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LiyuConberma — Commission for ellythegee
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Published: 2015-04-28 01:16:29 +0000 UTC; Views: 36133; Favourites: 456; Downloads: 98
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COMMISSION FORTHIS IS A TWO-SHOT COMIC COMMISSION. But because the script she gave is extended to an extra, so it costed her $10 extra.
This is for 's OC, Starlet: ,
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Drawn by me
OC(Starlet) owned by
Thanks for the commission!
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wow, parabéns pelo trabalho!
só pra ajudar, a primeira página está ótima, conseguiu deixar o leitor bem localizado, tanto no clima quanto no local.
a segunda página não ficou tão legal com esse efeito atrás dos 3 painéis, acabou dando uma prejudicada.
mas a terceira página realmente impressionou, conseguiu estabelecer um clima entre os personagens, desenrolar de forma clara e bem efetiva, com uma certa tensão no toque entre as mãos. (a reação da personagem foi um pouco forçada, talvez se tivesse ousado um pouco mais, tivesse ficado mais expressivo.)
a passagem de momento-momento na terceira página foi bem utilizada e teve um bom desfecho.
parabéns pelo trabalho duro, continue sempre assim!
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Sorry, I don't understand it, I only know english
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translate google:
just to help, the first page is great, managed to leave the reader well located, both in climate and on site.
the second page was not so cool with it behind the 3 panels, it gave impaired.
but the third page really impressed, managed to establish a climate between the characters, clearly progress and well-effective, with a certain tension in touch in his hands. (the reaction of the character was a bit forced, perhaps if it had a little more daring, had been more expressive.)
the time-passing moment on the third page was used well and had a good outcome.
congratulations for the hard work, keep this way!
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This fan art was loving. And the expression on Starlet's face when she realized she was sleeping next to Silver was adorable.
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Does anyone else think Silver looks cute even when he sleeps?
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I wish everything was that straight forward.
XD
:3
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I hope the one of the commissioners decided to ask for an action comic.... Coupling (Pardon me if I seem rude but...) seems very over used, and a little boring at times. But the art's good. Silver seems just a little out of character though, you know?
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I know that, but it's the commissioner request. And you know what they say, customers are always right? ^^
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I love it! By the way, when are you going to finish that "Death of Silver" comic? Please tell me!!
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So now, finally I have the time to comment on this commission
First of all, I need to apologize that this comic commission has to be added up to an extra page due to the scripts I gave to you Liyu. But on the other side, I'd love to give you the extra price because I was quite convinced that the comic will be something amazing and very special.
And indeed, the long wait was worth (almost a year I guess 
The period of this time the style has changed and improved during the progress. Still, I didn't notice of her eyes, till oreana pointed out that the eyes of Starlet of the first page are normally "connected" which they weren't on the next pages. I didn't notice that first but somehow that suits to this style 
And also the scenes have a nice flow to the situations. Everything is like I saw it in my mind's eye - on the whole a very wonderful comic!
Don't make that much worries about the details with the eye Liyu. The comic makes up everything ^^
Thank you very much for the commission. I look forward with heart what you're gonna perform on your future plans
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I... have absolutely no idea what's going on. It's amazing though..
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Dude, you should show this to Archie! I have seen online fan art on their comics. Think about it.
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Aww plaaaace tell me how you can doing this? ??? It's amaaaaaazing and cuuute too >w< <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3
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Awww! So adorable! Silver you're so sexy-I MEAN CUTE!!! You didn't hear me say anything...
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This...is absolutely adorable! Great job!
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I think you did a great job on this piece. 
Naturally, the script was done by the commissioner, I am to guess, so I won't really talk about that, as I am sure this is what they asked for in regards to the scene (as I don't quite get the story or what's happening here, beyond it is adorable). However, Scarlet's eyes feel inconsistent? On page one, her eyes are divided there, and in the panels that follow, they are 'connected', if you see what I mean? 
Also, where are Scarlet's eyelashes in those top panels in the middle?
All and all you did a fantastic job on it, and I am sure Scarlet's owner is going to love it.
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Well, with the eyes they're "connected" like you said. But that's a little detail which doesn't make the whole comic worse. That's a tiny detail I can live with it. I've been waiting for almost a year and the wait was still worth x')
I admit, the script for this commission came from someone else I got. It's written a bit confusing (as the creator doesn't have English as native language) but I understood most what was going on this story 
And yes, I really like it a lot how it turned out
P.S.: by the way, some people name my character as Scarlet with a "c". Actually her name is Starlet with a "t" - Think of a star
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I understand. ^^ Artist asked for a criticism (IE: box asking, otherwise I would have not given), so I gave the best I had to offer, see?
I think it was processed together rather well for a 2 part piece. I can understand the need for it to go 'quickly' was because you only asked for 2 pages, but because the pages were limited, I got rather confused as to what was going on, so to say.
Understandable, but that can be human nature to 'auto-correct' words you don't mean to auto-correct.
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And that's totally correct what you did. Everyone -even the professionals- need some people giving a good critique and advices how they improve
Yes, I was asking for a 2-page comic though but I was willing to pay the extra price 'cause I knew that Liyu will make it very special and for the fairness good and extra work shall be well-paid
Yes, I notice that Scarlet is that mainstream unlike Starlet
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OMG, I DIDN'T NOTICE THE EYES PART, I'M ASHAMED TT___TT
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Mawwwr, don't be ashamed! We all make mistakes, and we learn from them~! I know Elly is going to adore this!
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Thanks XD She actually likes it
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Awww~ That was so cute! Nice job~ 
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It's lovely~ You know it's funny how most people create their oc's to pair them with some cannon character, while I am possibly making my fc a single woman. :>
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