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TheWildSmile [2014-02-06 18:26:26 +0000 UTC]
It's well written. As being an ATLA and LOK fan, I love this c: Waiting for more.
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Ikuzram021 In reply to TheWildSmile [2014-02-08 14:40:53 +0000 UTC]
May I ask y u liked it? To further improve myself?
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TheWildSmile In reply to Ikuzram021 [2014-02-12 16:25:31 +0000 UTC]
Sure
The plot is pretty great, but mostly I liked how you described the atmosphere: the first part that went mostly about Air Nomads, when Rin woke up and went to the garden, when she was battling the guy in front of Fire Lord Azulon and etc. You really gave the story a good start!
Guess that's all for now. I'd be happy to comment whenever you like c:
Good luck
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Ikuzram021 In reply to TheWildSmile [2014-02-12 22:37:00 +0000 UTC]
Wow thanks! I try my best to put detail, I try to imagine first how it would look, I treat it like a movie, n sometimes I even act it out to see if it makes sense XD lol but thanks I sure will love your advice
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FlyTheFish [2014-02-06 17:41:37 +0000 UTC]
Is there more somewhere?
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FlyTheFish In reply to Ikuzram021 [2014-02-07 14:48:21 +0000 UTC]
Yeah! I'll definitely read it!
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Ikuzram021 In reply to FlyTheFish [2014-02-07 21:33:24 +0000 UTC]
Thanks :3 may I ask y it seemed so intriguing to u?
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FlyTheFish In reply to Ikuzram021 [2014-02-09 18:26:48 +0000 UTC]
My story also deals in fire and betrayal. And also things just fascinate me for no particular reason.
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LuxrayWolf [2014-02-06 01:33:16 +0000 UTC]
Yis .w.
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