ClioStorm [2012-05-20 14:25:50 +0000 UTC]
ah this reminds me of Auden I like it, it seems to be saying many things - the last stanza suggested to me that being stuck in too much light is just as bad as being stuck in the dark; really, you need both to balance life out. Also the last bit reminded me of Romeo and Juliet Should 'fear' be capitalised in the fifth line of the third stanza? And the same for 'justice' in the second stanza - with the other words capitalised, I think it'd look better if they were too I like your poems. Have I told you that?
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Rationalist-v-Artist In reply to ClioStorm [2012-05-20 15:01:48 +0000 UTC]
You're quite right, they are supposed to be capitalised, and it really does make the difference to the poem haha... I had a mare trying to upload it, and somehow between copies it's been left uncapitalised. And thank you for the feedback.Yes, I think you've mentioned it once or twice, but it's always nice to be reminded haha
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