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Jade: A Star Wars Story fan script (2018) Genre: Scifi, Adventure, Horror. Total Runtime 3h 13min (Rated K-16 for strong violence and gore, adult themes.)
PREMISE: Emperor has been killed and Darth Vader struck down. Second Death Star has been destroyed. Empire is at the verge of collapse. As Empire forces try to maintain order after the defeat in Battle of Endor, Emperor Palpatine's CONTINGENCY plans are put into effect, to ensure that the Empire and its enemies did not outlive him should he perish. Imperial Inquisitor Mara Jade gets an visit from one of the Palpatine's sentinel droids, giving her an impossible task. A task to go to the unknown regions and DESTROY THE FORCE. Mara assembles the HAND OF THE EMPEROR and venture into the dangerous unexplored regions, only to discover more horrifying enemies, monstrous beings that invade galaxies and are entirely outside of the Force. Mara's quest turns into desperate struggle for survival and stopping the new foe from destroying her galaxy.
MAKING OF: Damn, this was maybe my hardest and biggest project yet. I had this idea while I was working on previous Star Wars story 1313, if that was the first R-rated Star Wars story, this would be the first horror story and super epic space adventure, like Star Trek meets Star Wars. Main character would be Mara Jade. I have to admit, I expected to see her in Force Awakens, then in The Last Jedi, but no, which I found strange, when she had large role in the legends. I was like, dammit, I'll make her canon. What would be the best way than sending her in the Unknown Regions and make her face the most horrifying creatures from another galaxy, machine hating masochist aliens, the Yuuzhan Vong. It makes sense when Mara had a large role in the Yuuzhan Vong war in legends.
Of coure, to make this work in the new canon, I had to change some things about Mara. Now that we know about the Inquisitors, it would make sense that Mara was one. She is still the Hand of the Emperor, but more like undercover agent, keeping an eye in one aspect of the Empire. And giving a hint that Palpatine could be her father, because that way it will be more crushing what happens in the end. This time Mara won't get Force message from Palpatine to kill Luke Skywalker, instead she will get a new message from the sentinel droids from Battlefront 2, and this time Palpatine asks her basically to kill the Force. It's like a twist for what we thought we knew, makes the final order immediately more complex and interesting, opening another can of worms. This mission will offer a in-universe explanation for the new canon.
Other Hands of the Emperor will be explored, because there are definitely other Hands that Jade doesn't know about. I was hoping that Snoke's origin would be explained around the time of the Last Jedi, so I could sneak him in here without disturbing the canon. But it didn't happen and I have to strike while the iron is hot, so this is my best guess for Snoke's origin, probably wrong. Disney will come and say it isn't so. I may have to make changes to this when I'll discover the canon explanation, if it's possible. But him being in this would bring thematic connection with the new trilogy, bridging together the original trilogy and the new trilogy. There is little of the Chiss and Thrawn, they would be explored more in the sequel: Jade: The Search for Thrawn xD.
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I must say that your choice of characters always speak to me, Mara is another rare colored (purple, this time) spot on this black and white universe. It's a shame she's got so meaningless a death by Mary Sue, should I be tinkering with SW universe, I would certainly change this part as well.
Maybe this could be also of interest to you... Are you familiar with Telos Holocron contents from Jedi vs Sith - The Essential Guide to the Force (2007), that sheds some light Palpatine's side that you would never suspect was there?
It's implied that he altered it inaccessible for both lightsiders and full-on darksiders, so only a beginner interested in the dark side could use it, making himself a new gatekeeper. He deliberately appears as in youth and addresses the viewer as an equal. Additions from him is surprisingly devoid of any agenda, skewed only by personal opinion, and, unlike the most of Sith Lords' shadows, he has no demands but use it as you and you only see fit, only for the benefit of yourself in other words. The dude sounds genuinely sentimental and nostalgic here.
