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Published: 2016-01-22 18:34:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 144; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 0
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Description
Name: Brokenspirit
{Broken}- His mother kept hearing stories of noble cats such as firestar and all brokenstar being one of them and since he matched his fur describtion she named him 'broken'
{Spirit}- Ever since he was born he was always full of spirit , if he wants something he will do everything to get it. reason two - the way his mother felt after his father's death
Clan: fernclan
Rank: medicine cat
Age: 29 moons
Gender: male
Pelt Colour: a mix of somali cat , abyssinian cat , maine coon , burmese cat , bengal cat , ragdoll and ocicat , hes a dark brown tabby
Eye Colour: icy blue eyes
Abilities
(1-10 5 being average)
Strength: 5
Defence: 5
Speed: 8
Jumping: 6
Swimming: 7
Hunting: 6
Healing: 10
Intelligence: 9
History
Brokenkit was born to Appletree and lionpelt , his father was from another clan , at first when his mother and father meet at the border...he was the result
after that Appletree and lionelt had try to gotten closer from first being enemies to friends they kept the whole..accident story to them selves.
knowing telling the others would be..not recommended probably making the two clans fight more then usual.
one day the was a battle of lionpelt's clan against another clan other than cloudclan who didnt took a part in the battle
Lionpelt died , he was killed in the battle , even though brokenkit didnt knew him much tho they met few times and so he was sad for his mother.
after moons brokenkit had became an apprentice due to his father's death he became more hostile mean and cold
and acted that way most apprentices which is why he never had much friends he didnt knew acting that way was bad.
mostly he would spend his time alone probably walking around the borders , not really bothering if other cats had saw him.
and so the leader one day made him a medicine cat apprentice hoping it would help more..which it did kinda
at start he didnt liked the idea , the battle had satisfied him more then healing other.
he was paired up with the medicine cat and learn the herbs much more easier with series of how to use them.
he was nicer but still kept his old cold attitude to everycat at the age of 20 his mentor got killed by a patrol when looking for herbs later that day he got the name spirit into it
so now he decided to move on as well to look for a mate later on the twolegs arrived Brokenspirit was angry when the two legs , believing that they should claw their eyes out, hateful towards them due to his comrades that they had caused the death of although he was hoping that the new home would be atleast ok to live at.
after a long time of travels him and his clan had found a swamp. ideal home . they stayed there and started a new life , Brokenspirit liked his new home and was ready
to help others.
((more will be added after some roleplay ... )
About
Personality
+ 3 paitent - tries his best to stay patient mostly for the sick cats cant say that hes patient to normal cats or cats from the other clans , but he will try
honest - he hates liers with all of his heart he would always say the truth , even risking getting into trouble , even tho he would find a way to avoid it
protective - usually just protective over his mate and apprentice , he doesnt like cats going around on hate on them he would always put an eye if theyr talking with someone
> 3 Neutral
cold - cold nature he has till he became an aprentice . he would get softer to his apprentice and mate , kits as well if he would have any
calm - stays always that way unless somehow manage to anger him , then probably agreeing to everything he says would be a good way to calm him down
quiet - hes 24/7 mute , he doesnt really like talking or saying something twice will get him a bit angry.
- 3 Bad
hot temper - when you do manage to piss him off its hard for him to calm down agreeing to everything he says is a good way to calm him down
thief - he would steal prey and herbs from other borders of other clans , not really caring if other tell him to stop or not.
rule breaker - put an eye on him because he can freely do that , you need to 'shake' him and tell him 'ok your slipping off but an eye open'
Likes:
being alone
the night
Dislikes:
being ignored
being alone (( depends on the cat ))
Other:
he just acts cold he wikll get nicer to cats he loves or has a crush on
Relationships
Orientation: gay as a gay dude in a gay bar
Looking: Yes
Ideal Relationship: a mate , one that will ignore his cold heart attitude and love him , in the end he wont be cold to his mate but more cheerful
Mentor: icebird (npc dead )
Apprentice: none
Mate: lookin for one
Ex-Mate(s): none
Best Friend(s): icebird (npc dead )
Kin: Crookedjaw ( big brother )
ExampleClan
Exampleheart | Gender | Relation to each other (friends, mates, family) | - Relationship Description
RP methods: (notes, skype, FB etc…)
notes - yes
comments - yes
chats - yes
from TheClansoftheValley
Sky popped out from one of the bushes, he was panting and breathing heavily from running , and the hot weather wasnt helping him , he turned around for a minute to look if some cats followed him .... to his luck they didnt , he
sighed much more relaxed.
Now the only problem he had was the heat his dark colored pelt made it harder to ignore the promblem , he looked around not alot of cats were around , didnt really surprised he walked over to sit under a tree hoping the heat will
leave him abit.
he thought for a moment about taking a rest and decided not to , they heat would get worse and maybe the clan cats would find him , sghed he layed down keeping a watch around for other cats.
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Comments: 6
You did very good at adding more information. The only thing is that the end of the history doesn't match the group's history since the current plot in the group is the cats moving to find a new home, not them settling into a new home.
As such the end of the history would be more like "Brokenspirit was determined to help all of his clan members get through the journal, ready to help all of them along the way" more so something like that.
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Okay, there are a few little things that need to be changed, but nothing too major.
First off you should tag The Wandering Clans at the top of the app. The next thing is that his father couldn't have been a leader, since FernClan's leader before Eaglestar was Cedarstar. Brokenspirit's father could however have been Cedarstar's deputy who died, making Eaglestar the next deputy.
The other thing is that you should have a part near the end of the history that describes his feelings about what happened as the two legs began to invade and as cats began to fall ill and die as a result of it, as well as his feelings about having to leave their home to find a new one.
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Just for the two legs invading and such, you don`t need to do it as it's own little separate part, it's better to just add it onto the end of the history in third person like:
Brokenspirit was angry when the two legs arrived, believing that they should claw their eyes out, hateful towards them due to his comrades that they had caused the death of
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