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Cyber-Cypher [2017-06-12 18:10:15 +0000 UTC]

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Greetings there from ProjectComment!

Good Points:

- Personally, my favorite part of the artwork is the beak of the lizard character. I like how beaks look. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/let… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="395" title=" (Lick)"/> I really like how you did them. Make the character look cool and slightly intimidating.

- I love her hairstyle and the braids. The color really fits well with the rest of the character's design. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=" (Smile)"/>

Improvements/Suggestions:

- The linework is a bit shaky and is way too thin. I suggest getting a better pen or at least try layering the ink.

- I feel that the lighting on the letters isn't really necessary and it kind of makes it hard to process what it reads. Also, the knees look too big. I suggest making it smaller or shading it to make the knees look visible.

Hope this helps! ^_^

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rainbow000pegasus [2017-06-26 02:01:50 +0000 UTC]

Hello! I'm from ProjectComment 's Weekly Commenting Project to bring a critique over. As this is not your character, I will not talk about the character design and stick on the colouring and drawing execution, using several descriptions of Vivian from the gallery linked in the description.

First of all, I'm going to guess you used markers or paint for this. It doesn't seem to be so consistently layered, probably due to how wet it is? I'll be honest and say I like that it seems to give a texture or style on some parts like the wings, legs and so, but then it seems to disturb the shading with light source. From the shading you intended to place I'll say it's a bit clashing? It seems to appear from top left and right corners. However the hair and horns say otherwise. For me I find it easier to have only one light source but people have their preference.

Next would be the colouring and line-art work. I notice, yes, it's layering when you go over it again, but then there are some white spots, creating and inconsistency in the bold colouring. Maybe you can use coloured pencils or coloured pens as a substitute for smaller surface area? Also it seems like whatever you use it for colouring goes on top of the linework, seeming to 'erase' them. My tip is to go over it again with a drawing pen. If you'd like to use a variant of lines I suppose you can make the line art for details with a thinner pen and the one in the overall general (shape of the dragoness and/or wings, etc.) with a bolder/thicker pen.

Lastly anatomy. Yay. Especially perspective. So firstly the anatomy of the members of the Nova world seems to be humanoid enough for me to use human anatomy reference. I notice her right arm seems to be wonky and bends around a lot. After the elbow is should be pretty much get thinner t the wrist instead of getting wavy. You can see an example of that here . In addition, since her left leg is in front it should appear larger than her right, which is behind, unless her right leg is larger than her left. It's mostly perspective thinking for that so I don't think I need to provide a reference.

I think that's all I have to say for now. I hope this comment helps!

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EduartBoudewijn [2017-06-09 05:02:32 +0000 UTC]

From ProjectComment  

It's always interesting to see one artist's take on a different artist's character and this is no exception. Although the details are all pretty much on point, the general proportions and feel of your art style makes Vivian look a bit more realistically proportioned, than Ivanks original art style, which is a bit more cartoony-focused with a larger head-body ratio. It definitely makes for a new look for the character. 

My first impression though is a bit of imbalance in the image; perhaps this is slightly due to some unfamiliarity with the anatomy of Vivian's feet, but the character feels like she's about to fall backwards to me, she's just leaning a bit too far back and with her feet so close together it makes for a very imbalanced feel, especially with the extra weight of her wings pulling her back, so if anything you'd expect her to lean forward a bit more than a regular human. Try flipping your image while sketching to prevent small mistakes like this that can have a big impact on the eventual feel of the drawing. 

The head also feels slightly off to me, looking at references of the character her snout is supposed to resemble more of a pointy beak, like a bird's pointing slightly downward. I feel like you tried to go for that in your drawing, but weren't quite sure about it, the way her face ended up gives a bit of an uncertain vibe to me (by all means correct me on this if I'm wrong, it's just the vibe I'm getting). Perhaps just tracing the references done by Ivanks can help to just practise these faces and being more familiar with their structure. Once you're more familiar with the structure of a face like this, it's also easier to give a stronger emotional vibe to the face. 

I also feel like the shading in this image could use some more work. In general your shading looks quite well, but in this image it's quite inconsistent in the way it conveys the light sources, making it look rather flat. For example the way the shadows work on her legs and feet doesn't work properly in my opinion with the way the shadows work on her wings and upper body. Try to keep a primary light source in mind even if there isn't one directly in your image and base your shadows upon that light source's direction to make your character's form feel more believable. 

I still like what you've done with this character and the way you portrayed it. I like how the tail starts from behind her and overlaps in the front, which gives a better feeling of form to the image. Keep up the good work!

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BigMac1212 [2017-05-31 03:10:30 +0000 UTC]

Love the colors.

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sonicinterface [2017-05-26 13:05:56 +0000 UTC]

Dang, now I need to come up with a character you can draw by next Wednesday.

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IvanksMW [2017-05-25 21:45:33 +0000 UTC]

Thanks a lot for the Gift and also lovely work on Vivian !!!

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