Comments: 23
oddballoffun [2008-01-16 06:26:21 +0000 UTC]
I hardly ever take the time to read lengthy lit peices, but I'm glad I have. I'm hooked, completley. Its as good a story so far (yes I have read the first chapter too) as any book I've bought and read. Your charachters are realistic and beleivable, and you got me all teary when you were describing Devon because it reminded me of all the reasons I love my own Dad.
Well done! I started reading at work to kill time, but now I think I have to come back to it when I get home, because I need to know more!
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Ravenfire In reply to oddballoffun [2008-01-16 16:00:48 +0000 UTC]
*soft smile* It's always awesome when someone new finds they like my work. This configuration of the story is so old. There's so much that is updated, edited, and expanded upon in the novel. (which you can buy, if you've a mind to) Still, it makes me happy to know that someone out there enjoys the little bit of magic I bring. Thanks for the comment, truly.
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oddballoffun In reply to Ravenfire [2008-01-17 03:16:43 +0000 UTC]
Oooh buying! Thats an idea, seeings I do love to read things more than one time, and I have a freind in my hometown who would LOVE this, but she doesn't like online reading.
Do you sell in Australia?
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Ravenfire In reply to oddballoffun [2008-01-21 17:37:42 +0000 UTC]
Sure do! just hop by [link] and go to the story section. You can order it there!
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Ravenfire In reply to magician-yuke [2004-06-08 22:58:43 +0000 UTC]
*smile* yeah... I have those edits in my hard copy, but not in this version. Thanks for the head's up, though.
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JanaStormraven [2003-11-30 01:02:43 +0000 UTC]
This prose has the promise to become something superb. Obviously I could sit here and nitpick at it, certain aspects here, a few phrases there, but that would be because of my English Literature critical training that I am subjected to every day.
The storyline/plot seems to be well-developed (and I am hoping thought of before hand) and although one point was strikingly obvious in coming (the love of Velorum) I think that it is written to a standard that is ... acceptable ... god that word is awful, but I think it suits my thoughts.
The characters could be a little more...real though, if I was to pick out one of my critiscms: they seem to be static, the emotion simply fitting the atmosphere rather than having thoughts to make them human, and ideas that make them human. But obviously, this is your story and your creativity, so I think that I'm just going to sit back and enjoy the brief reads I can have, stare at the pretty pictures of Kyla and ... stay happy, ignoring the little critics clamouring around inside my head!
^__^ sorry for the long words, just, hope it didn't sound too horrible! This is a good little story going here and I do hope to read more of it!
~Hj
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Ravenfire In reply to JanaStormraven [2003-12-02 23:48:39 +0000 UTC]
OOhhhh thank you for the fantastic coment! I needed to hear all of that. I like criticval reviews, because they help me to become a better writter.
Upon review, you're right about the characters. I suppose I really could get a lot more into their heads. Being a woman, I know that it can be the inclination of my sex to get to o into the emotional, and I try and stay away from that as much as I can. If there's one thing I hate, it's crying and whining characters. *grin* But I really will take what you've said into account and see if perhaps I can work on that. Thank you!
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CHEESEtacoKwEeN [2003-11-30 00:38:01 +0000 UTC]
O_O meep... the first chapter was good and this is intruging x_X;; i need... more! -reaches into the air and grasps nothing...- damn >_>;;
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deadlywhispers [2003-11-18 06:23:39 +0000 UTC]
I am really hooked now. i dont want it to end! is most of this made up - or did you look up some things about the druids?
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Ravenfire In reply to deadlywhispers [2003-11-18 17:33:21 +0000 UTC]
I'm Irish, so I know a lot about drudic culture anyway... but it is all made up. There was no drudic cult, that I know of, who worshiped Fae and sacraficed to them... though I suppose anything is possible. Most our legends about the faery folk do find their roots in ancient drudic tradition, however. The best story is one which takes a little trugh and a lot of fiction... and makes it all seem so real. *smile*
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Ravenfire In reply to satek [2003-11-17 15:56:49 +0000 UTC]
*grin* Alesya is my own name for the realm of the Fae... I used Arcadia for a bit, but Niku and I decided it was too commonly used. Thanks for the Dev Watch, babe. You know I love ya!
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DrawlyGoLightly [2003-11-16 07:13:18 +0000 UTC]
I love this...
If i had time to properly edit and add my two cents in... i totally would.
This is work en progress to me ( a few slight changes in mostly word usage or phrasing small things like that) the story is excellent though and i am really impressed. This is better than anything I could write.
Unless you count my latest journal entry... *heheheh*
Anyways, i could go on and on about how great this is... I won't, because you'd better know by now!
Are you looking for someone to really read it and pick it apart though? Because if you want me to i absolutely would love to be a part of this amazing developement.
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Ravenfire In reply to DrawlyGoLightly [2003-11-16 16:19:15 +0000 UTC]
If you want to join the editing staff, then I would more than welcome you! I have about 4 people who work on it with me, and one more can only make things better! Just email your edits to me... or post them here if you'd like. Most of the editing is going on in another site... a LotR site of which I'm a member.
Thank you SO much for the encouragment, it really means so much to both me and Niku!
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coastal-artist [2003-11-16 06:26:41 +0000 UTC]
and the mystery deepens...yeeeeee!
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RougeWind [2003-11-16 05:05:20 +0000 UTC]
OOOO purty I love it. Keep going!
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Ravenfire In reply to RougeWind [2003-11-16 16:23:14 +0000 UTC]
*smile* Thanks! Hopefully I'll have the third chapter up some time in the next few days for everyone to enjoy.
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