Comments: 7
Smilygurl143 [2015-02-25 19:38:33 +0000 UTC]
Nice job here!
You've pretty much mastered your coloring, that much is quite evident from just looking at this, but I think you need to work on a few things still.
Just some stuff I noticed:
Shimi:
Her proportions are just slightly off, and here smile looks a little scary. Another thing: If you are going to make and MMO character, I would suggest not having them look at the onlooker as if they have life. Give them a blank look, and emphasize their surreal presence.
Try to make the metal on her seem more hard and reflective than soft and cloth-like.
Her posture is just a tad off and she seems to be leaning back in an odd, uncomfortable position.
You did a very good job with her design, and she looks unique and awesome.
Mio:
Okay, I feel like you didn't spend enough time just drawing her to make her an OC
She doesn't really have any distinctive features. You want her to look unique, special to you.
Her shoulder-to-chest and waist-to-foot proportions are also a little off.
Also work on her jawline, which looks offset and slanted, like two halves of different faces put together.
Other than that, she's really cute. You kind of make her look like the kind of girl who wouldn't play MMORPG, leaving a lot of space for story. This is a nice feature.
Overall, I really liked this piece.
Nice work!
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Fuugis In reply to Smilygurl143 [2015-02-25 20:09:39 +0000 UTC]
Oh, thank you for the comment, it was interesting to read because I haven't had such a long comment before :3
I'm glad to hear that you liked Shimi's design. In her outfit the "strong" parts are not metal, I have imagined them to look and more like strong plastic material which reflect light very little. Hmm, how to explain, well, kind of the material they would use in a space suits I guess? Sorry, my english is horrible, but I hope you understand even little what I'm trying to explain here XD
This MMO character is made more human like in purpose, because character is for improvisation comic, and it's hard to draw a character without any good face expressions, and blank faces are quite boring to watch. And the comic is based on future where people play games with oculus rifts where the part of players mind is allowed to get inside the virtual game, so I guess that allows the character to be more alive?
And about Mio: I desided to keep this character very simple because there's already lot of details in Shimi's design. And in the impro comic we will draw more Shimi than Mio, so Mio more like a side character.
After drawing Shimi's picture and spending so much time for colouring and etc. I thought that I will only make rough sketch about Mio's design that the other comic drawers know how she will look like.
But happy to hear that you overall liked the designs and thank you for writing so long comment! This feedback came really handy, thank you! n___n
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Fuugis In reply to Smilygurl143 [2015-02-26 00:02:21 +0000 UTC]
Yeah definitely, it's great to have long comments even once XD
Oh yeah, Mio is Shimi, but the happenings in the impro comic are mostly inside the game world where Mio's alter ego Shimi belongs, so we are going to draw Shimi more :3
And yes, SAO is a great anime! Loved season 1 and the second season was great too >w<
But hey, that's great! It's awesome that there's someone who wants to give proper feedback for the drawers n___n
Thank you!
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McRomu [2015-02-01 09:42:16 +0000 UTC]
Their designs are very cute! I especially like Shimi's color scheme :3
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Fuugis In reply to McRomu [2015-02-01 11:12:30 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, glad to hear that >w<
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