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Published: 2012-05-20 13:46:50 +0000 UTC; Views: 148; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 6
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Description "Do we do this?" Sacrifices:
We know the price to pay
For euphoric existence here,
If only for a day.
Claim in excelsis "Gloria!"
The great love that you share.
For married in this dream, a Cross
That's yours alone to bear.

For Justice burrows his head in folds
Of clothing that you wear
To cover sensual desires
That yours eyes dream to dare.
Then from within he claims your sin
And strips you to the core
And bathes your body in blood until
You can't take anymore.

In glory of his war, Bloodlust
Rears his head in might.
At his cry, Sanity leaves the door
Ajar in all the fright.
And in the door comes Fear, creeping,
Alone at the death of Night.
For Night was deftly slain by Sol-
Now no more rest from light.

"We have no choice now Night is gone;
He was our shield from them
Who now would seek to destroy all
That we alone have dreamt.
So take this vial in your soft hand,
Hold it close and tight.
For now we stand, the last to say-
'Farewell to all- Good Night!"
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Comments: 2

ClioStorm [2012-05-20 14:25:50 +0000 UTC]

ah this reminds me of Auden I like it, it seems to be saying many things - the last stanza suggested to me that being stuck in too much light is just as bad as being stuck in the dark; really, you need both to balance life out. Also the last bit reminded me of Romeo and Juliet

Should 'fear' be capitalised in the fifth line of the third stanza? And the same for 'justice' in the second stanza - with the other words capitalised, I think it'd look better if they were too

I like your poems. Have I told you that?

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Rationalist-v-Artist In reply to ClioStorm [2012-05-20 15:01:48 +0000 UTC]

You're quite right, they are supposed to be capitalised, and it really does make the difference to the poem haha... I had a mare trying to upload it, and somehow between copies it's been left uncapitalised. And thank you for the feedback.

Yes, I think you've mentioned it once or twice, but it's always nice to be reminded haha

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