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Published: 2015-05-17 16:07:31 +0000 UTC; Views: 5073; Favourites: 94; Downloads: 0
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I suggest that you listen to this >[link] < while reading. Sankyuu!


"Hello, bella," Lovino smiled and greeted (Name) with a bouquet with yellow tulips, daisies, pink camellias, daffodils, and anemones, these are all different flowers with different meanings.

Yellow tulips talk about her smile that makes other people smile brighter. Daisies symbolizes (Name)'s innocence and purity and his loyal love for her. Pink camellias refer to his longing for her. Daffodils tell that she's the only one that Lovino loves and Anemones indicate his feeling of being forsaken.

He placed the bouquet beside her and sat beside her, watching her sleep peacefully.

He talked to her everyday about his problems, even if he knows there will be no response, even if he tried talking her again. Everyday, he silently prayed and prayed for her to be with him again, but his prayers never reach, no matter how much he prayed.

"Please tell me that you're suffering..." he begged.

"Please tell me that you're lonely..." he sobbed.

"Don't leave me behind..." he weeped.


"Has all hope turned into despair? I promise, I'll be strong this time. We, aren't we forever, the two of us, as one...?" he asked her without expecting anyone to reply.

"It's dark, I can't see!" she replied, although he can't hear her voice anymore.

"I can't hear a thing!" she tried to call him, but she failed.

"I'm scared!" she shouted.

"I'm suffering!" she yelled again.

"I'm lonely!" even though he can't hear her anymore, even if he can't touch her again, she knew he always loved her, even if they didn't have the chance to say it.

"I'm not lonely, because you're here. The warm hands that embraced me tell me so, even though I can't hear anymore. Your fingertips that touched me said 'I love you,'"

"Several winters passed by and I finally realized what this feeling is, I wasn't able to tell you this, but our hearts were always connected, right..?"

"Even if you're now wrapped in a world of loneliness, anguish and despair, I'm forever by your side, don't forget that. You will never be alone, I'm here with you,"  she realized that she can still be with him, make more happy memories with him, laugh with him and cry with him, she just needs to wait.

"Knowing that I am fated to rot away, I want even more strongly to keep breathing, to keep singing. I wish I too could leave something behind, proof of the life that I lived,"

"Hey, please, just once more, just for this time now, I want to smile, by your side. I want to sing together with you, I want to sing a gentle song,"

"I wanted to dedicate to you a mournful farewell song. In my last moments, I wanted to tell you... Thank you," she begged and begged until all that she can see is white and she slowly vanished away.

An ephemeral life rises to heaven and takes on the colour of the melting snow. 

Nothing remains, not even a soul. 

Each and every thing.

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Comments: 35

TheSoaringStaraptor [2015-07-20 02:23:09 +0000 UTC]

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Proof of Life, eh? I could tell. While it's a sad song, I feel it's too powerful for a reader insert. It honestly would've been more effective if the reader's character was a canon one.
Ths last bits seem rushed as it's just the song's lyrics. You didn't reference to the song itself, either. I suggest doing that so readers don't mistaken it as your own words. You put italics and bolds, but that's not enough. Put a link in the description.
Other than that, I saw everything clearly.Really good imagery.
Not the most unique piece I've read, but certainly not terrible.

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SadBiscuit In reply to TheSoaringStaraptor [2015-07-20 12:16:24 +0000 UTC]

Ah, thank you for the critique! I promise I'll work harder on my reader inserts. I wrote this fanfic long ago and I'm not really used to English since I don't use it everyday, so I'm sorry if you didn't like it... ^^'

I'll put the link right away!

*Is that... Gardevoir, Milotic and Infernape...?*

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TheSoaringStaraptor In reply to SadBiscuit [2015-07-20 15:52:04 +0000 UTC]

It's totally fine. That was my first time writing a critique, as well, so I'm sorry if I came if harsh. ^-^"

*Yeah. I made this when I was younger. I got really bored one day and started messing with Pokemon sprites, haha.

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SadBiscuit In reply to TheSoaringStaraptor [2015-07-21 13:51:12 +0000 UTC]

Yay! Don't worry, I wasn't hurt by your words and I don't really think you're harsh or anything! I think that you're trying to tell me that I need to improve and stuff.

*XD I really love Pokemon, it's a big part of my childhood. Everyday, I watch the anime and play the games when I was younger.

I still love it even if they tell me it's "only for kids" and that I should "grow up"... T_T I only play the games and I don't watch the anime anymore, though.

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Amizore [2015-06-14 15:33:46 +0000 UTC]

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This piece is amazingly well written! I love how you took the time to describe what each and every flower reassembled about her. Also, is this a continuation of 'White'?
Your choice of words are well chosen and shows originality. The impact is effective, causing me to feel sad, but smile at your beautiful piece.
The vision is clear, with no sign of blurred confusion. I can really picture Romano bringing flowers and sense the emotions of that flow through the story. The technique you used was also effective, it created this melancholy, yet beautiful emotion.
Overall, great job on this story, keep it up!

