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moonpuppy4 — Thank you, Jack Frost part 2
Published: 2012-12-08 01:00:13 +0000 UTC; Views: 573; Favourites: 10; Downloads: 6
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Description Jack sat on top the school, it was still before noon so he knew the kids would come out at least two more times before the day was over. He felt bad for the girl, Theresa, that he had met earlier. He had spent a bit of time making it snow some more, but not so much that the teachers would keep the children inside, so that the snow would make better snowballs, and by extension better snowmen.

As the girl had walked away earlier he had noticed a small drawing in the snow where the girl had been sitting before he had wondered over, it was a picture of a stick-person standing next to a snowman. He figured that even one small thing like actually getting to build a snowman would make her day better.

Jack sighed, knowing it would be a while before the kids were out for the lunch break. He jumped down from on top the roof with some help from the wind and went to look in the windows. As he wondered from window to window, creating frost as he went, most of the kids that looked up did not see him. It made him curious about Theresa, who did. Why would this one child believe in him when no one else around her seemed too?

With a shrug he kept wondering the school, and stopped the snow. He ended up coming to the window with Theresa's class, he laughed a bit when he saw that she was fairly active in the class, raising her hand every time the teacher asked a question and taking notes, unlike some of the other kids.

"There is no way that school is fun, so why do you seem happier in there, taking notes, then some kids do at recess?" Jack wondered to himself.

As he watched the teacher left the room to go get something and he got his answer. The kids immediately started talking to one another, be despite being right in the middle of the class everyone seemed to be ignoring her, when someone finally did say something to her it was the boy that had thrown the snowball at her. She blushed at whatever is was he said and looked down in an attempt to hide it, causing the class to laugh loud enough for him to hear it. Some more kids joined in, clearly making fun of the poor girl before she got mad and yelled at them all.

While Jack could not hear exactly what she said he did pick up a few words and got the impression that she was threatening to tell the teacher. A few kids made a one or two more comments but they eventually all went back to their work. Theresa looked at the clock with a sigh before looking out the window, spotting Jack. She looked confused, but shrugged a bit and started working.

Jack also looked at the clock and saw it was around 11:10. He figured lunch would be soon and he could ask Theresa why she believed in him, it was a bit of a self-centered question, he knew, but couldn't help but wonder.

He continued to watch the class for a bit, but once the teacher came back in the kids settled down a bit, well, as much as you can expect hungry 8 year-olds to right before lunch. At 11:30 a bell rang and all the kids but Theresa ran for a blue bin Jack had not noticed before and grabbed their lunches out of it. Theresa went right for her coat and slipped it on as she walked out of the classroom and down the hall, out of Jacks sight.

He was a bit confused but went to the door where she had exited and entered for the first break of the day, just as he got there Theresa walked out and almost ran into him.

"Oh, sorry, Jack, I'm just heading home for lunch." She said as she walked around a corner and towards a busy street.

"You don't stay for lunch?" Jack asked as he walked along with her.

Theresa shook her head as she reached the cross walk and pushed the button, "I only live a few minutes away, so most days I go home and come back just a few minutes before the bell"

At that Jack frowned, "That's too bad, I made the snow perfect for snowmen, too"

Theresa smiled and looked up at him "Really?" She asked, "I thought I would have to wait weeks for be able to make a good one!" The light changed, telling her to cross so she started walking "Well, maybe I will come back when I'm done eating"

The pair walked in silence for a few seconds as Theresa turned a corner into a cul-du-sac and headed for one of the houses, as she got to the drive way she looked at Jack and bit her lip, once again before asking, "Would you help me?" She almost looked shocked that she had actually said it out loud before adding, "I mean, no, you're probably busy, and that's silly. Sorry I asked, it's just that it's so much more fun when you make one with another person and-" she had to pause for air as she had said it all in one breath

"Whoa, hey slow down, I'm not busy" Jack said holding up his hands, "I'll gladly help you make a snowman" He smiled as the young girls face lit up and she excused herself, running inside.