I'm sure that he never seriously considered the possibility of a failure, but, guess, it was a kind of game for him. Palpatine indulging in a death fantasy about passing the torch, an ultimate piece of Sith info, to a random novice... The last thing you could expect from the Emperor.
After that, I started to see him as an actual human with his own will, not only a personification of power for power's sake.
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Thanks. No, I'm not familiar with the Telos Holocron, but I checked it out
in wookieepedia. Wisdom of generations of Sith Lords stored in a one holocron.
Yeah, nice concept. And Palpatine surely likes his games, which I do touch upon.
Disney doesn't care about Mara, so I have to keep her legacy alive. Yeah, Mara
is unique character, purple color and all that, and the close connection to the
Emperor. She's a great story tool to explore Palpatine's dark side, even sides
that Vader isn't privileged to know. I would choose Mara any day of the week.
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To me, an unlucky side effect of experiment by Darth Plagueis, Darth Vader / Anakin Skywalker is the most overrated character ever, a walking plot device, a tool to use for everyone, the Force's plaything all the way, and the worst of it all, faceless in the worst sense. Yeah, I get it, he was neccessary for the plot, but this sort of story could be handled better, as a personal horror of being unable to escape the fate, should he have an actual personality of course.
If you don't want to lose a woman by childbirth, you should not have children to begin with, both in literal and figurative sense.
Probably, only Darth Caedus aka Jacen Solo have managed to beat that, hitting a new low in character writing.
Luke is a much better attempt in creating a similar character, that one surely has quite a personality, he once gone as far as purposefully embraced the dark side in order to learn what's so great about it (and managed to get away with that, unlike his father). So unlike those pussy Jedi who were slinking away from it like a devil from incense. That only further emphasises the difference between them, he remained himself even in his downfall, and did abandon the dark side only because this what he really wanted, without regards to anyone or anything, especially the Force itself. Ironically ehough, that's an ultimate example of the dark side way of thinking that worth a respect from a Sith Lord.
The Last Jedi (2017) is a load a wack, Luke would've never drawn a lightsaber on a helpless person who did not commit anything yet. Sure, he could've been thinking about it, but not any farther.
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Yeah, I can see why people have problem with Luke drawing his laser
sword on Ben, and Padme dying from childbirth was little iffy, but
that's Star Wars, a mix bag of good, bad and the ugly.
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Guess if your wife that inspired by a typical erotic novel protagonist, complete with her homeworld resembling all their usual locations (India, Latin America, Middle East) at once, is a more complex character than you, you are Darth Vader. I will prefer Padme to survive instead of him.
There's some good, some bad and the ugly, and than there's The Last Jedi. Star Wars has its share of ugly writing for sure, but it's the first example of such a well-established character suddenly going OOC to such an extent. Even Darth Maul will tell it's a BS.
To continue the topic of unconventional Star Wars characters, technically, there was an another oddball besides Plagueis, Darth Vectivus, a mining company CEO turned Sith Lord, who did not ever harm an innocent, but he wasn't interested in politics and spent the whole life studiyng Sith lore, developing dark side techniques and simply having fun.
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I think this deserves a comment...
I love this combination of Legends and the new continuity. You've clearly done your research and my biggest issue with this script is that it's not an official one. I wish this movie was real. The new Star Wars films may be controversial these days (I personally love them), but I think if this was script was made into an actual movie fans would love it. I hate that this brilliantly written, well thought out story can't be canon. There is just so much that it could offer to the franchise. I really admire how you take these elements from Legends and insert them into the universe in a way that fits with the current continuity. This isn't even Legends attempting to replace the canon, it's the two working with each other instead of against each other to create something special. If this was a movie series or a TV show, I would watch the hell out of it. And it's just going to frustrate me that this will only ever be fan-made.
