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JessaMar [2020-12-06 18:01:39 +0000 UTC]
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andyending [2020-05-15 18:47:30 +0000 UTC]
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Lionnfart In reply to Eefera [2020-04-28 02:47:33 +0000 UTC]
I think we are! I joined the bookclub and found you on there. I think. /sweats tehe
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Bobibillius [2020-04-28 00:25:36 +0000 UTC]
I personally really like the formatting. Really enjoyed stanza two.
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FASTPASTE [2020-04-27 16:30:42 +0000 UTC]
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Lionnfart In reply to FASTPASTE [2020-04-28 02:44:55 +0000 UTC]
thank you for the comment!
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greenleo94 [2020-04-27 16:20:35 +0000 UTC]
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blanketings [2020-04-27 13:13:08 +0000 UTC]
the desert stanza tho. i Love
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MozartsNemesis [2020-04-27 09:49:15 +0000 UTC]
Absolutely adore this. I love the use of repetition, it's sparse and impactful. Also, the build up to We are Sorry throughout was a nice touch and gave the poem an anticipatory lilt.
As always, your imagery astounds.
Favorite line:
" you suck down your cigarette
like a god inhaling a forest fire."
It's such a perfect image that I can see it clearly in my mind. Well done.
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Lionnfart In reply to MozartsNemesis [2020-04-28 02:45:51 +0000 UTC]
eee ty. glad this was well received. I've decided just number sections in a poem and everyone will go crazy for it. XD
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incalyscent [2020-04-27 06:09:21 +0000 UTC]
im shook
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Alice-Hutchison [2020-04-27 05:34:23 +0000 UTC]
I enjoyed the structure, this piece is very well-written and captures so much emotion. It is beautiful.
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