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LilithBriar — Protecting the Past page 3
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Published: 2017-03-15 09:42:11 +0000 UTC; Views: 340; Favourites: 11; Downloads: 5
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Previous Page: Next Page: I played around with the poses at the bottom of the page for so long and I'm still not quite satisfied. Onyx's cloak makes the foreshortening on his arm look so weird, but it looked just fine in the underdrawing. Perhaps the problem lies not in the anatomy, but with my choice of composition? Or maybe it's all in my head and it looks fine?
Also I drew Onyx blushing again. This is the third time. Also Also, I had way to much fun drawing Lydia's hair. It might be overkill, haha.
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FIrst of all, this page is really cute! I love seeing the bond between Oynx and Lydia.
That said, the flow of the page was a bit hard to follow. My eyes immediately followed the second panel down to the last one because there was no line in between them, which jolted me out of the story for a bit. One thing I always keep in mind is to never sacrifice the flow of a page for style.
Also, you mentioned that Oynx's arm looked strange. Perhaps it'll look better if you define more of his arm from the cloak?
All in all, this page is beautiful, and I especially loved how lifelike and energetic the characters are. I can't wait I read more, and keep up the amazing work! ^^
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I'm so glad you enjoy their interactions.
Thank you for the feedback on the layout. I've always loved experimental layouts when I read manga, but I find it's either hit or miss. 
Okay, next time I draw his arm sticking out of the cloak I'm going to try that.
Thank you!
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The interactions are always nice.
No problem. Everyone has trouble with layout, and experimenting is always a part of that. The word balloon did help a little.
No problem. You're one of my favorite artists on this site. ^^
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