The story here does remind me of last year's Star Wars Battlefront II, which was referenced during the Battle of Endor scene. Both this script and the game have aΒ main female protagonist who is an elite Imperial, both begin with the events of Return of the Jedi, both have Imperial characters who are part of a special group, and both have plots that involve the Emperor's contingency plans... the main difference is that the protagonists in "Jade" stay Imperial. They don't defect to the Rebellion early on in the story. Star Wars Battlefront II honestly disappointed me with its campaign, because instead of sticking with the Imperial POV they went with the "switching sides" story that I feel has been done to death. It wasn't anything new. But here, the characters stay loyal to the Empire and the story is so much more interesting. The characters are still likable and sympathetic, but also flawed. You also make the Empire the underdogs. The Emperor is still pure evil, like he should be, but the other characters serving the Empire are more morally complex and gray. This is a story of anti-heroes and anti-villains.
All the references made this story feel like it belonged in the connected universe that Star Wars is now. And this also does a great job at setting up other potential stories that I would love to see. Snoke's backstory was interesting and does introduce a fascinating concept... Force-users from other galaxies. By not just limiting the world to one galaxy, a lot of doors open up. The Yuuzhan Vong bring a new threat that could be explored more. The script confirms Knights of the Old Republic as well. And Mara Jade herself is a character who I would like to see more adventures from in this new canon... especially if she meets Skywalker like Palpatine foresaw.
Overall, this was pretty damn good. The idea to set up a "Star Trek" exploration story in the Star Wars universe with Star Wars characters worked out very well. I hope you do continue this with "The Search for Thrawn" because I would love to see more from these characters and this universe. I suppose an appropriate name for this is the "JT-Canon." This probably won't get the attention it deserves, but I'm glad I came across it. Fantastic job, really.
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Thanks, I'm overwhelmed
Hey, I also like the new Star Wars, even TLJ, but Solo didn't quite hit the mark for me.
Disney tries to incorporate the old canon, but it seems to be just background stuff, or
eastern eggs, not like part of the story. I like the new stuff, but I don't like them throwing
everything from the old canon away, there are things I like, like Mara Jade, so this is my
way to preserve her and others, keep their flame alive so to speak. That's why I like to
write these as canon as possible, shadow canon, old canon meets new canon, to prove that
they can coexist.
Yeah, it's not a coincident that this reminds you of Battlefront 2, I were little bit disappointed
by the plot. I thought we would be fighting with the Empire all the way through, but nope.
THIS should have been Battlefront 2 and Mara should have been the protagonist, that's how
I would've made it. They stay loyal to the Empire, just make the Emperor and the Yuuzhan
Vong more evil than the Empire, the lesser evil, the underdog. And explore the unknown
and expand on the Force lore. Not the same old shit we've seen thousand times.
I was hoping to get little more info about Snoke from TLJ or the expanded EU, but
I was surprised that there wasn't much of anything, so I went forward with this
backstory, but it's made so it can be retconned in the sequels if necessary xD
Actually, what Palpatine foresaw was the old canon, and sending Mara to the Unknown Regions
to die was his way to prevent her from meeting Luke and turning to the light side. I would
explore that more in the sequel. And the sequel will be even more epic and mind blowing,
you'll learn more about the Chiss, more about the Yuuzhan Vong, more about Mara, more
about the Unknown Regions and why its there, revelations after revelations. BUT I need
Disney or Zahn to tell me where did Thrawn and Ezra end up, it's very essential when
it's about Search for Thrawn xD It would be very anticlimatic if we don't find him
I have to wait and see, maybe I'll find a workaround.
I did little of setting up in the Obi-Wan: A Star Wars Story, again mixing new and old canon.
There's also 1313: A Star Wars Story, Boba Fett's story, another mix of old and new, the
first R-rated Star Wars story. Yeah, I know, shameless plug in xD
But yeah, follow me, maybe you'll get Jade and the Search for Thrawn some day.
And thanks for your positive comment, these really help me keep on going.
