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nomibubs — [MIT] Wedding - Act 3: Part 2

Published: 2012-12-10 23:27:34 +0000 UTC; Views: 362; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 7
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Description Part 2 of a self-contained short set in the
[Moments in Time] Brief Encounters universe.
Set just before Act 3.

Summary: Fenris has a tendency to think and say too much under the influence of alcohol.
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Comments: 5

21gracie [2013-01-01 16:16:54 +0000 UTC]

I love the build up of the tension between everyone! And the ending was simply perfect!! It's like they are both realizing, agonizingly slowly of course, that there might just be something else between the two of them!

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nomibubs In reply to 21gracie [2013-01-02 18:49:36 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! I'm so happy you enjoyed this, I keep looking at it now thinking how much I need to change. It's lovely to know it's being liked as is.

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marikena [2012-12-12 18:14:28 +0000 UTC]

You know, I just realised- I like Your Anders. Unhappily in love, acting so desperately foolish... so understandable... I wonder how precisely You describe this type of behaviour, You must be good observer as well.
My imagined Anders is selfish liar and backstabber, and with every next gameplay I cannot help but see him more and more like this. Yours is better.

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marikena In reply to marikena [2012-12-13 19:50:12 +0000 UTC]

Obviously You succeeded. I`m not Anders lover at all, I`m surprised finding myself liking him in your story. It is easy to believe the character- at least at this stage- because there are hordes of prototypes marching around.

I see there 2 parts rather different. This 2nd one was like clean stage- no decorations, just 2 men and 1 woman, and how each of them tries to get/show attention, and how Howke sees them... and how I perceived each of them... Evil psychologist just spoke in me.

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nomibubs In reply to marikena [2012-12-12 23:51:14 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much. I'm so glad that all comes across. I've been trying very hard to keep Anders a character the reader can believe, or at least want to try and understand. Makes it easier to see why my Hawke would be interested in him, as she is in the beginning.

Though I'm also trying to convey the deterioration of that relationship over the years as he succumbs further to Vengeance while still keeping it about Hawke & Fenris...

I must admit Wedding P2 is actually one of my least favs that I've written. Admittedly it was very much a 'tack on' to P1 and I feel it every time I read it. Still, it's extra story.

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