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Garon642 — PMD Jade Wanderer 5
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Published: 2018-05-11 04:35:17 +0000 UTC; Views: 961; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 1
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Before I begin I have to say that it usually takes a few chapters for me to get a good feel for a comic but this is what I have for now.
Vision is a 4.5 out of 5 because so far it has caught my interest in a way that not many others have(unsure if that is good or bad at this time)
Originality is a 3 of 5 simply because of the amount of PMD stuff on this and other sites(somewhat better than most for so far)
Technique is a 4 out of 5 because while above average it does need some work...
However I will admit that Fenikin and Rowlet are difficult to draw due to them being relatively new; then add in the fact that the art is likely to get progressively better as the story moves forward, and you get my rating.
Impact was the hardest for me to do as it is not far enough in the story for an accurate rating but so far i give you a 3.5 of 5 because... it's hard to really explain... lets just say I find it interesting enough for that rating and leave it there for now.
I hope to see more soon.
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Thanks for the critique! (I honestly forgot I had it open on this one.)
I am hoping to be have a more original plotline set in place once I get all the preliminary stuff out if the way. I’ve got some big plans ahead.
I’m glad you seem to like it enough so far! I invite you to check out the rest of the pages (up to 36 currently I think) and if you spot anything that you like or could use work, go ahead and tell me!
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A little, lightweighted Fennekin pushing a heavy Graveler like it was nothing?
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Well, a load of psychic/ magic power does help with that.
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Which Fennekin usually do not have access to yet.
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Unless they get a TM. Or unbalance the opponent.
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Did this one get that TM? If so, from where?
And even when unbalanced, Graveler's stance did not seem precarious enough to roll that far. Especially not enough when on steady terrain.
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I was slighty confused on which page you were commenting on before, sorry. The TM comes in later.
And as for the graveler, I drew myself into a corner and just dealt with it the only way I could think of.
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"Oh, I wow I guess. Yay me. Oh hey, look, a talking owl with a bowtie made of leaves. Don't see that every day."
I'm sorry I just can't get over how non-chalant about the who situation that Fennekin was, it was hilarious. Now I can't picture that Fennekin NOT saying everything like that. XD
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I’m glad to see you’re liking the comic. And he does have at least some knowledge of the Pokémon world. (Trying to write this otherwise would prove to be difficult.)
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Oh, my human-turned Pikachu OC is very similar in that regard. XD
Team Enterprise Begins Part 1
Team Enterprise Begins
Part 1
“Hey! Are you alright? Say something!”
A figure awoke to the sound of gentle waves and the sensation of something warm and gritty beneath his back. 'Sand…the ocean… This must be a beach…' the figure deduced to himself. Upon slowly opening his eyes, and seeing a blurry green shape in front of him, which quickly took focus into an image of a Chikorita, who had its two front paws placed firmly on his chest, as though trying to give him CPR, the figure growled, “Take ur’ stinkn’ paws off me you damn dirty Pokemon!”
Frowning, the Chikorita huffed in a female voice, “Fine. I won’t help you, then.”
As the female Chikorita began walking away, the figure assured to her with a light chuckle, “Hey, relax! I was just kidding!” After a brief pause, he then asked casually, “Hey, you wouldn’t happen t
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