Comments: 13
Thuglyfe5eva [2017-04-19 07:40:15 +0000 UTC]
This is actually a Mary Sue and a rip-off, due to her backstory basically being Yuki Cross's. If she is a level A vampire she shouldn't be in the Day Class or be able to wield anti-vampire weapons and especially shouldn't be able to hold the Artemis Rod and know how to transform it! Also, her personality has no flaws, which is a big red flag and a despised feature on "original characters".
My advice would be to maybe steer clear of the Kurans completely, as both children are kind of Mary/Gary Sue/Stu-ish by them selves, maybe go watch some random anime or read random manga{Unless you're broke like me, eh?} to be able to get different character ideas. It's what I do! And add some flaws to your characters personality so she isn't annoyingly perfect, maybe have major flaws but show her good traits the most?
Additionally, your character is cute! But she's under the healthy weight. I's advise looking into that.
Just want to help! wow that was meant to look somewhat friendly.
Am I about to get a restraining order.
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Thuglyfe5eva In reply to MichimiYuna [2017-04-19 08:30:02 +0000 UTC]
Oh! You're welcome! I honesty didn't see when this one came out so I just assumed she was new! Glad you got out of the MS phase though!
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Firedragon2009 [2013-09-30 13:57:23 +0000 UTC]
This is great!
Her story is really interesting~<3
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GoldieKatt [2013-09-28 03:15:21 +0000 UTC]
Sh'es so cute omfg. Just curious why is she in the day class if she is a level A vampire? I'd be pretty difficult for her i'd assume having to be in the light of day for so long.
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MichimiYuna In reply to GoldieKatt [2013-09-28 06:33:49 +0000 UTC]
Well her vampire side was sealed and later was opened, but only half way, thats why she can still be in the light of day for a long time.
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GoldieKatt In reply to MichimiYuna [2013-09-28 17:43:56 +0000 UTC]
oooh. okay, that makes way more sense now xD thanks for that
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MinxyNinxy [2013-09-25 10:54:07 +0000 UTC]
awesomeness extreme awesomeness good job XD
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