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You are so much stronger than suicide.You are so much more powerful than the cuts on your arm,
And so much better than your eating disorder.
So much more than your scars.
Darling,
Please look me in the eyes,
And show me your wounds,
Whether they be on your forearm,
Your wrist,
Your mind,
Or your heart.
Sweetheart,
Have you been skipping meals?
Have you been cutting?
Well, here’s something for you to try.
Think one thing,
Just one thing,
Every
Single
Day.
Just remember to prove to the world,
That you
Are stronger than
Suicide.
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This is very touching to the heart. Wonderful work with suck simple words. This will honestly help a lot of people on deviantart, more than you may know. You really have touched my heart on this one and actually helped a lot. I say this is a wonderful piece. Taking time out to read this was worth it and worth it to take time to notice you. I say you have a real art, not just for writing, but for helping.
You have done very well here, I think you should make more like this. In my opinion, this should be very well noticed on deviantart. This deserves much recognition.
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Thank you for writing such a lovely poem. I am a suicide survivor. I tried suicide by overdose on my own medication about three years ago. Just reading this, practically brought tears to my eyes. This right here, could very well save lives. I commend you for writing this. It really struck me and just made me think. I don't want anyone to go through what I did when that happen. I wouldn't even wish it on my worst enemy. But, you, are a shining light to suicide survivors, to ones who are thinking about it. I'm going to share this if you don't mind to some of my friends. I'll give you credit. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h… " width="15" height="13" alt="
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Intro: A deep, heartfelt poem about a very tricky subject: suicide. Now, admittedly, I've never gone through such a low as to consider it myself, but I have known people down in the depths. It's a difficult situation to deal with, especially given our (in America) 'don't get involved' culture. If you are a friend or family member, why shouldn't you get involved? You need to.
The Work: Structurally, I love it. Some poems use a set flow, some poems rhyme, some are free form. The free form is the perfect choice for this. The inherent LACK of form breaks down the author's barrier and immediately brings the personal approach of the piece to level. "Darling, Please look me in the eyes," immediately grabs the reader after the opening lines.
It goes on to spark a dialogue with an invisible person. Perhaps its a person you are merely meeting for the first time, or maybe it's someone you know. It helps to keep the personal touch.
And finally, the message: Think one thing, just one thing, every single day." Straight. To-the-point. And not preachy. I personally applaud this message as the climax and point to the work. It's no coincidence, either, that this happens to be my view of life. Every day, there's something 'new'. And that something is what makes life worth living. You just need to find it.
Conclusion: Succinct, poignant, and powerful. Suicide is a complicated issue. I understand that this piece does not deal with all aspects (choosing to focus on cutting and eating disorders), but that does NOT detract from the final message nor the overall meaning.
I hope that readers will take the message to heart. If you are suffering, please learn the message. If you are a friend, please get involved. I, personally, had a good friend of mine who I suspected was suffering more than just a passing depression, so one day while we were just hanging around, I randomly told her that I would be very sad if she were to ever leave. It wasn't until a few years later that she openly admitted to me that my single statement was the start of her recovery.
We need more positive thoughts in this world. Here's one for keeps.
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This.. Is really very touching.. As someone who was once a suicidal person, I find that this will surely reach the heart of people. I really loved this. Simple poem from someone's heart reaching out to help. It really reminded me why I chose to stop and how I did it..
I suggest though adding more details. Like, why or even what. Like, why stop and getting them to find what their purpose is.
Some people suffer like this because of depression. Some are influenced. But some are just doing it for fun or even attention. Make them wake up. Give them a push to the right direction. Some will not come for help but wait to be helped. Some don't want to be helped cause they think they deserve it. Some just doesn't have any desire to be in this world anymore.
That is why they need courage and support from others even if they don't show it. This is what I think your poem is trying to do. Your straight to the point poem which will awaken some.
Thank you.. For trying to help people by writing such beautiful things. I hope to read more of your work soon e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h… " width="15" height="13" alt="
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well done little poem here.
I like that its not a typical one but totaly gets the point across.
It feels a lil raw in some places but that could just be the emotion of the thing comming across.
Over all its very good and i would suggest it to others.
I would like to comment that the impact of this is very powerful. there are many people out there who are in fact suicidal ... my self having been down that road after my mother's death and made it out the other side.
Little snippets like this t hat i found were some of the things that helped me make it.
Just that there are those out there in the world that have faith in me.