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I finished reading it and this was . . . wow.Β
I feel as excited as when I was five years old and I watched Star Wars for the first time with my grandfather. This made me HAPPY. Like really.Β
So where to start. For one thing, this felt like it owed a lot to Star Trek. The spirit of exploration, jumping into the unknown with no idea what you'll find, strange cultures and new civilizations. Even the moment when we discover the Vong Ships felt like the first encounter with the borg. It was a very R rated kind of Star Trek, but the feel was there.Β
And Palpatine, his portrayal in this is top ten. I mean, his goal is silly on the surface, destroy the empire and destroy the galaxy by provoking the Vong like kicking a hornet's nest. Yet, it feels right for the kind of man he is. The guy is like Heath Ledger's Joker. Or a dark version of Rick from Rick and morty. There's this incredible Nihilism that gets couples with a narcissism that's way too much like real life people I know. his interactions with Mara Jade humanize him in the worst way possible; in the sense that Joseph Mengele, Cecil Rhodes and Jack the Ripper were all real humans with human motivations.Β
He's just . . . he's one bad fucking apple.Β
Snokes was a great counterpoint.Β While we don't know a fuck of a lot about him, we see a great deal of character. Like when we saw yoda, we don't know the details but there's a ton of character and personality there. he's a manipulator on par with the likes of Iago in Othello. Compared to Palps he's way more low key, but he's also a lot more dangerous in some ways given that he's much easier to trust and there's no guarantee his intentions aren't as lethal.Β
Oh and the planet being a fucking force projection? That's some epic shit right there. With a good budget, the Force should be able to do some crazy shit. Like the Kind of shit you could never get away with even in a Warhammer story. That's just GRAND.Β
And the Chiss are great. They really are a fully fleshed out and explored culture in this. you root for them the whole way. And I love the bit about Palps lying where Thrawn came from.
I know a lot of people shit on the Last Jedi for Various reasons, but (and this is purely subjective) I thought it was very corporate. It felt like Mel Brooks put "the search for more money."Β
This feels real, full of joy. By someone with passion.Β
Oh and to balance out the Star Trek thing from earlier,Β I loved the callbacks to the classic star wars movies and the new trilogy.Β Β
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Well, I'm happy you finished it
Yeah, Star Wars and Star Trek don't need to be enemies. It's like regular Star Trek episode, if it took place
in Star Wars and all the characters are Star Wars. 
galaxy, you could do a TV-show just around that, very expensive and short seasons but still xDΒ
I loved the idea of this military super power Empire going into the unknown and finding out that they
aren't so super, getting their asses kicked by the Yuuzhan Vong, that there's worse things than
the Rebels out there. Suddenly they are the underdogs and need to adapt to survive.
xD It's fun to write to Palpatine. I wrote all his lines first and then speak them in Emperor's voice, so
I knew I got them right. Basically he gets more dangerous after his death, he has nothing to lose
and he's going to take everyone with him, the Force, the galaxy, EVERYBODY, like disgruntlet manbaby xD
God, I love how evil Emperor is. And knowing how Sith believe in absolutes made some of his actions make sense.Β
Yeah, Snoke is a total mystery. But I really believe that he's from another galaxy, because where the hell
did these Ren guys come from all of a sudden. Did they live so low key that Jedi and Sith didn't notice them. In 1000
generations nobody mentions them, unless they are from another galaxy. That would expand the Force in so many
ways, but there is also a fat chance that Snoke is lying and telling what Mara and her gang needs to hear.
Yeah, I went epic as fuck with the Force projection planet. Like Darth Vader said "The ability to destroy a planet
is insignificant next to the power of the Force", so let's see that shit, let's see the FULL POWER of the Force.
