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Published: 2014-08-11 03:14:09 +0000 UTC; Views: 3783; Favourites: 88; Downloads: 0
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Description Uncle Levi and Auntie Gertrude and Katie didn’t miss Gramma. They didn’t even think about her until her Soul Fly Day came. Their flies were silver with big sparkly opal eyes, but Momma said the wood ones Grampa carved for us were just as good.

It was my first Soul Fly Day ever. Momma got me a new black dress and told me it was all right to cry. Katie’s dress had white ruffles and silver flies stitched into it. She pointed at my wood fly and called us poor.

There were so many people there was barely enough room for the shaman to get to Gramma. Everyone got real quiet so we could hear him say words I didn’t understand. Gramma’s Soul Fly came out of her mouth and started flying over us. It was like a paper doll, only just black. It landed on my head and Momma cheered and we sang Soul Fly Day songs. Katie whined about how she should have got the blessing because her fly was so pretty.

And that’s how my painting won first prize at the fair.
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Comments: 33

xlntwtch [2014-10-09 23:13:55 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations, Leonca. I like this very much.

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Leonca In reply to xlntwtch [2014-10-10 01:37:35 +0000 UTC]

Glad to hear it. Thanks.

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TheGalleryOfEve [2014-10-07 21:03:27 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!!
I’m very happy for you!!!

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Leonca In reply to TheGalleryOfEve [2014-10-08 03:32:45 +0000 UTC]

Aww, thank you.

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TheGalleryOfEve In reply to Leonca [2014-10-09 21:20:28 +0000 UTC]

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xVanyx [2014-10-05 19:21:48 +0000 UTC]

I do not understand the very last sentence, but exept for that it's a wonderfull short story ^.^

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Leonca In reply to xVanyx [2014-10-05 21:29:03 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. It's part of the surreality of this world.

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xVanyx In reply to Leonca [2014-10-05 22:07:50 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome  

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AgonizingSwordfish [2014-10-05 18:48:47 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations on the DD!

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Leonca In reply to AgonizingSwordfish [2014-10-05 19:01:18 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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AgonizingSwordfish In reply to Leonca [2014-10-05 21:30:26 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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TheWeeLad [2014-10-05 16:50:02 +0000 UTC]

This story sets up a fascinating look at an 'alien' culture, what with the way they consider death and mortality and the ceremonies that surround it. Top notch work my friend.

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Leonca In reply to TheWeeLad [2014-10-05 18:27:16 +0000 UTC]

Glad you liked it.

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LeonFoxwings [2014-10-05 15:31:57 +0000 UTC]

this is so awesome

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Leonca In reply to LeonFoxwings [2014-10-05 18:26:52 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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Laurenabees [2014-10-05 15:23:44 +0000 UTC]

Wha- it's beautiful, and a very lovely story, but I don't think I understand. ^^"

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Leonca In reply to Laurenabees [2014-10-05 18:29:21 +0000 UTC]

In this world, the soul of the recently dead can leave the body and chose to give a little goodbye blessing to one person before passing on.

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Laurenabees In reply to Leonca [2014-10-05 18:33:22 +0000 UTC]

Aaaah, I see. That's..I don't know what to say, even. Wonderful. uwu

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Leonca In reply to Laurenabees [2014-10-05 19:01:58 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.

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NamelessShe [2014-10-05 15:18:48 +0000 UTC]

Congrats od the DD! This is excellent!

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Leonca In reply to NamelessShe [2014-10-05 18:26:26 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. My first flash fiction feature too, which is cool. With the way attention spans are getting, that just might be the way to go these days.

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LeftUnfinished [2014-10-05 14:39:44 +0000 UTC]

I love this.

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Leonca In reply to LeftUnfinished [2014-10-05 18:24:34 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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Korwynze [2014-10-05 13:57:02 +0000 UTC]

katie seems like a spoiled child to me, she wouldnt have deserved to get the blessing!
its a very nice story ^^

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Leonca In reply to Korwynze [2014-10-05 18:24:21 +0000 UTC]

Glad you liked it.

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TheLadyYuki [2014-10-05 13:29:57 +0000 UTC]

This was a great read. Congrats on the DD!

And I am glad Katie did not get the blessing because she sounds like a little bitch.

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Leonca In reply to TheLadyYuki [2014-10-05 18:23:55 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.

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catluvr2 [2014-10-05 08:13:57 +0000 UTC]

That was cool. Congrats on the DD!

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Leonca In reply to catluvr2 [2014-10-05 18:22:57 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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SCFrankles [2014-08-13 21:01:51 +0000 UTC]

I love the imagery of the flies. And the straightforward way you present this strange world - because of course it isn't strange for the characters.

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Leonca In reply to SCFrankles [2014-08-13 23:57:43 +0000 UTC]

Glad you like it.

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MagicalJoey [2014-08-12 21:01:23 +0000 UTC]

I tend to stumble across things accidentally and then like them or hate them...but this I really liked.

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Leonca In reply to MagicalJoey [2014-08-13 03:38:21 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.

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