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Ayy, it's another Yume art! It's been a while-!
This sketch is about a year old? I made it last grade so it's either during 2015 or 2016.
Oops.
It was recently inked last year and then I stopped due to forgetting to bring my colour pencils to school.
Then it's even more recently coloured.
One thing you got to love about Yume is her hair.
I really love how her hair turned out here! It's so silky-looking...
Other than that, her eyes are a mess! It seems like the ink work inside the eye was too thick and reduced the surface area for me to colour in.
Then again the inking here isn't my best. I made some mistakes and tried my best to cover it up traditionally heehee...
I love the outcome of the skirt and ribbon. I recently got a new item called the colour-pencil blender and I did it on the ribbon. It's really smooth now-! Maybe for finer gradients I'll use it.
What's to improve is the background. I like the stars and all, but, gosh, the black background! It's so messy!!
Personally, I don't like working with the colour black but dark blue didn't go with the overall thing, so I used black.
It's so sloppy!!
Other than that, the overall look is pretty satisfying... until you realise how sloppy the background is.
Also, I think the image is slanting? It's because I accidentally placed it into the scanner slanting oops. MS Paint can't rotate things like on MS Word.
I hope you all like it, though!
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Hello! Thanks for the critique! I do agree black was a rather poor choice. I went with dark blue at first but it was too light. I know the shading's poor haha, but thanks again-
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You're very welcome!
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Hiya from a fellow a.deviantart.net/avatars/p/r/p⦠" alt=" " title="ProjectComment" /> member!
This is super duper pretty, and I'm not even an anime/manga fan, so nice work! I love how you were able to make the base layer of the dress sheer, and the blue/green combination looks great, as does the whole dress' color scheme. Putting the character of to the side was an awesome choice, and having her hold a star in her hand really helps establish the center of the picture, it gives your eyes a place to be drawn to. So kudos to you! With that being said, here's a few improvements to make.
The biggest problem I have with this piece is the anatomy of your character. Surprisingly, the hands are done rather nicely, it's the feet and torso that seem to be out of wack. I know foot anatomy is crazy hard, even in shoes (heck, I'm the perfect example for that statement) so Tue best advice I can give you is practice. Now for the torso, it's not crazy disproportionate, but there's a few things that might be improved upon. The right side of her torso seems much larger than the other, which makes sense according to perspective, but it almost seem so large, and in terms of waists and hips, that's a problem. Just slimming that down would really help.
More of a question than a critique, but why is the golden surface drip down off the paper? It just seems a little bit distracting and unnecessary to me.
But that's it, keep up the great work, and Happy Drawing!
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Hello thanks for the time to comment/critique!
I'm glad you like the dress, but, yeah haha wearing dressing like this always get the anatomy off. The legs look horrible haha but it's outdated art I guess.
I wanted the star to peek through the border, like something I did in my past artworks likeΒ here ,Β here Β andΒ here Β for the character in focus.
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Okay, let's do this ;3;
1. There are too many colors, which makes it look kind of messy. You should look up some color theory online; there are many videos and they can help a lot! :3
2. The anatomy is alright, but I feel like the legs are a bit strange.
3. The heels are too pointy; and if they are meant to be pointy, you could've drawn them a bit differently.
4. The coloring isn't the best, I think you used coloring pencils for this? Correct me if I'm wrong. But I don't think coloring pencils are the best for covering large surfaces, such as backgrounds.
5. The eyes kind of blend in with the skin at the bottom so it looks kind of strange.
The lineart is nice and the design of the dress is pretty cute (but again, too many colors). :3
(I hope my words aren't too confusing, lol.)
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1. "Too many colours". While I used a lot of colours, this is the first time I've received such a comment. I don't think anything can have "too much colours", like a rainbow or a dyed shirt.
3. How so?
4. Well, I'm sorry, coloured pencils CAN be used to cover large surfaces. It's not the best, but it doesn't mean you should comment one against using a media.