Please continue writing these. You never know whos life you might save
RP
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the maximum impact has plenty of rough sentiment, which is good, specifically targeting at encouraging the depressive to strive on forward--and one needs that, truly, so i appreciate it
the technique proves to be faulty in some areas simply because it's made unclear as soon as it's demanded to 'show me your wounds', without a reason or explanation
you have to ask yourself, 'why' - why do you want this depressive, the individual who is temporarily struggling, to look in your eyes
because they need the why, realistically, they're unable to cloud away from the tragedy
originality is simplistic and the action to invigorate the individual viewer is barely hanging on a limb, simply because, it's commonplace - daily use, it now lacks meaning or sincerity
use creativity and originality to your advantage
the vision is not a strong point, either, simply because what you'd want to do with it is let them envision a world of being more than okay - add in that this is all worth it, that there is a sun and more than those wounds - that there's skin that's been untouched, that there's beauty in that, too
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This is such a moving poem, it gives so many people a little tilt of the head, and it brings hope. It can relate to all, simply depressed, suicidal, or even the content, giving people the feeling of hope and courage. I wish it had been a little bit longer, but it got where it needed to go, and hit the point spot on, giving us all that internal feeling. The word choice was creative, yet simple, and the stanza organization was very good.
Sadly, though, I'll be quite frank, it's not going to make too much of a difference for people already there. It's great, but so many people today... won't get it.
Bravo!
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this poem hits home with me because I have experienced all of the things mentioned in the poem on both sides. my dad said these things to me. I like the directness although I think some metaphors and similes would have made it better. it has a great message to it. I like the rhythm and the voice to it, and was pretty easy to read. I love it when it goese.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="
Please look me in the eyes,
And show me your wounds,
Whether they be on your forearm,
Your wrist,
Your mind,
Or your heart
it is somewhat similar to my own writing style, and it emphasizes the message. again, it is a pretty good poem, with a great message. keep up the good work!
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Beautiful, simplistic. It's just wonderful that you care so much about your followers. When someone is in that state, they really do need someone to reach out to.
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It´s beautiful. This has give me hope sometimes.Thank you
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I hope you appreciate honest critique, because that’s what I’m going to give. I’m not at all impressed with this piece. For one thing, it’s simplistic—it trivializes suicide, making it into some little obstacle one has to get past, almost like a road block, and it’s nothing like that. People don’t commit suicide because they’re weak, they commit suicide because they have a bug in their head eating away every positive thought they have. They have a rain cloud over them that absolutely refuses to go away. When I was at my most suicidal, I was unreachable. You could tell me I was stronger than suicide a hundred times over and it wouldn’t matter, I’d still want to kill myself… because my problem was not strength, my problem was how I perceived myself, and how I perceived the world.
Secondly, it doesn’t have much depth or make much sense. Why should you care if I commit suicide? Why should I look you in the eyes and show you my wounds? Who are you to me or me to you? And why do you automatically assume that suicidal people cut or have an eating disorder? While there certainly are some who do, suicide is much more complex and encompassing then that. Anyone can consider it, even people with seemingly happy lives and everything to live for.
Thirdly, you don’t offer any explanation as to why people should choose life over death. What makes life inherently preferable? Basically, you’ve told me to live but haven’t given me any real reason as to why, other than “suicide is weak.” Which isn’t even true, but even if it was, so what? That’s not enough ground to stand on.
Suicide is a very personal issue. It can’t be trivialized. It can’t be twisted with assumptions and guilt trips and childish sentiments. And it can’t be summed up in a simplistic poem.
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It can't be. But it's one of the best things people can do. And it seems like the author's "simplistic poems" are helping a lot of people.
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Wow, that comment is old (mine, I mean). I'll admit I was in a bad place when I wrote that, grappling with a lot of issues. Upon reading the poem again (it's been forever since I read it and honestly I forgot about it and my comment), I've changed my views on it quite a bit. It still doesn't really grab me, but of course that's just me and if it's helping other people than I say I can respect it for that.
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I wanted to respond because I felt a lot of hostility from this post and I wanted to respond with an outside opinion as to possibly why the writer wrote this way and how it could be beneficial to some people.
You first point out that you think the author is simplifying the issue and it can be interpreted that way, but I get the sense that the author was using self harm and eating disorders as reasons for suicide because those are highly common reasons for suicide in modern society as sad as that is. The message from this piece is meant to be a outreach poem to those struggling, so by picking issues that are commonly struggled with the author can identify with a larger crowd. It's also very understandable that just words cannot make the difference to some people and you use yourself as an example, but there are people who just need to be reminded they are stronger then suicide.
