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kityboo [2010-12-05 05:58:58 +0000 UTC]
Make it that Zim was acutally in love with Dib from the begining thats why he hasnt taken over earth 8D
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IrkenFenrir In reply to kityboo [2010-12-05 06:02:43 +0000 UTC]
That would be funny. I dont know if it will become a Zadr though. Mabey, mabey not. Who knows
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IrkenFenrir In reply to kityboo [2010-12-05 06:07:57 +0000 UTC]
Well, my bed time is at least midnight, so I sadly must go. Talk to you tomorrow?
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kityboo In reply to IrkenFenrir [2010-12-05 06:08:58 +0000 UTC]
Awe really you have to go ~she pouted~ and yes we shall if im on i shall talk to you wait! do you have a cell phone?
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kityboo In reply to IrkenFenrir [2010-12-05 06:11:06 +0000 UTC]
1-808-557-4388 so we can talk outside of the internet ~she winked~
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IrkenFenrir In reply to kityboo [2010-12-05 06:12:21 +0000 UTC]
Can I text that number?
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kityboo In reply to IrkenFenrir [2010-12-05 06:18:44 +0000 UTC]
Yes you may 83
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IrkenFenrir In reply to kityboo [2010-12-05 06:20:28 +0000 UTC]
alrighty, well I will text you so you have my number, then I am going to bed. I stayed up way to late as it is. Nighty night!
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sailorcelestial [2010-11-15 07:36:58 +0000 UTC]
I think it's cute~ Ooh! And we get to decide what's next!? AWESOME!!! That's the best, the readers decide the next part! *Laughs*
So, what's this story supposed to be about? Just a random story where we decide what happens next? 'Cause that sounds like so much fun! *^v^* Oh, and if you want some advice: Writing in script-format is okay, just put an extra space between each speaker. Like...
Zim: I will destroy you!
Dib: Yeah, right!
You see? That's easier to read. Also, usually people encase the actions in *s. Like this...
Dib: Whatever your evil plan is, I'm going to stop it! *He points his finger at Zim*
You might want to put a summary at the top, explaining what kind of story this is. (I've found that it's annoying to read Fan-Fics on DA because they don't have the handy-dandy summaries like www.fanfiction.net does. So, since you can see the first part of the fic, you should write the summary there where people can see it!)
Remember to add a couple of extra spaces (paragraph breaks, actually) between scene changes, and also, the Author's Comments that you have at the end of the fic, put them in the comments at the bottom. That'll help organize things better. It makes it easier to read.
OH! And one more thing, you have pretty good grammar, but just don't forget to capitalize things. I notice sometimes you forget, so make sure to read through it again to make sure you didn't miss stuff.
Okay! Now for what should happen next...THEY SHOULD GO ON A FIELD-TRIP!!! Like, an actual one, to a...CORNFIELD!!! *Laughs* Yeah, they could have a field-trip to a farm for education and stuff! *^v^*
(P.S.! You wrote "IV" in the title. Did you mean to write "IZ"? If not, then what does "IV" mean?)
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IrkenFenrir In reply to sailorcelestial [2010-11-17 03:58:16 +0000 UTC]
Hey, if you want me to make another, you should send me a message with a due date, that way I cannot procrastinate it into a whole new level of procrastination.
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sailorcelestial In reply to IrkenFenrir [2010-11-21 04:02:08 +0000 UTC]
Aw, but I'm LAZY!!! *Pouts* But I don't know how long it would take for you...so...maybe about...sheesh, I dunno! How long would it normally take you?
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IrkenFenrir In reply to sailorcelestial [2010-11-21 06:07:40 +0000 UTC]
That one took me like 5 minutes, but thats because it had no real plot, character development, action, or, well, anything really. So it was easy. Now, for an entire story, it would take me much longer, but if I do not get a due date, I will never get it done. I am weird that way. I suppose if I actually worked on it every now and then, I could have it done withing a few days to a week, just give me a date and I will work to get that date on time. Oh,and I am not nearly arrogant enough to think that I would do something perfect. If you always get only positive feedback, how will you ever get any better? You do not learn anything from winning, only in losing do you learn from your mistakes and get better.
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sailorcelestial In reply to IrkenFenrir [2010-11-22 04:10:48 +0000 UTC]
Maybe you should work on it piece by piece? Like, after you write the part where they go to a farm, you can ask people what should happen at the farm and so on? That shouldn't take very long, and it'll be entertaining to the readers! *^v^* I'd ask for about a week for something like that.
(Oh! And you can fix the title of your fic. Just use the "Edit Deviation" button.)
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IrkenFenrir In reply to sailorcelestial [2010-11-22 04:15:04 +0000 UTC]
oh, and I just changed the title, so, yeah, I did it. That was rather anticlimactic. I thought that it would be hard, but no, it took me like a whole 5 seconds
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sailorcelestial In reply to IrkenFenrir [2010-11-22 04:36:14 +0000 UTC]
*Laughs* I know, that's what I thought when I first used it, too!
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IrkenFenrir In reply to sailorcelestial [2010-11-22 04:12:20 +0000 UTC]
sure sure, I will change it, sorry, I forgot about that, I meant to change it, just forgot
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IrkenFenrir In reply to sailorcelestial [2010-11-16 03:48:42 +0000 UTC]
Wow, sorry this took me a whole 20 hours to respond to, very busy busy busy, thanks for the feedback. Now, where do I start responding to this comment? This story can be about anything, as long as it makes sense, so yes. You, the reader, gets to decide what I write about happening next. As the first person to respond, I will definitly try to write about a fieldtrip to a farm. Thank you for all the ideas, such as the spacing, asterick placement(*) and capatilization. ALso I will work on a summary for each chapter. Finally, yes, I meant to put IZ not IV. I always get v and z mixed up when I type. Also, I always have trouble with capatilization when I type, I always hit the shift key, buy I always let go to fast. Thank you for your feed back, it really means alot to me.
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sailorcelestial In reply to IrkenFenrir [2010-11-21 04:00:56 +0000 UTC]
Sure, no problem! It's really nice when someone takes criticism well~! You have no idea how many scary artists there are out there who'll just cry or snap at you if you say something SLIGHTLY negative about their work! *Laughs*
Anyways, you could use the CAPS LOCK key on the left, but that could take some getting used to if you're used to using the shift. You also have to press it again to get lowercase, but it's very useful WHEN TALKING ALL IN CAPS LIKE THIS! *Laughs*
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