However, thank you for your effort for trying to form a critique.
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1. Yes, you used too many colors. Purple, blue, green, red and yellow (on the character). You should've stuck with a color scheme or something like that, because even though rainbows can look nice, in some cases it can look a bit "overwhelming". I'm not saying that the colors in your piece don't look nice, but that they could've at least been a bit less vibrant, because they really stick out like this; not in a good way. Also, I just noticed that this is an actual outfit of one of your OCs; I don't have anything against that, but again, an original character or just any piece of art shouldn't be overwhelmed with colors to the point where it's not pleasing to the eye.
3. I mean like, the heel part of the heels.
4. I have nothing against coloring pencils. I use them very often and they are great. I'm just saying my opinion.
You don't need to get all bitter now, I wasn't trying to be rude (I'm sorry if I sound rude?), I am just trying to give you a critique.
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1. I don't think that it's to the point where it is 'unpleasing for the eye', and I don't think there should be a colour limit to a piece. Everyone has their preferences and different liking to colour schemes. For example, I'm not into neon, and that might overwhelm me, but it might flow well for others.
You sound upright about it that your statements seem to be facts that could supply more than opinions. Especially for number four, because colour pencils has been my main media since forever. I've done several pieces full on A4 paper with them and see it as not much of problem. Probably it's due to using black, I'm not too confident with that colour, especially for backgrounds, that it seemed grainy due to trying to give it a lighter tone. The colouring isn't the best, yes, but colour pencils might be one of the only options for traditional media for me to cover large areas. I'm no good with markers and I can't really use water-colour, so... I think I've made my point there.
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1. It isn't unpleasing, but it's kind of getting there. The colors are just a bit too vibrant. Also, there's a difference and a line between preference and color theory.
Again, I have nothing against coloring pencils. But, just a tip: you should practice with other mediums too. At least try. No one can improve in art if they don't experiment and practice a lot. Sometimes, stepping out of your comfort zone can be hard, but it can be really good for improvement.
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It is true that perhaps I should experiment more with other medias. I'm currently into digital art and might work on with markers due to a new set my mom got for me.
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I love the concept and the idea, the color you choose is good and the design is awesome e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b⦠" width="15" height="15" alt="
I like how your line art and your coloring actually make the piece look cute
And I absolutely love that dress design. It looks beautiful
but, I wanna point out that the shading can be a little more solid so that it will give stronger illusion of depth
Dark blue background may be more suitable in this drawing since that will make this drawing looks cuter
Overall this is an awesome piece of art, and I would love to see more of this
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Thank you for taking your time to give a critique!
I agree that the colours could have been bolder with more contrasting shading, but I couldn't get the dark blue background to fit ahaha.
I'm glad you like her dress design!
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You are very welcome
About Dark Blue Background, It's just my opinion, since most night background usually use a very dark blue background instead of black one
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Well, it's just that I wanted to imply she was more in space that the sky. I tried adding more stars with a white gel pen but it doesn't function on colour pencil surfaces.
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I see, well, I don't know much about it, since I usually do digital art
but otherwise, Good job
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Hello, I'm commenting for .
First of all, I like the motif here, a girl holding stars in her hand. It looks magical. ^^
The composition is executed beautifully. It was a good choice to put your character in the left part of the picture instead of the middle. Makes it look more interesting. The white frame is also a good choice, especially with the light on the floor and the girl's hand and dress crossing it slightly - that gives the picture a feeling of depth. Also, yes, it's slightly slanted, but I feel that it doesn't take anything from the overall result.
The design is lovely, she's wearing a very pretty dress! I like the overall shapes and details like the ribbons or the transparent part at the bottom. Overall, it's a bit too colorful for my taste, but that's a matter of preference.
I like the glow effect on the stars. The shading is good and overall consistent, but I think you could get a bit bolder with it, creating more contrast by using darker colors and a mix of soft and hard shading. Contrast in general is a good way to make art look more interesting.