When you ask about why you should feel enough familiarity to the author to reveal your troubles, I can see that you are focusing on the idea that the author does not have the right/need to have access to your personal information. I'd just like to tell you that while you aren't so open to sharing (which is completely understandable that if you have enough troubles to want to end your life that you wouldn't be very trusting to a stranger) there are people that are comforted merely by the idea that someone wants to shoulder their burden alongside them as well as the ability to share their problem with another. On the idea that the author assumes all people who are suicidal either self harm or have an eating disorder, I again believe it's just to help a largely struggling group of people identify with this piece.
On your final idea that the author doesn't give a reason to live, the idea that one is stronger than suicide seems to be the tool and reason for living. It can be interpreted that the author is saying you are 'strong' (I hesitate to use that word since the inverse can be assumed by some) enough to fight through your troubles so don't give up. You also interpret the author is implying the inverse of being stronger than suicide is being weaker than suicide, which is fully plausible. Another way to see it, however, is that the strength isn't the failure to be weak, but instead the ability to overcome a great task.
Your closing statement seems to fully be your beliefs which I can't agree or disagree with, but I don't believe the author had any ill will. Overall I in no way mean to offend, I just wanted to explain another way people can take this piece that would help them giving this poem a positive and useful purpose. I hope for the best for you in being able to stay away from the trouble of suicidal thoughts and actions. Have a lovely day.
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Maximum points on a beautiful rebuttal.
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Beautiful. And I really needed to see this right now. Thank you so much!
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Ive been reading through your gallery now , and I want to thank you for writing these things. Ive been bullied , depressed suicidal and I've had eating disorders and I have a horrible relationship with my dad and trust issues. These texts reminds me and helps me to remember why Im alive , cause Im not gonna give in , I want to be strong and happy be able to live my life and one day maybe even find my other part. Your texts mean so much for so many people. Thank you so much for pushing me even more to start eating healthy and as much as I need , for making me feel like I can take that step and talk to my mother about my feelings , for making me feel like I am really worth something. I have been close to writing suicide notes so many times , but people like you and my two friends are what keeps me going , what keeps me from the knifes and pills and ropes. Again Thank you. It means a lot.
Felicia~
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Thanks, just thank you so much 
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My friend threatened to cut today. I'm going to show it to her. It's so true, and so meaningful. Thank you.
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That was amazing, I'm sorry
It reminded me of one of my friends going through something like this, and it just... I don't know... made me realise maybe there are people still out there that care.
So thanks, for making my day in my already crap week
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Thank you so much for this wonderful piece of art.
It touches me deep inside and I hope that people who suffer from those things, you mentioned above, will take your advise to heart and prove to the world, that they are so much stronger than suicide.
You are a wonderful person!
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thank you . I've faced suicide before and the memories of that place still haunt me , but this really helps <3
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Thank you so much for writing this. Seriously, you have no idea. This is amazing.
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I've been struggling with the dark thoughts lately and this helped... a lot, so thank you
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This Is Really Inspiring. You Art Is Really Good!
You Help Alot Of People!
Save. Thank You!
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I was just about to write a suicide note on here when I found this...thank you so much
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It's really good and inspiring to people who may need to hear it now!
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This is just... amazing. I don't quite have the right words <3
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I- I don't know what to say other than: Thank you.
I tried to commet suicide yesterday, and I cut
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The subject matter is hard-hitting, but the poem itself is only okay in terms of its creativity, language, style and how it ultimately treats the subject matter. This reads more like the copy from a Kid's Phone Help-Line advertisement than a poem.
Stilted perspective, no descriptive imagery, too expository and a little self-indulgent. Isn't there a more unique way to express that people are "stronger than suicide"? For example, see Phyllis Webb's poem, “To Friends Who Have Also Considered Suicide” jssckr.wordpress.com/2011/10/0…
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Took my breath away while reading it, survived an eating disorder and multiple suicide attempts myself and this is just the kind of thing to help me move on with my life and remember to never give up hope.
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You don't know me, or anything about me but you wrote something that fits my soul. It's beautiful. Thank you for saying this so eloquently. I know this speaks to all of us that have ever felt this way or feel this way each day. Thank you for reminding me that there are those out there that care and believe in us, believe that we are stronger than suicide.
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Brilliantly written, and a beautiful message. Lord knows there are some people who I wish I could teach this message to.
<3 Thank you for the brilliant poem.
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Thank you, thank you once again for writing such encouraging poetry. Just when I was feeling at my lowest ebb again.
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Well done my heart and thanks goes out to you for making such an inspiring piece.
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If I would describe your poem in one word it would be courageous; well done
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This was a wonderful read and it made me think. Don't stop writing!!
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