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Published: 2006-06-01 21:05:06 +0000 UTC; Views: 811; Favourites: 14; Downloads: 20
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Description Loving you is nothing compared to a dying candle.    - Naeem Pasha


No, only if you stay. I take words
as gift now only from those who look
like orbiting. I have grown stone
in my chest, flowerpots, azaleas,
and if you look like having too much
gravity, I'll take no syllables then either.

*

Loving you is nothing. I could do it
in my sleep, and have, then wake to
another man, and still remember you were
better in my chest. Leaving you is easy -
I follow the mothers who leave
for the sake of themselves, to keep their sides
from splitting with love's fair children.
But coming back - oh for the coming back -
for the paths gouged in concrete, for the grass
grown greener than the youngest eyes, for the wide
before us, the straight, the narrow, for
the middle way - for all the signposts
signaling return, I cannot say I will go back
and I cannot open the door to you
but that is me on the front porch
every night, starbright, and it is best not to lie.

*

A man came with flowers. I tried to put them
next to you in my chest, but my flowerpot
runneth over, everything is wet. Growing you
is nothing, but how you bloom sometimes
from season to season - must have been that mountain
air, must have been your nova silence -
and how my garden grows.
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Comments: 18

inmyroom [2006-07-23 20:44:48 +0000 UTC]

I've read this and 'Historical Note' about 20 times, I adore them both and am about to cut and paste them into my journal now I have my new comp so I can read over and over again

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manchaliaina In reply to inmyroom [2006-07-28 05:41:46 +0000 UTC]

My pleasure then.

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MystWilliams [2006-07-13 19:29:04 +0000 UTC]

this is beautiful. sometimes after reading your work im left without words. and this may sound odd, but sometimes your words make me think of the face i long the most, that one person who cares for me as much as i care for them, but cant have.
i dont know why. you just do. thanks.

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manchaliaina In reply to MystWilliams [2006-07-28 04:40:12 +0000 UTC]

You know why that's the best compliment? Because that's who I write for.

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MystWilliams In reply to manchaliaina [2006-07-28 04:49:51 +0000 UTC]

one day we may all have what we long

keep writing for them

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manchaliaina In reply to MystWilliams [2006-07-28 05:09:02 +0000 UTC]

I meant you, silly. I meant folks like us.

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MystWilliams In reply to manchaliaina [2006-07-28 16:36:52 +0000 UTC]

ahh, even better.

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j-ouroboros [2006-07-09 04:37:54 +0000 UTC]

Damn. Blew me away with this one. The images of growth, flowers, gardens - beautiful and incredibly well done. Great line breaks, too.

A man came with flowers. I tried to put them
next to you in my chest, but my flowerpot
runneth over, everything is wet. Growing you
is nothing, but how you bloom sometimes
from season to season - must have been that mountain
air, must have been your nova silence -
and how my garden grows.

That stanza is stunning. Fantastic ending line. And an incredible image, a ribcage as a flowerpot, flowers and greenery and a lover all spilling out with water . . . I'm really at a loss for words to describe what that image does to my brain. Emily Dickinson? Someone? said that she knew she was reading real poetry when it felt like the top of her head was coming off. You not only make the top of my head come off, you replace my brain with oceans and orchids and then screw my skull back on. I love it.

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manchaliaina In reply to j-ouroboros [2006-07-28 05:43:54 +0000 UTC]

I left this comment so long because, gosh, what can I say? Thank you? It'll have to do.

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hunnybunny09 [2006-06-22 23:29:47 +0000 UTC]

I'm going to watch you, oh my gosh. *grins*

The last stanza is mind blowing!

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originill [2006-06-03 22:41:33 +0000 UTC]

oh, to know you better. keep doing this.

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manchaliaina In reply to originill [2006-06-03 23:53:41 +0000 UTC]

to know you better also, my friend. in spades.

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originill In reply to manchaliaina [2006-06-04 16:42:10 +0000 UTC]

in spades. i can dig it.

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manchaliaina In reply to originill [2006-06-04 21:30:13 +0000 UTC]

what would you grow?

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originill In reply to manchaliaina [2006-06-05 00:25:36 +0000 UTC]

a pumpkin.

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Pinocchio-Liez [2006-06-02 16:32:39 +0000 UTC]

This is indeed a lovely piece...the images are so very real. So much intense love comes in these words...beautiful !

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LOvedy0uFrMtheStARt [2006-06-02 04:24:18 +0000 UTC]

oh.
i am breathless.

this is beautiful

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completeaccident [2006-06-02 03:56:41 +0000 UTC]

*sigh*
Your poem is sublime. Everything aside, you just write like no one else. I'm not transported, but I wish I could be.

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