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hazzy-dreams — Came To Be
Published: 2012-06-04 15:24:32 +0000 UTC; Views: 103; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 1
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Description The heavens screamed and cried 
As your wings of golden love broke 
Nothing could have saved them
Not even the white doves 
That were forever in your presence 

And so that night
The god of thunder
Came to be

[you were my guardian angel in my darkest days]


From your eyes of the deepest blue
Ruby red tears flowed
Your heart was being ripped apart
Surrounded  by bitter sweet blood
Not even the soul of love 
Could have healed you

And so that night 
The river of a  broken heart
Came to be

[You were the essence of my salvation]

Your honey coated voice 
Filled with the sound of a torn soul
Sang a song 
Full of heartache and betrayal
The melody of your voice
Brought me to my knees 
For a billion days and nights
That followed i could not rise

And so that night
The man who couldn't be moved 
Came to be

[You were the reason for my being for my days and for my nights]


Your soul had turned to black 
Ashes upon ashes was all that remained
I felt the wrath of its darkness 
Stroking my life away 

And so that night 
Darkness came to be 

[You were the oxygen of my soul]

I killed you the night I betrayed you
And so it came to be the night i lost my life
The night i lost you forever 
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Comments: 11

MeineSehnsucht [2012-06-05 22:01:30 +0000 UTC]

It's an interesting poem with some pretty poignant or striking images/lines in it, though the poem could be a little less 'obvious', if that is the word. Yes, there is room for interpretation, but there could have been more room though. I don't want to sound like a bitch, by the way. I think you have got potential. Keep writing.

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hazzy-dreams In reply to MeineSehnsucht [2012-08-24 18:19:38 +0000 UTC]

Hey thank you so much for your comment! i really appreciate it!

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MeineSehnsucht In reply to hazzy-dreams [2012-08-25 12:29:40 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome. Glad to hear you appreciate it so much.

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GUDRUN355 [2012-06-04 16:20:55 +0000 UTC]

I can feel the deep emotions as I read this. Very good poetry.

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hazzy-dreams In reply to GUDRUN355 [2012-06-04 17:21:04 +0000 UTC]

Wow thank you so much

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GUDRUN355 In reply to hazzy-dreams [2012-06-04 17:29:24 +0000 UTC]

Not a problem.

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hazzy-dreams In reply to GUDRUN355 [2012-06-04 17:29:53 +0000 UTC]

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GUDRUN355 In reply to hazzy-dreams [2012-06-04 17:31:35 +0000 UTC]

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Steel-Razors [2012-06-04 16:18:32 +0000 UTC]

Ok, that's deep.
I wish I could write like this.

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hazzy-dreams In reply to Steel-Razors [2012-06-04 17:20:11 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much!!!

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Steel-Razors In reply to hazzy-dreams [2012-06-06 13:51:57 +0000 UTC]

You are always welcome. =]

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