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manchaliaina In reply to MystWilliams [2006-07-28 04:40:12 +0000 UTC]
You know why that's the best compliment? Because that's who I write for.
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MystWilliams In reply to manchaliaina [2006-07-28 04:49:51 +0000 UTC]
one day we may all have what we long
keep writing for them
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manchaliaina In reply to MystWilliams [2006-07-28 05:09:02 +0000 UTC]
I meant you, silly. I meant folks like us.
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j-ouroboros [2006-07-09 04:37:54 +0000 UTC]
Damn. Blew me away with this one. The images of growth, flowers, gardens - beautiful and incredibly well done. Great line breaks, too.
A man came with flowers. I tried to put them
next to you in my chest, but my flowerpot
runneth over, everything is wet. Growing you
is nothing, but how you bloom sometimes
from season to season - must have been that mountain
air, must have been your nova silence -
and how my garden grows.
That stanza is stunning. Fantastic ending line. And an incredible image, a ribcage as a flowerpot, flowers and greenery and a lover all spilling out with water . . . I'm really at a loss for words to describe what that image does to my brain. Emily Dickinson? Someone? said that she knew she was reading real poetry when it felt like the top of her head was coming off. You not only make the top of my head come off, you replace my brain with oceans and orchids and then screw my skull back on. I love it.
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manchaliaina In reply to j-ouroboros [2006-07-28 05:43:54 +0000 UTC]
I left this comment so long because, gosh, what can I say? Thank you? It'll have to do.
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hunnybunny09 [2006-06-22 23:29:47 +0000 UTC]
I'm going to watch you, oh my gosh. *grins*
The last stanza is mind blowing!
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originill [2006-06-03 22:41:33 +0000 UTC]
oh, to know you better. keep doing this.
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manchaliaina In reply to originill [2006-06-03 23:53:41 +0000 UTC]
to know you better also, my friend. in spades.
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LOvedy0uFrMtheStARt [2006-06-02 04:24:18 +0000 UTC]
oh.
i am breathless.
this is beautiful
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completeaccident [2006-06-02 03:56:41 +0000 UTC]
*sigh*
Your poem is sublime. Everything aside, you just write like no one else. I'm not transported, but I wish I could be.
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