book. Excellent!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

SRSmith In reply to DannyBlue [2008-04-22 15:05:11 +0000 UTC]

Very well put, and agree completely. Thanks very much for your thoughts, and the kind comment. I'll be writing a book, just as soon as the pieces start falling into place in my head.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

DannyBlue In reply to SRSmith [2008-04-23 06:11:11 +0000 UTC]

Kurt Vonnegut wrote this:

[link]

I found it helpful to think about, but I did not stick to it

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 2

NozeDive In reply to DannyBlue [2008-06-20 16:47:21 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, thanks for posting this. Vonnegut is/was one of the best.

Ice 9 exists!
Look up "hot Ice" on Youtube

lol
Β»TΓΈny

P.S. S.R.Smith, this was a really goos deviation!

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

DannyBlue In reply to NozeDive [2008-06-23 13:34:41 +0000 UTC]

I hate using Youtube, what is it?

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

NozeDive In reply to DannyBlue [2008-06-25 20:34:28 +0000 UTC]

Do you mean "What's YouTube", or "What's Ice-9"?

Ice-9 was used as a plot device in the Vonnegut novel Cat's Cradle. Basically, it was a form of ice that would instantly freeze any normal water that it came into contact with, and it's melting point was some where above 100ΒΊF.

Hot ice is a chemical reaction between Sodium Acetate and water. It appears to turn to ice instantly, but it actually become very warm in the process. Reusable hand warmers use this chemical.

Β»TΓΈny

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

SRSmith In reply to DannyBlue [2008-04-23 12:42:36 +0000 UTC]

I love his work, and that's a great list of guidelines. Thanks for the link.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

apocathary In reply to ??? [2008-04-21 06:08:49 +0000 UTC]

Nice one Steve (:

I may or may not have submitted a story I wrote while drunk last night to your site. If I did and it's the one sitting in front of me right now, then please ignore it. It needs a trim and a redress, but you will see it again at some point.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

SRSmith In reply to apocathary [2008-04-21 15:41:27 +0000 UTC]

Hey there, Thanks! Not to worry - If I find drunk ramblings I'll discard them and wait for you to come to your senses and resubmit.
Friends don't publish friends drunk, or something like that

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0

lpowell In reply to ??? [2008-04-21 04:21:51 +0000 UTC]

Good flash. Reminds me of Gibson's Johnny Mnemonic, but with a different sort of twist.

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 1

SRSmith In reply to lpowell [2008-04-21 04:24:08 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much, both for the comment and the !

πŸ‘: 0 ⏩: 0


<= Prev |