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Published: 2010-11-07 21:01:09 +0000 UTC; Views: 1341; Favourites: 31; Downloads: 3
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Description It's a simple thing
Something that builds up for years
It's a thing that keeps you on edge
It's all your fears

Some people hate spiders and bugs
And how they creep and crawl
From the small ones to the big ones
They watch you hiding on the wall

Many people are afraid of the dark
Because you never really know
All the things that darkness keeps secret
And all the things that don't show

Some people don't like big animals
From all the creatures from far and wide
Wolves, Tigers, Bears, Lions
All of them would hurt you till you died

Most people hate to think of blood
The thought and the sight makes skin crawl
It's not that it's dangerous
But it's disgusting all-in-all

Anything can scare a person
People have many fears
Things that can break you down
Into many shakes and tears

Death, love, poison, commitment
They are fears too
Anything from death
Too an "I love you"

Worms that crawl under your skin
Thoughts to make the blood run cold
Turn your skin pale
You are everything but feeling bold

Demons and evil things
Hiding in the dark
Nothing to lighten up your day
Or give a little spark

Lightning and thunder makes
People jump out of their skin
Everything is a battle
That some people never win

It may feel unfair and stupid
But it's more natural then it seems
It will all catch up to you
In reality or in your dreams

Everyone has a weakness
And it never goes away
It's different for some people
But some things always stay

Pain walks in one you
When you aren't prepared
So you better get ready
To get a little scared
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Comments: 41

chaolids [2018-01-24 19:35:14 +0000 UTC]

Finally! Someone who understands that fear isn't all bad!
Keep up the good work!

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sampea [2013-02-17 16:14:41 +0000 UTC]

it mades me feel less alone.

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EarlyRain [2012-11-25 15:09:47 +0000 UTC]

i am probably commenting 2 years late but i still wanted to comment and say that is a wonderful piece!

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leopard-atxheart [2011-02-01 04:34:25 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the submission. Really like this piece, the really basic down home of fear. -shudder- Nice.

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Sweet-Kaitou [2010-11-26 16:43:26 +0000 UTC]

Nice!

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Moonfox1781 In reply to Sweet-Kaitou [2010-11-26 17:01:51 +0000 UTC]

:3

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Sweet-Kaitou In reply to Moonfox1781 [2010-11-26 17:04:46 +0000 UTC]

[link]

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Moonfox1781 In reply to Sweet-Kaitou [2010-11-26 19:07:37 +0000 UTC]

:3

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Sweet-Kaitou In reply to Moonfox1781 [2010-11-26 19:11:13 +0000 UTC]

>w<

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Phoenix-Ocean [2010-11-11 16:14:53 +0000 UTC]

That's brilliant, very meaningful and well thought-out. Keep writing! :hugs:

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Moonfox1781 In reply to Phoenix-Ocean [2010-11-11 16:17:27 +0000 UTC]



have you read my story "The Beast of Bray Road" yet?? :3

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Jez123 [2010-11-08 14:08:01 +0000 UTC]

In the stanza:
"Death, love, poison, commitment
They are fears too
Anything from death
Too an "I love you" "

Something about it is just...awkward...one of those things you can't put your finger on, but maybe it's the lack of syllables in lines three and four. And you spelled "to" wrong, but that's just me being nit-picky...

Besides that, LOVED IT! (:

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Moonfox1781 In reply to Jez123 [2010-11-08 21:59:16 +0000 UTC]

*looks down* sorry..

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Jez123 In reply to Moonfox1781 [2010-11-08 22:49:41 +0000 UTC]

It's fine lol this is still super amazing!!(:

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Moonfox1781 In reply to Jez123 [2010-11-08 22:51:02 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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erziban [2010-11-07 23:10:00 +0000 UTC]

this is very good over all; there are a few little tweaks you might make, in your seventh stanza,the last line would work better as" to an 'I love you'", read it out loud an see how it flows...that always helps me when I am working on mine! Nice job!

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Moonfox1781 In reply to erziban [2010-11-08 01:08:31 +0000 UTC]

*playing with my fingers, looking down* sorry..

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erziban In reply to Moonfox1781 [2010-11-08 02:15:53 +0000 UTC]

Oooooooh,crap...did I sound all lectury on you? I certainly didn't mean to! My bad!!!!!

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Moonfox1781 In reply to erziban [2010-11-08 02:27:25 +0000 UTC]

*smiles at you freaking out*

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erziban In reply to Moonfox1781 [2010-11-08 02:29:16 +0000 UTC]

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Moonfox1781 In reply to erziban [2010-11-08 11:15:39 +0000 UTC]

lol, that made me feel better xD

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erziban In reply to Moonfox1781 [2010-11-09 00:28:31 +0000 UTC]

Good!

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Moonfox1781 In reply to erziban [2010-11-09 00:31:00 +0000 UTC]

GASP.

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erziban In reply to Moonfox1781 [2010-11-09 00:31:36 +0000 UTC]

GASP? Out of breath, or shocked?

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Moonfox1781 In reply to erziban [2010-11-09 00:32:45 +0000 UTC]

i had a cupcake today :3

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erziban In reply to Moonfox1781 [2010-11-09 00:55:35 +0000 UTC]

MMMMMMM..............SUGAR

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Moonfox1781 In reply to erziban [2010-11-09 01:16:31 +0000 UTC]

that's how i felt x3

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erziban In reply to Moonfox1781 [2010-11-09 01:19:55 +0000 UTC]

I have a sugar thing too....it is my addiction

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Moonfox1781 In reply to erziban [2010-11-09 01:26:32 +0000 UTC]

want to know what my addiction is?... sleeping. when i do homework i swear it's my brains way of saying "HIBERNATION!"

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erziban In reply to Moonfox1781 [2010-11-09 01:29:28 +0000 UTC]

I wish I could sleep..I don't sleep well, so I'm always tired!

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Moonfox1781 In reply to erziban [2010-11-09 01:30:41 +0000 UTC]

same here. i gotta take sleeping pills sometimes

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erziban In reply to Moonfox1781 [2010-11-09 01:54:07 +0000 UTC]

No fun..I'm going to have to do that tonight so my poor husband can get some sleep; I keep him awake with my tossing and turning.....

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Moonfox1781 In reply to erziban [2010-11-09 02:17:50 +0000 UTC]

lol, im not married xD i is just 15

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erziban In reply to Moonfox1781 [2010-11-09 02:21:12 +0000 UTC]

Well, get some sleep! You have no one annoying you all night! lol

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Moonfox1781 In reply to erziban [2010-11-09 11:22:38 +0000 UTC]

lol, true

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erziban In reply to Moonfox1781 [2010-11-09 15:15:41 +0000 UTC]

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Moonfox1781 In reply to erziban [2010-11-09 22:29:18 +0000 UTC]

wait a minute

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erziban In reply to Moonfox1781 [2010-11-10 01:04:11 +0000 UTC]

Why are we waiting a minute?

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Moonfox1781 In reply to erziban [2010-11-10 01:20:52 +0000 UTC]

lol, because I said so >:3

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erziban In reply to Moonfox1781 [2010-11-10 02:48:32 +0000 UTC]

YES MASTER........lol

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Moonfox1781 In reply to erziban [2010-11-10 11:47:28 +0000 UTC]

lol, wonderful :3

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