Let's shoot planets and make planets with the Force, that's some crazy shit right there xD. And I know
Force planet is possible because Kylo Ren lift up that gold dice projection at the end of the Last Jedi, that
would mean it had mass, ergo you can make Force planets
Chiss are great, I would explore them more in a sequel. They actually have the Force, but they know it
by a different name, I think it was the "Third Eye". And only little Chiss girls possessed it. Yeah, and
people believing Thrawn being a Pantorian is actually from the Thrawn book, where people keep
mistakenly to think Thrawn being a Pantorian and he let them think so. Wouldn't it be funny that
the lie reaches Pantora and even they would believe Thrawn being a Pantorian. xD
I actually liked The Last Jedi, but the porgs were very corporate, least Ewoks did something xD.
Fun fact: Empire Strikes Back was hated back in the time, critics and people didn't like it, but
in time it became the best one. People will come around. I really just don't get the hate.Β
Thanks for liking. Yeah, there's callbacks everything Star Wars related. Every planet and place
shown in the story exist in the Star Wars galaxy, all based in factual information and canceled
Clone Wars episodes, hey, Clone Wars are coming back, wait, in Disney's streaming service?! WTF?!
xD Where was I, oh, yes, thanks for liking it
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I'm about 87 pages in and this story is a masterpiece.Β
this is the story that the grownups want for star wars, not the one that the corporate suits say we want.Β
Among other things, Palpatine is fucking creepy. He was built to be that way, but given how he's supposedly mara's father, the way he treats her shockingly shows a man who's totally incapable of love. He's never loved. If he wanted you to think otherwise, he could quote a sonnet, but he doesn't have that capacity inside of him.Β
The gang who travels with Mara are just fantastic, this is like the heist movie for women my wife has been waiting for. She loves this story story too by the way. Lima Scud is both hilarious and tragic. She's a perfect example of fantastic racism done right, and I kind of feel bad because it doesn't feel like the dark side is for her. She's truly the odd man out so far, and I love that she's found a force teacher proper.Β
Maris Brood is phenomnal, we get to see her relationship with her old master as something more sexual, and she's just so much more than she was in the game.Β
Juno is a known quantity to me but she's grown from what we saw in the Force unleashed games,Β
Overall this is just a masterclass of star wars writing.Β
LimaΒ
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Thanks!
But she's not anywhere, not even in the new EU. She's a huge part of the old EU, but
still, she's nowhere to been seen. So I was fuck it, I'll put her back in canon, and hell,
I'll make her to be the reason behind the new canon, that will show them! xD
Well, I tease Palpatine to be Mara's father, I just throwing it out there, just playing around with
the idea. He's least his foster father, least Mara sees him as one. That will make the one thing
that happens in the end more tragic and more heart breaking and evil. Whenever Mara and
Palpatine in one form or another interact, that's like drama gold, which I liked in the old EU,
you get to see other side of Palpatine, more of the Sidious side, and learn more about the Sith
and the Force.
Oh gosh, your wife even likes this, that's great to get woman feedback, most of the main
characters are women after all. They are Ocean's four and a man xD Everyone gets to do
something in the impossible mission to destroy the Force. Yeah, Cadet Scud is there to
bring some levity to all the death and destruction, she's a blast when she meets that
one race and finds inconvenient truths about the Pantorans and Grand Admiral Thrawn xD
She is that one odd ball in the middle of the Force, Mara and PROXY try to teach her
the "right" side of the Force
Yeah, Brood has a major part in the story. Mara and Brood start as almost hostiles, but
they learn to respect each other as allies. Love is forbidden for the Jedi, so that's why
Shaak Ti and Maris didn't show it in the game xD It will be crucial in the end battle.
Shaak Ti is the light side master in the story and Sidious is the dark side master.
Shaak TI is a real "Force ghost" while Sidious is a fake technological monstrosity.Β
Juno has grown into tough as nails military officer and slightly alien racist xD But
she just shows tough love to Lima. She's like the voice of reason, she's the
"Spock" of Mara, while Brood is "Leonard McCoy" xD
Yeah, it's a HUGE adventure and that's just the tip of the iceberg, there's
still lots of twists and turns coming at your way.
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