Comments: 32
alternative-alo [2010-08-01 07:17:34 +0000 UTC]
This is probably the most potent of your poems I've read thus far. It has the most emotion and substance. The rhymes are pretty good, and the rhythm is better than others.
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nickbeasts365 [2010-07-31 06:36:36 +0000 UTC]
good stuff right thee
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Staring-at-the-moon [2010-06-15 04:46:19 +0000 UTC]
O_o how on earth do you manage to write while drunk...
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janj0hn In reply to Conman845 [2010-06-14 08:14:46 +0000 UTC]
thank you..
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Tristan416 [2010-06-14 07:44:49 +0000 UTC]
This is really good
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DiscoMelon [2010-06-14 07:38:26 +0000 UTC]
Excellent piece, simple rhyme scheme, and a heartfelt meaning.
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AitamiIkimo [2010-06-14 07:14:51 +0000 UTC]
oh, the influence of alcohol.
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Altheavlive [2010-06-11 14:58:02 +0000 UTC]
love it really good and honest
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HolyFishBucks [2010-06-11 13:19:05 +0000 UTC]
"the beer's the main course and it's the dessert": a very good line, it should be quoted some day!
A sad, sad story indeed but it paints a good picture in the mind. Very descriptive as well, helps add to the "story-telling" atmosphere of the poem.
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janj0hn In reply to HolyFishBucks [2010-06-11 13:22:13 +0000 UTC]
thank you..
that line just came to my mind..
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DeagonRaven [2010-06-11 13:13:41 +0000 UTC]
well you do find great inspiration in your drunk state of mind... this is a very good piece... i really like this one...
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Ackanoth-Krartason [2010-06-10 08:56:51 +0000 UTC]
this is a real lost piece. it seems to give a feeling of saddened memory of lose. It wakes up memories both good and bad.
Good piece.
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poet7 [2010-06-10 06:33:42 +0000 UTC]
completely raw emotion..i think we've all been there
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danniiegirl [2010-06-09 13:14:40 +0000 UTC]
i love this, it was just raw emotion
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janj0hn In reply to danniiegirl [2010-06-09 13:17:00 +0000 UTC]
thanks sooooo much!!
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danniiegirl In reply to janj0hn [2010-06-09 13:19:31 +0000 UTC]
no probs i love this piece
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ThePurpleTempest [2010-06-09 12:58:26 +0000 UTC]
Its good, but I think it would read better if you added some puncuation ^^
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003665 [2010-06-09 12:07:07 +0000 UTC]
wonderful!! my types of poems!
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janj0hn [2010-06-09 11:39:35 +0000 UTC]
Hidden by Owner
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janj0hn In reply to janj0hn [2010-06-09 12:10:53 +0000 UTC]
found a two-letter error with this one..
but now it's edited..]
thanks sis!!
i ♥ it too!
hahah!!
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zhaxii [2010-06-09 11:06:07 +0000 UTC]
i ♥ it bro!
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zhaxii [2010-06-09 11:05:29 +0000 UTC]
weew! kewL. but kinsa man jud na ang imo gmean??
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