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Published: 2013-05-25 01:40:19 +0000 UTC; Views: 570; Favourites: 24; Downloads: 0
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Description She said she was leaving.
What could I do?
She couldn't be helped.
She'd never pull through.

She'd been so dark,
just wasting away.
She tried to fight the tears,
but I saw them everyday.

I wanted her to be happy,
wanted to see her smile.
If only for a moment,
yes, just a little while.

And now she's happy.
That's all I need.
She's out of the dark.
Shes finally been freed.

But now I'm cold.
Now I'm wasting away.
I know I did it right.
I just wish she could've stayed.

God, why'd she have to go?
Each day is filled with dread.
She may be gone,
but I'm the one that's dead.
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Comments: 10

OblivionCat77 [2016-11-14 00:30:23 +0000 UTC]

I saw your description, and at the end you said something about claiming to someone about suicidial thoughts. It's funny how I've tried telling this to people but they didn't care. Heh..

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Emy94 [2013-05-29 07:30:34 +0000 UTC]

this thing touched my emotional , if no one was with me i would cry while i'm reading , keep going

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Myrethy [2013-05-26 23:30:25 +0000 UTC]

When I first started reading this, I thought it had something to do with the 'she' battling some incurable disease, possibly cancer, but having finished it... I think both of them were under the strain of an entirely different but still devastating disease. Now I think she wanted-and got-a divorce with him, and he killed himself because of that. Or maybe they just broke up, with the same results. Regardless, I loved it!

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lostmyslef In reply to Myrethy [2013-05-27 14:07:33 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad you loved it. and thank you for explaining how you perceived it. I'm always interested to see how the readers read my work

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MagicalJoey [2013-05-26 17:51:52 +0000 UTC]

You described the conflict well

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lostmyslef In reply to MagicalJoey [2013-05-26 22:38:53 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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Unique-Firecracker-4 [2013-05-25 17:23:49 +0000 UTC]

Awww, I really like this! So gripping. I'll have to read the other now.

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lostmyslef In reply to Unique-Firecracker-4 [2013-05-26 22:39:29 +0000 UTC]

Well I'm glad, and I hope you like the other one just as well

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BlackFireOpal [2013-05-25 03:12:13 +0000 UTC]

This poem is amazing... it really captured so much. I love the rhyming scheme in it, it makes the poem flow even more smoother. I feel like it has a much darker meaning, and I absolutely love it. Thank you for this.

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lostmyslef In reply to BlackFireOpal [2013-05-26 22:40:20 +0000 UTC]

thank you very much, I'm glad you enjoyed it

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