TowarzyszBroni [2015-04-20 17:59:35 +0000 UTC]
Great Read.
It really felt like you captured the essence of Asura in your writing. In fact, you threw me under suppressing fire with the amount of chaotic and emotional themes your scene delivers. You also made me realize that I need to start reading more, a lot more... Since I had to consult a dictionary at least twice reading your work, which is of course not your fault.
Likewise, setting aside my lack of English Literacy; I found this to be a great short story.
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kyonehilbert In reply to TowarzyszBroni [2015-04-21 04:30:48 +0000 UTC]
Thank you~! I'm really flattered. I tried captivating Asura's mind as a trigger to his behavior rather than having his behavior be necessarily a characteristic he has. I'm really glad the emotion got through in it; I was wondering if the chaotic scene would distract a reader from the less obvious hint at how he was feeling
thank you uwu
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