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saltwaterlungs [2014-07-07 15:39:23 +0000 UTC]
Nice opening! It brings the reader right into the action. Very interesting: I was thinking about how a gunshot would be very well-disguised in the fireworks on the fourth.
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NamelessShe [2014-07-05 21:50:17 +0000 UTC]
Nice! I like the way you wrote this---narrator was interesting/fun to read!
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