Jack was not sure how long she would be in there, but got the feeling she would feel bad if she came out and he was gone. He looked around the key hole and saw a bunch of evergreen trees in the middle, surrounded by mountains of piled up snow from the circular street. He walked over and sat in the branches of one of the trees.
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Comments: 20

HybridRebellion [2012-12-09 07:04:19 +0000 UTC]

This is pretty good! It seems alittle shallow? Not sure what the right word is. But throwing in a few adjectives and breaking up senetences to create a better flow definetely wouldn't hurt. You have a couple of sentences where you could have interupted with extra details or putting "so and so said" then continuing the sentence.
Oh god, I'm turning into my English teacher...
Hope that help or whatnot

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moonpuppy4 In reply to HybridRebellion [2012-12-09 07:11:50 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I know what you mean, I was not sure how to make it flow better, but will take your advice in the future, as for putting in things like who is talking, I know I should do it more, but it feels odd, especially because when reading I naturally skip over it
Meh, turning into your English teacher isn't bad when you are writing stuff XD (unless they sucked like mine in grade 8 in which case it is)

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HybridRebellion In reply to moonpuppy4 [2012-12-09 07:30:34 +0000 UTC]

Oh god. My Eight grade teacher was Satan's mother! I took her Honors class and it was harder than the AP class I'm taking now! Two words: Sentence. Diagraming. At least my English teacher now is cool *sweatdrop* she let my class explain what casual sex is to a senior. A male highschool senior. What casual sex is. *airplane directing arm spazz* I almost had to play him a song by my favorite band called "Casual sex" to end the damn arguement.

Oh.. I'm rambling.
Hey look! Its 2:30 am!
Whheeeee!

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moonpuppy4 In reply to HybridRebellion [2012-12-09 15:51:00 +0000 UTC]

....How did he not...? I mean, I've never even... and I.... ??? Sounds like an interesting teacher XD

lol, I just woke up! it's 9 AM here now!

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HybridRebellion In reply to moonpuppy4 [2012-12-09 17:19:55 +0000 UTC]

She is, she's my real teacher's maternity sub. I'm gonna miss her when shes gone It's 12:20 here

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moonpuppy4 In reply to HybridRebellion [2012-12-09 17:28:12 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I bet. Is your real teacher nice, or have you not met her or what?

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HybridRebellion In reply to moonpuppy4 [2012-12-09 17:36:32 +0000 UTC]

She's really nice, but more soft spoken and less outgoing. :/ My sub seems like a bit of a teen, so she gets the class to talk more and she's easier to talk to. Its nice

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moonpuppy4 In reply to HybridRebellion [2012-12-09 18:18:44 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, kind of like a parent vs an older sibling or something?

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HybridRebellion In reply to moonpuppy4 [2012-12-09 23:55:13 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, she's really aproachable and helpful. It makes class fun

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moonpuppy4 In reply to HybridRebellion [2012-12-10 00:57:49 +0000 UTC]

That's always good

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HybridRebellion In reply to moonpuppy4 [2012-12-10 01:53:29 +0000 UTC]

Yeppers I think that's why my writings improved drastically during the class so far Though my spelling still sucks :/ Spell chack will always have a special place in my heart XP

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moonpuppy4 In reply to HybridRebellion [2012-12-10 01:55:06 +0000 UTC]

... the fact that you just spelled "Check" wrong made me laugh SO MUCH

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HybridRebellion In reply to moonpuppy4 [2012-12-10 02:00:31 +0000 UTC]

kinda my point (that was on purpose ) The other thing I'm infamous for is thinking faster than I type and leaving words out of a sentence by accident

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moonpuppy4 In reply to HybridRebellion [2012-12-10 02:07:44 +0000 UTC]

I assumed that. Meh, I don't really do that, I can type fairly fast, I just go back and fix the mistakes after thought is done. Like that sentence, it had 3 mistakes XD

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HybridRebellion In reply to moonpuppy4 [2012-12-10 02:42:05 +0000 UTC]

I just goingtyping in, guns ablazing and if I find anything major I'll fix it. Otherwise I'm not big on fixing mistakes in nonformal writing. I've been known to be the biggest derp in conversations because of that

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moonpuppy4 In reply to HybridRebellion [2012-12-10 03:35:42 +0000 UTC]

I can't send out anything if a mistake is glaring me in the face.

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HybridRebellion In reply to moonpuppy4 [2012-12-10 03:39:28 +0000 UTC]

I'm lazy XP I'm also really bad at catching mistakes since I read for the picture, rather than the components usually.

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moonpuppy4 In reply to HybridRebellion [2012-12-10 03:52:07 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I do that, but 'turn it off' when editing, it's hard!

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HybridRebellion In reply to moonpuppy4 [2012-12-11 00:17:48 +0000 UTC]

I played English Teacher for a friend once, thats the last time. I could not be an English teacher Just for that reason

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moonpuppy4 In reply to HybridRebellion [2012-12-11 05:26:42 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I know what you mean!

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