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Published: 2019-04-20 19:54:55 +0000 UTC; Views: 772; Favourites: 34; Downloads: 2
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My entry for the N-A-D-Z-I-E-J-A Contest byFinally it's done. I tried my best with this one. I hope I didnt make any mistake with the character design ;_;
And I hope you like it
More about the contest >>> fav.me/dd2qc0l
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Good day!
I'm another commenter from ProjectComment and I am here to give you some constructive feedback on your work!
Glad to have checked out the contest, otherwise I'd have focused about the design of the character, instead I want to talk about his place in the scenery and some minor tweaks in style. Also congrats for winning 3rd prize!
While I really like the complexity of the level on which you drew the background/ sky (especially how soft and chunky the clouds look), I find the transition from the first and second panel somewhat confusing. The 'camera' movement first showing the character in 3/4 view facing forward while the background is showing the grasslands and the sky above. Then in the second panel, the camera moves in his back, depicting his back and angling upward, the hood is no longer is covering his head presumably because of the wind and for some reason we see in the sky. I would have changed the pose in the first panel to a 'looking up in the sky' instead of him just staring forward, this would have suggested that there is something interesting happening where he is looking, giving the sudden and very dramatic change of view in the second panel more purpose.
Additionally, the jacked could have been a nice opportunity to establish some contrast within the figure. What about the jacket being so big that it has trouble staying on his small skeleton shoulders, waving more in the wind and adding some 'flesh' to his body by making it especially chunky. A bit like sans; a narrow skeleton has a big round jacket making him appear very fleshed out. And that's the last thing I can tell you about that game as I have never played it ^v^ I know it is on sale on steam right now, so maybe I'll finally get to play it :3
I hope this feedback was helpful to you!
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hello, sorry for the late reply!
Thank you for choosing my piece and thank you for the critics and compliments!
I did have trouble of choosing the pose for each scene. Because it looks like it has a few more seconds before the next scene. Considering the rules of the contest where the character, Shiro, is an emotionless being, I tried my best to keep his emotions even though he saw the supposed "breathtaking sky" LOL XD
Well, I do agree that Sans is one fat skeleton. But Im ashamed to say that I wanted to create a different kind of Sans for my fanarts. I know this is such a poor excuse, but my drawing style has always been influenced by anime since I started my hobby of drawing.
Dont worry. I appreciate any kind of criticism and I will always try to improve!
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No problem about late replies, I'm used to them and have trouble retorting as well :3
You're welcome for the critique! And I wish you good luck with your upcoming artworks!
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Hello there~ I’m from ‘s weekly comment project!
First thing first… I have to say that I do like the sky background a lot, especially for the second panel. It is not fully gradient, and edges does have shape similar to clouds… This looks really good and create a little of whirling feeling when looking at it… which is pretty cool = v =
Transition from the first to second panel is also nicely done. Character starts from left side in the first panel, and then move to the middle in the second panel… But with the trail of glowing stars(?) is a good way to guide our eyes, and that’s great
Now time for the nitpicking… I’m not really familiar with Undertale characters, but I do understand that this guy is a skeleton. So I find the way eye is drawn here a little strange… From what I see here, iris color seems to be white and sclera seems to be black… but then there seems to be another additional part at the corner of the eye that’s white again?… Not sure if I’m seeing this wrong, but there seems to be some sort of eyelids and white eyelashes as well… so it does felt a little strange… haha…
The arm also seems to be super skinny… but that’s probably because he is skeleton, so that’s ok = v =
Anyhow~ Keep up the good work~
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Thank you so much for your compliments and critics <3
I'm glad you like the background because that's what I loved too!
For the eyes, I understand what you meant because most people also found my drawings of skeleton to be quite more "humane". The reason is because I had this hobby of drawing anime characters in the past. So I still found it hard to distinguish the style for anime and other things. The white in the corner you see is actually a highlight of his eyes touching the light from the background. I wanted to remove it before, but I thought it might give a good touch but I realized it was a bit too bright XD
Anyways, thank you for your time observing my drawing. I really appreciate it and keep your critics in mind for my future works
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Huhu~ I see, I see... There is certainly anime influence in your style = v =
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yeshh :>
I like binge-watching anime in the past. But now, I dont feel like watching anything.
I left watching anime since I played games like Undertale and more.
But it seems like they managed to leave a mark on me :/ (though I dont feel it is a bad thing since I can draw humanoid because of it XD)
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Gasp!!Really cool art !I see how many details you must make,and you make this perfect!!
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th-thank you!!!
Drawing the sky is my favorite. But ofc still need more practice u.u
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Very welcome!
YuP!I love too,but I still practice heheXDD
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Aww, so pretty owo
Yup, I think he would catch some "emotions" on this view ^^
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thanks chu~ >.<
I hope so for him @@
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