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SadBiscuit In reply to Amizore [2015-06-16 08:05:29 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! Yes, it's kind of a sequel, you're the first one to actually notice that ^^

I'm glad you like my stories, thanks for the critiques! >///<

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Amizore In reply to SadBiscuit [2015-06-16 15:34:29 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome! You did an amazing job! ^^

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HetalianWitch [2015-12-13 23:38:24 +0000 UTC]

Feelz…

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SadBiscuit In reply to HetalianWitch [2015-12-18 13:13:39 +0000 UTC]

I'm so sorry if my reader insert made you sad ;; A ;; Here, have a hug

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HetalianWitch In reply to SadBiscuit [2016-01-03 09:35:07 +0000 UTC]

Okay~

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SadBiscuit In reply to HetalianWitch [2016-01-04 13:01:01 +0000 UTC]

Heh yep

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iluvpurple01 [2015-11-27 07:37:36 +0000 UTC]

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SadBiscuit In reply to iluvpurple01 [2015-11-28 04:18:36 +0000 UTC]

Haha Yeah, I'm a big fan of that series ;; w ;;
I made this months ago, so it's mostly crappy, especially when it's coming from me uvu

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iluvpurple01 In reply to SadBiscuit [2015-11-29 06:19:14 +0000 UTC]

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SadBiscuit In reply to iluvpurple01 [2015-11-29 10:41:25 +0000 UTC]

Thanks ;; w ;; That's good to hear!
The series touched my heart, as well as the hearts of other people. I've heard the songs many times already, but I still can't help but be emotional while listening to them uvu

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ScythicKitty [2015-09-13 06:33:28 +0000 UTC]

This is such a heartbreaking, but sweet piece. There is a lot of real emotion in this and you really feel the despair and the little bit of hope we cling to while reading it.

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SadBiscuit In reply to ScythicKitty [2015-09-13 06:43:48 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! ;w; Your comment means a lot to me; I'll do my best and I'll continue writing more fanfictions for everyone ^^

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ScythicKitty In reply to SadBiscuit [2015-09-14 05:10:26 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome, keep up the beautiful work! Also thank you for the points, that really took me by surprise and I wasn't expecting such a nice gesture! Have a wonderful week and stay safe!

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SadBiscuit In reply to ScythicKitty [2015-09-23 09:57:51 +0000 UTC]

Thank you sooo much~! >///< You're welcome, I think you deserve the points =w= Thank you again! I'm glad I can talk to kind people like you! =3

Argh, late replies... Sorry for the sudden hiatus!

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ScythicKitty In reply to SadBiscuit [2015-09-24 06:04:16 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome! And thanks again for your kindness! No worries for the hiatus, as I'm frequently gone from dA as well haha since there's always lots of stuff going on too. I was once on a 4 year break haha! Those were definitely some very late responses!

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SadBiscuit In reply to ScythicKitty [2015-09-24 08:41:12 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome, again! >w< Phew! I thought you were going to be upset or something! ;w; Whoa, that's a REALLY long period of time; deviants gone for that long are always thought of as inactive. I'm glad you're not yet inactive! =w= I'd never be away from dA for more than a month... Seriously, I can't leave my watchers... T~T

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ScythicKitty In reply to SadBiscuit [2015-09-25 23:28:30 +0000 UTC]

Haha nah, that would be something really petty to be upset over!

Four years is quite awhile huh? I agree, at that point, most people would be considered inactive. Though at the time, it was when I was first starting out and any watchers I had were all my friends that I see regularly, so I wasn't leaving anyone behind. XD Now though, I've met some amazing people on here so if I'm gone for more than two weeks, it'd probably be because of vacation or something very serious. ^^

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AskDunaNichs [2015-07-21 02:54:24 +0000 UTC]

Is this based on the song Proof of Life? Some of it is exactly the same, word for word. If not, that's a really weird coincidence.

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SadBiscuit In reply to AskDunaNichs [2015-07-21 13:03:24 +0000 UTC]

Kind of...? I think it's more on the Soundless Voice part and stuff, especially if you read my other fanfic... Sorry, I was obsessed with the songs long ago and I felt like writing a APH reader insert... ^^'

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RubinBlitzKaiser [2015-06-09 08:03:45 +0000 UTC]

I've listened to the music you offered to listen and I've read the whole story. I know that Romano is my least favourtie character, but... Very sad, though very beautiful! My. Heart. Breaks.

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SadBiscuit In reply to RubinBlitzKaiser [2015-06-09 08:25:14 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much~! (#^.^#) \(//∇//)\

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RubinBlitzKaiser In reply to SadBiscuit [2015-06-09 08:27:52 +0000 UTC]

You'rrrrre wellllcome!

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sampea [2015-05-21 15:29:30 +0000 UTC]

Beautiful!  

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SadBiscuit In reply to sampea [2015-05-21 18:05:41 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! >///<

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cocokittykat [2015-05-19 13:18:50 +0000 UTC]

wow

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SadBiscuit In reply to cocokittykat [2015-05-19 14:06:02 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!     

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ShortStackMeira [2015-05-18 00:35:46 +0000 UTC]

It's amazing... So beautiful

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SadBiscuit In reply to ShortStackMeira [2015-05-18 04:04:57 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!   

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ShortStackMeira In reply to SadBiscuit [2015-05-18 09:58:05 +0000 UTC]

Mhm!

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16CleverTaunts [2015-05-17 16:45:00 +0000 UTC]

This was so beautiful and sad! Absolutely fantastic!

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SadBiscuit In reply to 16CleverTaunts [2015-05-17 17:01:37 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! ^^

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16CleverTaunts In reply to SadBiscuit [2015-05-18 01:35:05 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome! ^.^

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