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Published: 2017-09-07 03:00:16 +0000 UTC; Views: 1183; Favourites: 28; Downloads: 0
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Man, this was kinda tough, and why? CAUSE SNOW IS HARD DAMMIT It just looks easy until you try and realize it doesn't look right...Anyway, I really wanted to try both a written and comic form for my Warriors fanfic, "A Light in the Darkness." The written form (the easier one) starts here: Warriors: A Light in the Darkness CHAPTER 1
This is the start of the comic form which I may or may not continue. I like the outcome so far, but these backgrounds are killing me
I definitely want some feedback on this, on quality, story, impact etc. so please feel free to comment!Characters featured are OCs of mine based off the book series "Warriors" by Erin Hunter. 2nd panel: Nightfrost, 3rd panel: Goldfire and Bluelight
Hope everyone likes so far, and as always, thanks for stopping by!
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Story Synopsis: A Light in The Darkness (Warriors Fanfic) SYNOPSIS
Other art related to story:
Warriors (c) Erin Hunter
Art and characters (c) ME
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Comments: 15
I mean, I love the art and all, but I think it's kind of weird that the cure black cat has no mouth. The rest of them is great, but it's the mouth thing that bothers me. Maybe make a small mouth as there talking. A small circle with a few teeth and a tounge for the mouth.
Other than the mouth, I love it. The eyes are amazing, along with the ears, tail, and muzzle. That includes nose.
Ehh, the tears are a little but upsetting. Maybe make them a light blue. It will make them look better instead of having them a pure white.
((sorry if the critique is bad. My first time making one. lol.))
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Well, I see your point. I tried putting a mouth on her several times, but every option ruined her expression so I went for no mouth instead lol. Glad you like the eyes
As for the tears, real tears are clear in color, so I guess I could have made them a much lighter shade of her fur color.
Thanks for the critique though!
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Your welcome! Yea, your right. Tears are clear. Just kind of forgot! XD. For the eyes, yea, I love them! I even want to steal the disign of the eyes, but I won't! I like my disign. For the mouth, just work with it on another picture of her. It could really help if you just pratice!
(I don't know how I gave this good of a critique when I can bearly draw at all! XD))
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Thanks 
Just a word of advice though...for future critiques, try to be a little more general and not use terms like "this bothered me" and "this was upsetting" cause artists might take that the wrong way. Personally, I understand what you were trying to say but be careful about the execution next time. Hope this makes sense. Thanks again!
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Your welcome!
Thanks for the advice!
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Wow, these expressions are so powerful! Especially in the second panel ;o;
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I think you nailed the expressions! And I think the story so far, is really good.
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Thanks!! 
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