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Published: 2011-01-30 00:21:22 +0000 UTC; Views: 504; Favourites: 26; Downloads: 7
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Description they try and
          tear us apart..
rip us, shred us
          throw us away..

no,
no,
no..

i'm never going to let that happen..
          i'd give up anything..

life is too short without happiness..
when they took you away,
          they took the shine in my eye and replaced it with
a tear drop and a hole in my stomach as big as the moon..

i would stop my heart from beating for you;
i would give up breathing for you..

driving at night,
          no seatbelt;
faster,
     faster..
the car hugs a tree in warm embrace,
          driver flung through the windshield..
safety glass in her hair,
      spine snapped
drew a heart in the gravel and

               took her last breath..
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Comments: 45

NyraStarray [2011-07-21 01:14:00 +0000 UTC]

this is really good too!!! but again it has open spots in it, like who are the people tearing them apart? why are they being teard apart? im in euantes and our teacher ask us questions like this ^^" but it helps us be better writers!! (btw euantes is a literary magazine)

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Yu-Lan1994 [2011-05-19 19:43:16 +0000 UTC]

And ThankieS for the!

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Yu-Lan1994 [2011-05-19 19:42:55 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful and sad
Do you know "armysister01"?
She write like you
Here is the link:[link]
don't like the last 6 but from Rape and back it looks like this poem

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snow-angels In reply to Yu-Lan1994 [2011-05-19 19:57:10 +0000 UTC]

thanks! and i'll go take a look at her work!!

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Yu-Lan1994 In reply to snow-angels [2011-05-19 20:00:17 +0000 UTC]

Hope you like it/her XD

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TheDarkFlash [2011-02-05 03:57:52 +0000 UTC]

Love this...though it was sad in the end I really felt and admired the flow of it all

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snow-angels In reply to TheDarkFlash [2011-02-05 13:49:47 +0000 UTC]

thanks so much, really (:

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Xx-vampire-brat-xX [2011-02-05 03:44:30 +0000 UTC]

not bad depressing though but it was good

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snow-angels In reply to Xx-vampire-brat-xX [2011-02-05 13:49:52 +0000 UTC]

thanks (:

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Xx-vampire-brat-xX In reply to snow-angels [2011-02-05 19:29:16 +0000 UTC]

your welcome

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Djs-crazy [2011-02-04 23:30:03 +0000 UTC]

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snow-angels In reply to Djs-crazy [2011-02-04 23:30:46 +0000 UTC]

|P

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DarlingAngel0565 [2011-02-02 14:51:52 +0000 UTC]

I really like this piece.

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snow-angels In reply to DarlingAngel0565 [2011-02-02 21:10:29 +0000 UTC]

thanks so much (:

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DarlingAngel0565 In reply to snow-angels [2011-02-02 21:13:24 +0000 UTC]

You are welcome

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jazzle-ink [2011-01-30 17:57:01 +0000 UTC]

this is really really good

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snow-angels In reply to jazzle-ink [2011-01-31 01:08:56 +0000 UTC]

thanks so much c:

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HumanityAssassin23 [2011-01-30 17:18:57 +0000 UTC]

It is saddddd.. suicide by car. Poor car

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snow-angels In reply to HumanityAssassin23 [2011-01-31 01:08:41 +0000 UTC]

poor car..? XD

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HumanityAssassin23 In reply to snow-angels [2011-01-31 05:02:43 +0000 UTC]

It got smashed!

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snow-angels In reply to HumanityAssassin23 [2011-01-31 23:44:17 +0000 UTC]

poor girl :C

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HumanityAssassin23 In reply to snow-angels [2011-02-01 03:30:45 +0000 UTC]

I know

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007Balel [2011-01-30 15:46:33 +0000 UTC]

Sad, but very beautiful...
I really like how you have turned the car crash into something very calm and serene.
Great work.

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snow-angels In reply to 007Balel [2011-01-30 15:56:07 +0000 UTC]

thanks (:

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007Balel In reply to snow-angels [2011-01-30 16:01:08 +0000 UTC]

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ChaoticLivi [2011-01-30 14:03:12 +0000 UTC]

I like it even though I didn't want it to happen. It's a very mysterious poem...you know what happened, but not why.

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snow-angels In reply to ChaoticLivi [2011-01-30 15:18:08 +0000 UTC]

thanks, yeah.. everything's a mystery, life, love, death.. you never know..

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cookiemonster32q [2011-01-30 05:20:56 +0000 UTC]

i like it... though its a bit of a downer poem, but thats okay ^^

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snow-angels In reply to cookiemonster32q [2011-01-30 15:14:14 +0000 UTC]

haha thanks.

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cookiemonster32q In reply to snow-angels [2011-01-30 21:13:21 +0000 UTC]

np <3

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TalonDesign [2011-01-30 03:45:14 +0000 UTC]

a very interesting piece, it caught my eye when I was looking through the latest submissions for one of the poetry groups. I love the imagery used at the accident.

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snow-angels In reply to TalonDesign [2011-01-30 15:14:01 +0000 UTC]

thanks :T

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Spuffy12 [2011-01-30 02:51:07 +0000 UTC]

Wow, this is so beautiful, well done

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snow-angels In reply to Spuffy12 [2011-01-30 02:53:05 +0000 UTC]

thanks (:

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Spuffy12 In reply to snow-angels [2011-01-30 04:11:11 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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Dividedwestand8 [2011-01-30 02:46:50 +0000 UTC]

I think its beautiful and sad. Don't listen to what anyone else says. This is the best poem I have ever read.

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snow-angels In reply to Dividedwestand8 [2011-01-30 02:53:39 +0000 UTC]

thank you so, so much. really <3

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Dividedwestand8 In reply to snow-angels [2011-01-30 03:00:43 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome. Seriously, tho, It is soooooooo good. i luve it

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snow-angels In reply to Dividedwestand8 [2011-01-30 03:03:40 +0000 UTC]

thanks (:

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fourxletterxlie [2011-01-30 02:45:15 +0000 UTC]

Wicked

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snow-angels In reply to fourxletterxlie [2011-01-30 02:53:45 +0000 UTC]

thanks (:

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fourxletterxlie In reply to snow-angels [2011-01-30 23:31:20 +0000 UTC]

yuup

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GlacielAstaldo [2011-01-30 01:25:47 +0000 UTC]

... I like it, I don't like it

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snow-angels In reply to GlacielAstaldo [2011-01-30 02:21:44 +0000 UTC]

:/ thanks

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GlacielAstaldo In reply to snow-angels [2011-01-30 14:52:29 +0000 UTC]

Sorry X_x

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