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KatieAmiot — Pigeon
Published: 2013-01-07 00:00:27 +0000 UTC; Views: 286; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 4
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ALL DONE
6-7 hours done completely with a single black pen.
I didn't think I could finish it. I was afraid I was going to get carpal tunnel...
But I'm extremely pleased c:
Not bad for my first time with pen and ink right?
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Comments: 4
Bonjour Katie,
For a first time with a new medium, this is a pretty good work! Getting a good contrast and mid-tones is hard with pen and ink but you it does not seem to bother you. I thought at first that you had drawn it from life, seeing how spontaneous the piece feels, but I would imagine that the pigeon was not going to stay still for 6 hours e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="
You have done a very good work on the paving : I like the concentric circles pattern and I think you made a pretty good job perspecive-wise on this, although the top rows seem a bit wobbly in places. There is a great sense of volume on these cobblestones and your work on the surface of the stones convey the feeling of something real and imperfect pretty well, and brings variety in such a repetitive element. Lastly, the fading of the lines on the periphery of the picture creates a great sense of intimity : this scene is a tiny detail, often overseen, in a bigger, wider world.
I cannot find anything wrong about the anatomy or posture of the pigeon, and its location on the edge the picture gives the impression that it's somehow intruding in your study of the paving, which adds spontaneity and a nice sense of uncertainty about the picture. All in all, this makes the composition work pretty well.
One thing that you may want to work on is the contrast between the pigeon and the paving. As such, the edges feel a bit too soft and I think that the bird could pop up just a bit more from its background. This does not need to be a very sharp contrast (as it would destroy the sense of uncertainty that I mentioned earlier) and a couple of highlights on its back and top of the head might do the trick and start an interesting conversation with the lighter cobblestones at the bottom right.
I would be interested to learn the format that you used for this drawing and hope that this critique will help you.
Keep up the good work!
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Thank you very much for your critique! I agree with you 100% about every point. However, I wasn't sure how you would recommend to add more contrast between the bird and the stones.
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No problem.
I think that the pigeon lacks a few highlights on its back and top of its head (as pigeons usually have a kind of sheen on the feathers of their necks and heads). As such, all the values on it are darks and midtones : it "blends" a bit too much in the paving sitting just behind, which is also mostly darks and midtones.
Solution : The paving at the very bottom right of the picture is lighter than the rest of the picture. Using this value (ie : pure white) for the highlights on the pigeon would not only help the pigeon pop out from its direct background but would also create some kind of balance/conversation with the lighter paving. Just a few dashes of white on the featers would help create a focus point on the pigeon, I think.
I hope it's a bit clearer (sorry, not an English as first language speaker
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Thank you so much for that! I will defiantly take your advice!
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