Your anatomy could still use some work. Her upper body is very small and, her head is a bit to big and her legs are too long in comparison. A rule of thumb is to make the legs about twice the size of the upper body, minus neck and head. The legs in this picture are also very straight, and they're pretty thick at the ankles. I would suggest trying to make them a bit more curved, because even very thin legs aren't completely straight. It sometimes helps to exaggerate the shapes while sketching, to get a feeling for it - you can still correct it later.
I hope this was of some help to you. Have a nice day.
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Hello, thank you for the comment! I will try to work on the anatomy as said.
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Thanks!
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You very welcome my dear, you're avatar very cute
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this was faster than critiguing
here is an example of how torsos work
The blue line is always a curve. something in my opinion that will help you be a better artist is to give your figures curve. all your limbs are to straightΒ
this is about how limbs work. Also no one stands straight people shift their weight around find which foot or part of the body the weight is on is critical to a good drawing of a person.
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Haha your little guides are so effective for critiques.
Thank you for the references. I will try to keep your points in mind for my next pictures.
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I'm glad they help I find it easier then going into depth about human anatomy. I just wiped those up in a minute so they're not super good but they do.Β
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Haha yep. They really do.
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the hair has an interesting an unique design to it. just make sure that the bangs are longer in the center. most manga characters habe a strand or 2 of hair between the eyes. there are some problems with the anatomy. the cheek goes out a little to far. the eyes are kind of good. her left eye looks smeared though. if it wasent smeared, try to create a better contrast between the eyes and skin. you could have made the line for the mouth slightly bigger. the breasts look slightly off. i cant tell what the problem with them is. the hands look bad but hands can be hard to draw. i like how you drew the sleves of the robe thingy where it gets really loose at the end. the skirt is mostly good although it looks like she is standing on it. the legs are wrong. there is no curves to indicate the thighs or calfs or knees. it just looks like 2 poles. the feet are also wrong but feet can be hard to draw. the shoes look bad. 1 is pointy and the other is round. also the strap around the ankle is thinker on 1 leg than the other. the shading is minimal and confusing but it can be hard when there is multiple light sources. the black background is unevenly colored. the is off center and tilted in the white border. the lineowrk around the stars looks incomplete and there are gaps in the lines and some of the black background is bleeding into the stars. overall this drawing looks like you worked hard on it. you seem to be good at certain stuff and really bad at other things. i reccommend studing anime anatomy and constantly looking at refrences when drawing
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Hello. Thank you for your comment. However I would like to clarify a few things.
1. No. I am not changing her design, thank you very much.
2. Incomplete inking/lineart and leaving gaps is a part of how I draw. I can't help that.
Other than that I do agree that the hands look off, due to size difference, perhaps that's one, and the breast might look off because it doesn't have too much breathing space as she has a sash around her chest. Other than that her eyes consists of two colours so it might look smeared due to that.
About the legs, since this was old art, I have added that, but thank you for pointing it out. Plus, yes, confused shading and late night art. To be honest when I did this I knew how old the line-art was and I just wanted to get it done pronto.
Also, how does it look like she's standing on her skirt?
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with the eye smeared thing, it just looks like is is smeared onto the face due to the similar colors. as for the skirt, i just realized that some of the front part is see through
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Yep. It's see-through.
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Thank you!
It's actually a dress though haha.
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Your welcome 
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Well, this looks like a really neat character! I love the stars of the background and her dress. It is indeed really original and well made. Also, did you draw that traditionally? Awesome!Β
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Haha thank you! Yes, this is traditional art.
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Wow, that's really impressive!Β
I gave up on traditional art a long time ago xD
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I see, oh well, everyone has their own strengths and whatnots in art like in life.
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Thanks, it took me a while to design it.
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If you're talking about the rainbow colour palette for Yume, thanks!
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Yes, Yume's rainbow color palette! Very beautiful!Β
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Aah thank you! Glad you think so-!
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