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MystykNess — MotF Prologue pg. 2
Published: 2010-07-15 21:53:37 +0000 UTC; Views: 1949; Favourites: 17; Downloads: 14
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...How come I never like the second page to my comics?? =__= There's something wrong with this page. I feel it in my bones. I just can't figure out what it is!! D:If you see something that could've been done better... please tell me what it is, and if at all possible, tell me how I can fix it. ;~; Hand-done speech bubbles are really no good... Should have done them in MS Paint. XD;; ...maybe.
Purple-haired guy is a man of few words... and many wrinkles. XD
Yes, that's Callie, Sasha, Evan, Jade and Gabriel back there. MWAHAHA. >D I was gonna do this scene eventually in the original MotF... well, sort of. XD; It's hard to explain. And if I explain it so that it makes sense, then there'd be spoilers. And uh... yes.
They're younger here.
By about ten years.
4-year-old Callie!! OMW.
And if you haven't figured out where that bleeeeping noise is coming from... it's coming from that heart monitor on the wall behind Callie.
Yay, Anime Ace font!
Now I'm gonna do that Callie/Evan picture I promised. =w=;
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Callie, Sasha, Jade, Evan and Gabriel (c) Me
Same with the random cloaked peeps. XD;
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and the next page?? o_O oooh!! I want moreee!!! (plaseeee T_T)
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XD I'll start working on it once I'm finished with a picture I'm drawing ^^ I'm glad you like the series! 
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OK!!! I will be waiting!! ^^
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o_O what it that?? That childs are...!! So interesting!!
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Yay for conveniently-placed people/props! XD
I dunno what you're talking about, I think it all looks very good together.
AND WHY were cliffhangers ever invented? Curse yooouuuuu, inventor-of-cliffhangers!!
lol.
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YES! Yay indeed. XD;;
Really? Thank you~ ^^
Mwahah, I personally love cliffhangers. Using them anyways. XD
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i think the major problem with this page is the second and third panels. by having two different directions of view right next to each other, it disrupts the flow of the page itself.
i would suggest one long view from the side of all of the people in those tubes, and to provide extra shading when the tubes overlap to give an illusion of space instead of it just looking like they're stacked side by side, when there's obvious space between them, as shown in the first panel.
otherwise, i think the page is just fine the way it is.
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Ohhh, okay. I see now. ^^ Thank you!
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I have a comment on the hoodies to help you improve. Normally a hood lays pretty flat on a head. The top of their hoods should be much closer to their heads. It looks a little weird. Other than that everything looks awesome! Your really good at drawing and your coloring is AMAZING! Btw, I am now a fan of the old man.
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XD Yeah, I saw that too. =w= Thank you very much! XD
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Aww thats an awesome page! BEWARE OF TEH HOODIES! XD
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Thanks! =w= XDD MWAHAHA! >D
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no problem!! AAAH THERE COMMIN FOR MEH!!! *hides*
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digs a hole* Dere comming!! D:
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GET IN!! *drags you into the hole*
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Wahwahwah!! Okay, they're here! *shhh*
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*peeps out from under rock* DAT ONE HAS A TUBE THING! D:
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*takes a BB gun and aims at hoodies coat* steady.....aim....FIRE!
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Sasha's hat...
But this page is super kooky. 8D
Who preforms experiments on a four year old?
/imeanreally/
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D8 Can't have it getting wet, now. XD
That's what I was aiming for. 83
It must be important. D8 Or they're just really mean. XD"
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Noooo, don't let it get wet.
They're evil. xD Evil and weird.
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XDD
Aren't all evil people a little weird? XD Like me? >D
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I like the angles you used 8D Very dramatic-manga-ish. This is very cool *u* But now I'm really excited to see the next page D; WHHHY MYSTY, WHYYY??
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Yaay~~ Thanks!
I-I'm sorry! D:
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You're welcome C:
It's okay c; I can just draw some motf fanart to get over this cliff-hanger feeling X3
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Tee hee, I'd like that. X3
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XD But I've gotta do the Evan/Callie picture I've promised everyone first! D: lol!
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I LIKE IT
The only thing that I notice that you could have done better on are the speech bubbles, but you had written that down in the artist's description, so there's no point in beating a dead horse.
Anime Ace FTW
and you're good at drawing old people. The two people in hoods look really cool. I'm their #1 fan now, k?
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YAY
Yeaaah. I wasn't sure how to go about those dumb sticky out-ey things. =w=; or the little "branches", if you will.
YES.
Thank you. =w= B-but... they're hardly even in the manga. Just the intro, probably. XD;;
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Curve tool works wonders! <33
^^
Well, I like them anyway. They seem like nice people and even though they're short term I still like em.
Okay, I guess I'm their only fan XD
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Ah, in MS Paint yes... but then I couldn't get the area filled in white. D: The gray bg would mess it up. ;~;
XD Yeah. I just sort of came up with it off the top of my head.
Yeah. XD; I'm not even sure how old the blue-haired lady is...
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There are other methods to get ms paint onto a picture perfectly but I don't wanna explain cuz my brain would explode if I did D: lol
Aw. I think they're awesome... wait, you're not gonna... KILL them off, are you? OwO
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Aw. XD; Oh well.
Nonono. At least I don't think so. XD;
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